'Congratulation your homo sapiens just evolve into mega sapient' Also this this mean he is slowly turning into a stallion? Also I have being meaning to ask, if the community is a nudist, how Rarity is still a tailor? where did she get her income? And how can she make full set of cloths if everyone tops use bikinis? Did Canterlot or others town actually used normal cloths? did she made them for the elders? Did in this world cloth is more like body armour?
Also have she work male cloths before? Because if she gives Troy a dress, I think he will better off, keeping Zecora robe, witch by the by, where did it went? I think now that cloth will be just perfect for him since its a cape
Besides the typos, I kind of think this chapter should have been held off until later. Let the human and ponies get used to each other as is, establish a status quo, then break it with a transformation. As for the typos, I recommend something called Natural Reader. It's a free download that, as the name says, reads the text back to you. Just follow along and that should catch a good majority of typos.
yeah after coming out i could hear there fantasies going wild and maybe some dripping( i'll let you figure that one out) and yeah rainbow for some reason is always the bitch at the start and tends to stay there for a while next celly, lulu, candy girl (cadence most used nick name i've seen), gleaming, and flurry are going to get a eye full maybe even drag him into a random empty room and ride him for hours the lol's sense the princesses are the only ones to remember what a male looks like maybe not candy girl
8350919 either it is laying around twilight's castle or zecora took it when she left it's not a big thing to worry bout the think to wonder now is what will happen when celly and the other will do when they see a guy think of all the sexy things to happen i am think of them right now if what if that happened to me what would i do if it were me i think i would look at my self in the mirror then to the girls and back and forth a few times and ask "sooooo who wants to be first to go or do we wait for the new girls to come and see if they want to join" and tell rarity i only want pants lol
A while ago, I said that the characters, or at least some of them, were flanderized. The character who I think is currently being flanderized is Rainbow, with her aggressive attitude being blown up to an extreme degree.
“You’re treating him like how we treated Zecora when we first met. You can try to get to know him better.”
Actually, she's not treating him like Zecora. She hid from Zecora until she got affected by the poison joke, but the thing is, she never picked her up and slammed her against a wall. Rainbow is treating Troy like an untrustworthy, evil demon that will attempt to cause chaos, destruction, and just do horrible shit the moment she turns her back. She treated Discord better when he was a villain. I'm not quite sure how she'll warm up to try, because currently, she's acting like a bigot. The definition of bigot, according to Miriam-Webster, is "a person who is obstinately or intolerantly devoted to his or her own opinions and prejudices; especially : one who regards or treats the members of a group (such as a racial or ethnic group) with hatred and intolerance." Rainbow has an prejudice towards Troy, either because he's male or because he's not a pony, and she believes that he must be a horrible person that will do horrible things at any opportunity without just reason. In spite of the fact that Troy has shown that he was vastly weaker than all of them until now, when believed he would try to kill and rape them. He's not attacked anyone in any way, and has been shoved around, yet she stubbornly continues believing that he's evil. Most who are that entrenched in their prejudices will never be able to get rid of them, so I don't see how she'll eventually warm up to him, like you said she would.
8352064 IF he is immune to magic it could be interesting if the amulet made him that way but i'm sure the girls might be more in the wheelchairs and him with ice on his nuts cause all the sex i see him having. the princesses and guard captain coming to visit will be interesting tho when they see man meat for the first time in a long time i can see a tits too face scene coming with horny celly and lulu i'm kind of glad he didn't stay small like in the story XY Chromosome it would of made things hard later
What was even the point of making the mares amazonian if youre just gona make him a chad? That makes no sense thats just ignoring a major detail just cause someone wanted an excuse of buff chad who gets all the women and has no flaws, already major turn off for me but Ill see how it goes.
Well this meeting is going to go great. Let's see how Celestia, Luna, and Gleaming Shield take this development.
Moar!
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I agree with you on that 1, let us see how they react
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Want me to get some popcorn
Well I suppose we can say this
'Congratulation your homo sapiens just evolve into mega sapient' Also this this mean he is slowly turning into a stallion? Also I have being meaning to ask, if the community is a nudist, how Rarity is still a tailor? where did she get her income? And how can she make full set of cloths if everyone tops use bikinis? Did Canterlot or others town actually used normal cloths? did she made them for the elders? Did in this world cloth is more like body armour?
Also have she work male cloths before? Because if she gives Troy a dress, I think he will better off, keeping Zecora robe, witch by the by, where did it went? I think now that cloth will be just perfect for him since its a cape
nice now fir a month long wait for the next chapter, woohoo
Rewrite is better than the original.
God, why is RD being a bitch towards Tony ? 😤 Is she a tsundere or something ?
what gonna happen?
This just keeps getting better and better I can't wait to see what happens to them next.
Besides the typos, I kind of think this chapter should have been held off until later. Let the human and ponies get used to each other as is, establish a status quo, then break it with a transformation.
As for the typos, I recommend something called Natural Reader. It's a free download that, as the name says, reads the text back to you. Just follow along and that should catch a good majority of typos.
yeah after coming out i could hear there fantasies going wild and maybe some dripping( i'll let you figure that one out) and yeah rainbow for some reason is always the bitch at the start and tends to stay there for a while next celly, lulu, candy girl (cadence most used nick name i've seen), gleaming, and flurry are going to get a eye full maybe even drag him into a random empty room and ride him for hours the lol's sense the princesses are the only ones to remember what a male looks like maybe not candy girl
8348782 think of it like the show they wear outfits during special occasions like the gala and maybe dont cover much
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Oh that helps thanks
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no prob happy 2 help
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Now there is only the question of where did Zecora cape went?
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either it is laying around twilight's castle or zecora took it when she left it's not a big thing to worry bout the think to wonder now is what will happen when celly and the other will do when they see a guy think of all the sexy things to happen i am think of them right now if what if that happened to me what would i do if it were me i think i would look at my self in the mirror then to the girls and back and forth a few times and ask "sooooo who wants to be first to go or do we wait for the new girls to come and see if they want to join" and tell rarity i only want pants lol
Oh, so the last two chapters were much better than the first two, no glaring problems at all, keep up the good work!
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With what happen? and IF he is now inmune to magic? I can only assume it will end with a wheelchair
A while ago, I said that the characters, or at least some of them, were flanderized. The character who I think is currently being flanderized is Rainbow, with her aggressive attitude being blown up to an extreme degree.
Actually, she's not treating him like Zecora. She hid from Zecora until she got affected by the poison joke, but the thing is, she never picked her up and slammed her against a wall. Rainbow is treating Troy like an untrustworthy, evil demon that will attempt to cause chaos, destruction, and just do horrible shit the moment she turns her back. She treated Discord better when he was a villain. I'm not quite sure how she'll warm up to try, because currently, she's acting like a bigot. The definition of bigot, according to Miriam-Webster, is "a person who is obstinately or intolerantly devoted to his or her own opinions and prejudices; especially : one who regards or treats the members of a group (such as a racial or ethnic group) with hatred and intolerance." Rainbow has an prejudice towards Troy, either because he's male or because he's not a pony, and she believes that he must be a horrible person that will do horrible things at any opportunity without just reason. In spite of the fact that Troy has shown that he was vastly weaker than all of them until now, when believed he would try to kill and rape them. He's not attacked anyone in any way, and has been shoved around, yet she stubbornly continues believing that he's evil. Most who are that entrenched in their prejudices will never be able to get rid of them, so I don't see how she'll eventually warm up to him, like you said she would.
Just please don't turn this new story in to a fetish-mind-fuck and all rape the ponies/humans fic plz?
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IF he is immune to magic it could be interesting if the amulet made him that way but i'm sure the girls might be more in the wheelchairs and him with ice on his nuts cause all the sex i see him having. the princesses and guard captain coming to visit will be interesting tho when they see man meat for the first time in a long time i can see a tits too face scene coming with horny celly and lulu i'm kind of glad he didn't stay small like in the story XY Chromosome it would of made things hard later
Did you remade a World of Mares just so you could add the new characters of the show to it?
>>Update?
I feel like he is leaning more and more into becoming a Gary Stu
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To be fair, isn't this clip fic?
I can understand Sunset being a little annoyed by her robe being destroyed.
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Snu Snu will insure!!!! RUN MEME is good for him....
You really gotta decide if they are Alicorns or not.
For fuck sake, he was perfect and smol till that rock fucked with his body
What was even the point of making the mares amazonian if youre just gona make him a chad? That makes no sense thats just ignoring a major detail just cause someone wanted an excuse of buff chad who gets all the women and has no flaws, already major turn off for me but Ill see how it goes.
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IKR
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Happens every time.
Macguffin takes the conflict away.