Shouldn't their CO be supervising them on their first field assignment? At least to cover their ass in case of cataclysmic failure, or if the team needs someone to handle the situation with care and experience? Granted, Tomes may be just that and this is a test exercise, but it leaves me questioning this. I suppose taking into account ponies are harder than a brick shithouse with all the monsters and evil living within walking distance, it makes more sense for things to be a little different.
"Besides, she already has experience bossing others around. Might as well let her put the skills to use."
You got them jokes son.
D and Di. Or Di and D.
CEASE AND DESIST THIS ADORABLENESS! (screw that, do it some more!)
This wasn't fair. I go to the front page. See this story on updates. See my notification feed with (1) after I JUST checked it while ago and BAM it really was a new chapter. What is it with people not wanting me to sleep tonight? Steam chats, skype, and then reading two updated stories (this included) back to back! xD
4984260 They're travelling a well-marked path through a part of the forest that Twilight and company were traversing without fear throughout season four. It's literally a walk in the park.
4984352 Tell that to the star beasts, evil chickens, poisonous flowers, wandering abominations, and the occasional wandering Mary Sue that stumbles into random fanfics.
Let's not forget the giant eels, evils buried long deep, monster tentacle vines, and wandering diamond dogs. And that huge ball of parasprites.
4987522A Silver Marriage, Manehattan Blues (last two chapters including the epilogue) and a few other stories I was working on commenting on when I was refreshing my other monitor to see if any new stories or mail came up.
Not to mention ended up finishing this story while trying to make a PB&J and came back to both Metroid Equus and I SHOULD OF NEVER BOUGHT THAT PONY which is an AMAZINGLY fun story of a genre I normally don't enjoy, as many just never seem to make their stories feel relatable and everyone's evil. But yeah, check out Final Draft's story as well, ISHNBTP is a fun ride!
Dinky repeated, "Can I call you Di?" She shifted and continued. "Now that we're on our first mission and out of training, I figure we should relax a little, be more like friends. I also don't want to have to keep calling you by your full name, Diamond Tiara. So I figured I would call you Di, and you could call me Dinks." "...Dinks?" "Yeah. Short for Dinky. Sounds better than Dink. I suppose you could just call me D. That would be kind of interesting. D and Di. Or Di and D. I think I would prefer Dinks though. So, can I call you Di, or would you prefer DT?"
You're crazy.
"Seems a bit odd," Dinky said, "but okay. Anyway, Whatever You Want, there's nothing wrong with being nervous. In point, it can be a good thing. Might make you more attentive to what's going on around you and react faster when things go badly. You have to be careful though. If you wear yourself out before we start, you're not going to be very capable if and when you need to be."
Can't tell if Sarcasm Blind or Troll.
"First, some rules," Diamond Tiara stated. "Stay close to each other, keep to the trail, listen to us, and don't touch anything in the forest. There are plants out there that are just as dangerous as any creature, if not more so. Everypony clear?"
And some like Poison Joke lead to hilarious results.
"First, are you the same pony you were back in elementary school?" Rumble asked. "No," Featherweight answered. "Would you want ponies to treat you the same way they did back then?" "Probably not." "Second..." Rumble paused, considering a moment. He then took a deep breath. "Dinky says that she's trying to change. You know, trying to be a better pony than she used to be. So we need to give her a chance to redeem herself and prove she's a better pony than she was back then."
Fair enough.
"Besides, she already has experience bossing others around. Might as well let her put the skills to use."
away -> anyway
Bang. When i got to the end this story only had 1 view. Man had i not took a piss break i would been first read and comment xD
Shouldn't their CO be supervising them on their first field assignment? At least to cover their ass in case of cataclysmic failure, or if the team needs someone to handle the situation with care and experience? Granted, Tomes may be just that and this is a test exercise, but it leaves me questioning this. I suppose taking into account ponies are harder than a brick shithouse with all the monsters and evil living within walking distance, it makes more sense for things to be a little different.
Nice chapter, but there's one thing you may want to edit.
It seems like a couple of words should be placed in between these two words. I would recommend "with a".
and
__________
were
__________
^_^
You got them jokes son.
CEASE AND DESIST THIS ADORABLENESS!
(screw that, do it some more!)
This wasn't fair. I go to the front page. See this story on updates. See my notification feed with (1) after I JUST checked it while ago and BAM it really was a new chapter. What is it with people not wanting me to sleep tonight? Steam chats, skype, and then reading two updated stories (this included) back to back! xD
I'm such an addict.
4984260 They're travelling a well-marked path through a part of the forest that Twilight and company were traversing without fear throughout season four. It's literally a walk in the park.
4984352
Tell that to the star beasts, evil chickens, poisonous flowers, wandering abominations, and the occasional wandering Mary Sue that stumbles into random fanfics.
Let's not forget the giant eels, evils buried long deep, monster tentacle vines, and wandering diamond dogs. And that huge ball of parasprites.
This is a pretty short chapter, I'm kind of disappointed at that. Although the set up for the next chapter, possibly chapters, is nice
Double D's? Not the best idea.
4984477 Ponies would never get the innuendo! THE HORROR!
4987251 Which would lead to inexplicable laughter on the part of any visiting Minotaurs however.
4984343 Really? What was the other one?
4987522 A Silver Marriage, Manehattan Blues (last two chapters including the epilogue) and a few other stories I was working on commenting on when I was refreshing my other monitor to see if any new stories or mail came up.
Not to mention ended up finishing this story while trying to make a PB&J and came back to both Metroid Equus and I SHOULD OF NEVER BOUGHT THAT PONY which is an AMAZINGLY fun story of a genre I normally don't enjoy, as many just never seem to make their stories feel relatable and everyone's evil. But yeah, check out Final Draft's story as well, ISHNBTP is a fun ride!
Why am I getting a real Luna Lovegood vibe from Dinky?
You're crazy.
Can't tell if Sarcasm Blind or Troll.
And some like Poison Joke lead to hilarious results.
Fair enough.
And your gonna make a hole in the floor