4920936 4921088 I did say that story and character tags will be adjusted as the story progresses.
4921141 I can't have adventure and slice of life at the same time, and I want to try to make it more action and adventure oriented in later chapters. If it keeps going the way it is, I'll change it. If I can get it more toward what I originally had in mind, then I'll be able to keep it as is.
4920936 It might not be the main focus of the story in future chapters? I don't know, good question though! So far it has been really romance based, with no main, huge evil to fight, like with a lot more adventure based stories.
Edit: Nevermind, he added a Romance Tag. Cool story!
4923052 In ponyville, I think twilgiht's guard's main role would probably be keeping ponyville safe. Twilight and the rest of her friends (Discord included) are danger magnets. Discord being one of them when he first visited the town.
I noticed a few typos, try going back through all your posted chapters and see if you can spot them and hit edit to fix them. Also I would would recommend a proofreader, if you decide to go with one make sure they're someone you trust and is alright with MLP if they aren't a fan.
after going through basic training myself I must say that was really mean of apple bloom to send cookies because when I was in basic if anybody was sent "treats" like that they would have to push ups for every one of them
Diamond Tiara set the letter aside and looked in the envelope. Finding the picture, she pulled it out. There was an image of Apple Bloom, stretched out on the same bed that they had shared, with her mane falling around her face. Bloom's golden eyes were half close, and the edges of her mouth curved up in a faint smile.
*gulp*
A part of her still cringed at the idea of admitting she was wrong. Still, she had to grow up and admit to her mistakes. After trying one of those cookies. They sounded delicious.
I'm sure they are. Also, I like how she's taking this fairly well.
Great story, but after this chapter i feel forced to ask :
Why no romance tag ?
Did her hair grow back to length?
i have a sneaky suspicvion daimond is going to have some raw talent with a sword, not tremendous amounts but something to build from.
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I agree why no Romance Tag?
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yep, also the 'slice of life' tag might work as well.
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I did say that story and character tags will be adjusted as the story progresses.
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I can't have adventure and slice of life at the same time, and I want to try to make it more action and adventure oriented in later chapters. If it keeps going the way it is, I'll change it. If I can get it more toward what I originally had in mind, then I'll be able to keep it as is.
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Ah ok. It was a simple question, can't wait to read DT's answer. Keep up the good work
4920936 It might not be the main focus of the story in future chapters? I don't know, good question though! So far it has been really romance based, with no main, huge evil to fight, like with a lot more adventure based stories.
Edit: Nevermind, he added a Romance Tag. Cool story!
This was a really well done chapter, good job.
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would imply that this is something that happens pretty regularly in their home-town.
4923052 In ponyville, I think twilgiht's guard's main role would probably be keeping ponyville safe. Twilight and the rest of her friends (Discord included) are danger magnets. Discord being one of them when he first visited the town.
4923090 Alright, or y'know, you can have both tags?
I noticed a few typos, try going back through all your posted chapters and see if you can spot them and hit edit to fix them. Also I would would recommend a proofreader, if you decide to go with one make sure they're someone you trust and is alright with MLP if they aren't a fan.
That's just cute.
after going through basic training myself I must say that was really mean of apple bloom to send cookies because when I was in basic if anybody was sent "treats" like that they would have to push ups for every one of them
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Um, no.
Well then.
At least she's trying to stay calm.
*gulp*
I'm sure they are. Also, I like how she's taking this fairly well.
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I doubt Discord would need much protection, anything that could actually hurt HIM, is most likely to not be stopped by a pony. Just sayin'.
I was wondering what had happened. Glad to see a potential relationship for those two.