"I'm sure you're so upset about that," she said, rolling her eyes.
Heh.
"Keep shaking it like that," Diamond Tiara stated, "and I'm going to have to give it a good spanking." "Mmmm, tempting," Apple Bloom purred as she narrowed her eyes, "but I think that we should save that for another time." She gave a wink.
Pity.
And she was loving it. She was getting off from it.
Interesting.
The shifting of the bed drew her attention. Turning her head slightly, she watched as Apple Bloom moved to cuddle up against her, placing a single kiss on her chest before laying down and closing her eyes. Smiling, Diamond Tiara moved to face Apple Bloom and put a hoof around her. She nuzzled the farm mare one more time and gave her a kiss on the forehead. After a moment, she felt her own eyes close as well.
And next morning they woke up with a killer hangover, man I wonder how this is gonna play out.
... I have one problem with this whole thing - it feels EXTREMELY rushed. I guess it could be blamed on alcohol, but that would take a lot more alcohol, I think.
I found something in this chapter that kinda bothers me. It seems like a word is missing in between these words.
Nitpicks:
erroneous duplication
Although this gave me an amusing mental image, I'm pretty sure this should be "nicker".
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I don't believe this story required any... Clop. You could have just skipped this scene and let the more, dark, bronies fill in the rest.
5307410 there was fair warning
Heh.
Pity.
Interesting.
And next morning they woke up with a killer hangover, man I wonder how this is gonna play out.
Well, that was hot. Pity DT just used Bloom to get off rather than grinding them together (tribbing) but it was still pretty damn sexy.
Tomorrow will be fun.
... I have one problem with this whole thing - it feels EXTREMELY rushed. I guess it could be blamed on alcohol, but that would take a lot more alcohol, I think.