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My heart will sing no other name! Jesus! Jesus!


[A/N: This is an unofficial sequel to alexmagnet's Mahou Shoujo Spike-chan. I'd recommend reading that first. Enjoy!]

Spike never really wanted to be a magical mare, but he has since gotten over it after making his contract. Now, he rather enjoys being the hero and keeping Ponykind safe from harm. Celestia did entrust him with the mission of hunting down monsters after all, and he had no desire to fail his princess.

Well, at least, not before being confronted by Fluttershy, telling him he was stupid for making the magical mare contract.

Spike begins to wonder if all the feats he performs for society are worth anything.

What will happen when he succumbs to his grief? Did he not know that that is the fate of all Magical Mares?
Additional Author's Note: With permission from alexmagnet, I've been given the opportunity to write this unofficial sequel. However, he used a mix of common magical girl anime tropes, whereas I'm going to try funneling all of that into a crossover based on Mahou Shoujo Madoka Magica. With that said, this is going to be considerably darker than the original. I hope you enjoy it. Also, the image was taken from this video.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 23 )

Dude you just gave away the twist with Fluttershy


I'm faving this story, because it's unique.

I like how Fluttershy takes on Homura's role. Nice touch.

Please continue it.

5011342 I'm glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

Sadly, I don't know of how I could continue this, so I doubt this will get a sequel. :twilightsheepish:

5011342 Scratch that, changed my mind.

Writing a sequel right now.:twilightsmile:

5070611 In fact, I've found a way to convince myself to make this a trilogy (as seen with the title change. :raritywink:)

sooo skimmed the whole thing , and it's complete , where was the part why this was added to the ponies big and small group?....

5087789 Tiny Twilight in the first chapter.

Meh, it was a stretch, but hey, I thought I'd try. :twilightsmile:

5087856 oh i see , but why did that even happen?.....

5088636 Well, like I said in description's author's note, this was an unofficial sequel to alexmagnet's Mahou Shoujo Spike-chan. :applejackunsure:

As someone who didn't want to ruin all continuity of his story with the sequel, I used some of his elements, even though I wanted to take it in a different direction. :unsuresweetie:

I think the reason he did it was because he used a whole bunch of common Magical Girl Anime tropes, wherein the main heroine usually has a small, magical sidekick. :twilightsmile:

I like the premise of this story. I was a fan of Black Butler for a while so I liked the contract aspect. The twist ending was pretty good too. In future stories, you can take your current skill with dramatic tension and refine it. It's getting there, but for much of the time I feel as a reader that I'm being rushed along to the next thing, especially towards the end.

I am a big fan of the details about this darker otherworld that you worked in, and I like the bit where Fluttershy replenished her own gem.

In response to your authors note at the end: probably because you misused 'their' and 'there' a few times. I did not dislike, because I decided to comment instead.

This is a good story. I look forward to seeing your other work as you grow as a writer.

5268404 Well, thank you for your input, I will definitely keep those things in mind! :twilightsmile:

I just read the description and I am goijg to read it. But first, is this based on the anime Puella Magi? The two's basis seem incredably similar.

EpicNinjaGamer, your problem is spacing, you have a constant wall of text, just make paragraphs.

5344965 Alrighty, I'm working on it! There are paragraphs, but the 'lines' (I guess that's the correct term?) must be rather muddled.

I'm working on remedying that.

I deeply enjoy this story; you did all the characters justice, and the Madoka Magica plot was very well-excecuted.

5667672 Thank ya! :rainbowkiss:

And that sequel I promised way back when is almost done! :rainbowwild:

Comment posted by CaxmtheNobody deleted Nov 7th, 2016
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