I think the best punishment for Rainbow would be that Rainbow herself wants to fuck Troy, but Troy dismisses her. Maybe later in the story she can make up for it, but for the next few chapters i think the only mare Troy would refuse should be Rainbow
Not getting laid would be the best punishment for now
'She stops cleaning herself as her face and chest were clean, but her wings and her mane were still a mess. Her horn glowed again and her mane and wings were clean of any excess seed. She even cleaned the mess I made on the bed.'
I am not sure when this happened but when did Rarity get wings?
I REALLY hope Rainbow gets what she deserves. She should be sent to the dungeon, and raped by the guards. Or even better, tied up by Twi as a present for whenever Troy needs a little relief. Not getting laid wouldn't be a punishment because she hated him anyways.
Man RD is gonna feel like shit once it's discovered rarity initially raped him before he got into it. He has more to be worried from them then they do from him.
Ok, at first i wasnt keen on reading this do to the topics listed in it, but after reading the latest chapter i was pleasantly surprised. It felt natural and the whole build up and explanation on how these things can happen (not gonna give spoilers for those who want to read it) seems very possible. And the sex part was very tame compaired to other fics i came across. Im gonna keep following this and see where it goes, oh and please try not to go overboard with the kinks and fetishes, i think its solid the way it is now.
Different POVs is fine, but switching first and third person is awkward. There are still a lot of typos. Besides posting what you write to something like Microsoft Word, which would catch a lot of these errors, I'd also recommend reading out loud. If you need to take a breath, it means you need a punctuation. Twilight overthinking and wanting to keep Troy a secret fits her character nicely, but Rainbow really doesn't need to be so bitchy. Rarity being so rapey was also not very welcome and that whole scene could have been handled a lot better. Rape followed by physical assault was not enjoyable. When was there a mind reading thing? If that was spell in a previous chapter, you should really do something to remind us of its existence earlier on. There was even a point where you said Rarity had wings.
Rarity shouldn't be ending sentences with "Darling" so often. Also, by the way, didn't Troy get transformed into what is essentially a giant? So, why couldn't he easily punch RD in the head, of elbow her?
i dont know who the first person to use rut as a term for sex but they need a fucking bashing.. its root... rut is what deer go into when they fight for a mate. -_- root is what you do when you fuck. god.
If it wasn’t for the fact that I was worried about meeting more ponies right now, I would find this situation pretty hilarious. Twilight was in full on panic mode as she was talking to herself, and was pacing around the room.
If it’s been 1200 years without any males or anatomical information available on males except very ancient tomes accessible to only a few, how does Rarity have any idea what to do?
I think the best punishment for Rainbow would be that Rainbow herself wants to fuck Troy, but Troy dismisses her. Maybe later in the story she can make up for it, but for the next few chapters i think the only mare Troy would refuse should be Rainbow
Not getting laid would be the best punishment for now
Wow happen longer then expected i thought halfway on the kinky moment someone would barge in
How did innocent My little Pony Get so perverted by these stupid clop fics?
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Rule 34: If it exists, there is porn of it.
I am not sure when this happened but when did Rarity get wings?
Another great chapter. This made my day
OMG that was awesome I can't to see what happens next,This just keep getting better and better.
I cant wait for the next one
HELL YEAH A NEW CHAPTER AWESOME MAN
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No matter how disgusting it is, like Tetris *Shudder*. Most of the so called internet rules are complete bullshit, because it was just for fun
I REALLY hope Rainbow gets what she deserves. She should be sent to the dungeon, and raped by the guards. Or even better, tied up by Twi as a present for whenever Troy needs a little relief. Not getting laid wouldn't be a punishment because she hated him anyways.
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Nice and now to wait another f****** month
Man RD is gonna feel like shit once it's discovered rarity initially raped him before he got into it. He has more to be worried from them then they do from him.
Ok, at first i wasnt keen on reading this do to the topics listed in it, but after reading the latest chapter i was pleasantly surprised. It felt natural and the whole build up and explanation on how these things can happen (not gonna give spoilers for those who want to read it) seems very possible. And the sex part was very tame compaired to other fics i came across.
Im gonna keep following this and see where it goes, oh and please try not to go overboard with the kinks and fetishes, i think its solid the way it is now.
8391268 dude chill people do it as "what could happen if someone appered into equestria" senario
Different POVs is fine, but switching first and third person is awkward. There are still a lot of typos. Besides posting what you write to something like Microsoft Word, which would catch a lot of these errors, I'd also recommend reading out loud. If you need to take a breath, it means you need a punctuation.
Twilight overthinking and wanting to keep Troy a secret fits her character nicely, but Rainbow really doesn't need to be so bitchy. Rarity being so rapey was also not very welcome and that whole scene could have been handled a lot better. Rape followed by physical assault was not enjoyable.
When was there a mind reading thing? If that was spell in a previous chapter, you should really do something to remind us of its existence earlier on.
There was even a point where you said Rarity had wings.
what are gonna happen next chapter?
Rarity shouldn't be ending sentences with "Darling" so often. Also, by the way, didn't Troy get transformed into what is essentially a giant? So, why couldn't he easily punch RD in the head, of elbow her?
How would she know the word Mr. ?
Do you know words that have been dead for decades ?
This is pretty much just plain old porn now....no plot just alot of "plot" if you know what I mean
i dont know who the first person to use rut as a term for sex but they need a fucking bashing.. its root... rut is what deer go into when they fight for a mate. -_- root is what you do when you fuck. god.
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2012 called, it wants its facetious complaints back.
That Title... sounds scary...
If it’s been 1200 years without any males or anatomical information available on males except very ancient tomes accessible to only a few, how does Rarity have any idea what to do?