wow read this in less than 3 minutes... great story and chapter, but... try to write at least 2k to 3k words and post your chapters consistently. every 2 or 3 days for 4,000 words or less, every 4-7 days for 5,000+.... those are the most popular.. great story though cant wait for more! wait for more!
I didn't even know one of my fav background ponies in Trade Ya had any fanart done of her. That is AWESOME.
Also, that way you did a call back to the poison taking Diamond as it crept up her body was just awesomely done. Diamond must of been born under a lucky star. I need to stop before I start references scenes or whatever else from the Suikoden 108 stars of Destiny legends and games xD
Diamond is probably going to get an official commendation for getting her flank and Rumble's back in only a few pieces and keeping Dinky focussed enough to evac the principals. This will be followed up by a private dressing-down for doing something so stupid as taking on a Manticore on her own.
"Oh, crap," Diamond Tiara groaned. "I'm in the hospital, aren't I?"
Most likely.
"Could you repeat that? I think I must have gotten some mud or something in my ears, because it sounded like you said-"
Rumble, don't be a moron.
"The manticore's venom," the doctor explained, "is a paralytic. A single dose can immobilize a full grown pony for several hours. Most of the time, the pony is able to recover. However, there is a possibility of it proving fatal. That's with a regular dose from a single sting."
Yikes.
"As near as we can tell, you had close to three times the normal amount in your body when you were brought in."
Double yikes.
"In theory?" He shifted. "When the venom reached your lungs or heart to become immobile. As a result, your brain would have been unable to get the necessary oxygen. Supposedly, it would be relatively painless."
Oh. Dark.
"To start with," Commander Serena stated as she moved forward, "you're not in trouble. Nopony is being held responsible for what happened in the forest."
I likey the picture! Very nice, and glad it got used in this story.
Congrats on reaching the feature box again!
(I can't remember if it's been there before or not, but it definitely deserves to be.)
This story keeps me thrilled for the next chapter. Keep it up.
tomes better get in trouble for this.
Awesome chapter.
5037468 It has been.
wow read this in less than 3 minutes... great story and chapter, but... try to write at least 2k to 3k words and post your chapters consistently. every 2 or 3 days for 4,000 words or less, every 4-7 days for 5,000+.... those are the most popular.. great story though cant wait for more! wait for more!
5038206 Thanks, I thought so!
(...does the down-vote on my comment saying it deserves to be there imply that someone thinks it doesn't deserve it or what?)
Whoa. Diamond. You. Are one. Extremely lucky mare.
I imagine that Diamond is going to quite the reward for this. Nice chapter, and I look forward to the next one.
~ Super-Brony12
Oh. Looks like someone's up for a promotion.
I didn't even know one of my fav background ponies in Trade Ya had any fanart done of her. That is AWESOME.
Also, that way you did a call back to the poison taking Diamond as it crept up her body was just awesomely done. Diamond must of been born under a lucky star. I need to stop before I start references scenes or whatever else from the Suikoden 108 stars of Destiny legends and games xD
Another military tradition: the debriefing.
Diamond is probably going to get an official commendation for getting her flank and Rumble's back in only a few pieces and keeping Dinky focussed enough to evac the principals. This will be followed up by a private dressing-down for doing something so stupid as taking on a Manticore on her own.
I was kind of hoping it would be longer. I look forward to the next chapter.
Very nice story you have here,
Most likely.
Rumble, don't be a moron.
Yikes.
Double yikes.
Oh. Dark.
Phew.
I'd use "at ease"... if she wasn't bedridden.
I have to say, the Commander there looks a bit like Ms. Cake with a mean streak