There's one thing I want to ask, just to be 100% clear. Is Scootaloo dating Babs is this story? I simply ask because the dialogue is a bit ambiguous who she was referring to as her best friend and girlfriend, and I'm leaning towards Babs being the girlfriend because of the back rub she gave Scootaloo.
Man, you just can't help yourself when it comes to making new stories, can you? (Not that that's a bad thing at all, but do you have any plans for Friendship is Shining or Shard in the near future? Come on, just a taste! )
*self-smack*
Sorry. As for this one, I'm certainly intrigued. This first chapter here still leaves me really wondering just what went on in DT's head that will lead her to joining the Guard. I imagine that the levels of "Wut?" will be through the roof when the others find out.
4874251 Noooooo. Don't scrap it. Why would you do that? Seriously though, I don't think you should. Similar ideas are used all the time, especially around here. Considering what I see you have written, I doubt there would be many similarities in the result anyways.
I'm really liking this so far. The characters all feel believable and I'm intrigued to find out what's next.
There's one thing I want to ask, just to be 100% clear. Is Scootaloo dating Babs is this story? I simply ask because the dialogue is a bit ambiguous who she was referring to as her best friend and girlfriend, and I'm leaning towards Babs being the girlfriend because of the back rub she gave Scootaloo.
4872296 Yes. Yes she is. I thought it would be fun to have the two tomboyish mares dating, so they are.
This is... interesting. I think I'll tag along, see how it goes.
This seems interesting, however I have to ask, why does Twilight need guards in the first place?
4872961 she doesnt. but neither do celestia and luna, and they have them anyway
Goddamnit. You stole my idea.
Now I'm gonna have to scrap that story I've been working on.
Badass Tiara?!
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Seriously, a long time since I saw an original concept around here.
I wonder what conversation will now take place between the Shopkeeper's Princess and the favourite trainee artisan of the Goddess of the Moon?
Man, you just can't help yourself when it comes to making new stories, can you? (Not that that's a bad thing at all, but do you have any plans for Friendship is Shining or Shard in the near future? Come on, just a taste! )
*self-smack*
Sorry. As for this one, I'm certainly intrigued. This first chapter here still leaves me really wondering just what went on in DT's head that will lead her to joining the Guard. I imagine that the levels of "Wut?" will be through the roof when the others find out.
Makes sense that Snips and Snails would grow out of their "awkward" phase. Poor pony, she's really gonna have to get some anger management.
4874251 Noooooo. Don't scrap it. Why would you do that?
Seriously though, I don't think you should. Similar ideas are used all the time, especially around here. Considering what I see you have written, I doubt there would be many similarities in the result anyways.
Hmm... You have my curiosity.
please right more i love it pleasr
I wish to know more
Promising...
Very promising.
~Skeeter The Lurker
With...with who? I think you're missing something here.
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Good start, and I like how Sweets is planning to help hide the body.
Body? Where she's taking her, her body will be gone before she's dead!
You realize by the end of this, there won't BE a body.
Hey, true friends will help you bury a body. So this all checks out to me. :3