Twilight is surronded by ponies that look like her friends and act like her friends, but aren't her friends.
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That was... sudden. I like your writing style, but I'm kinda confused as to why Twilight's first reaction was to attack this "Spike Imposter". I see her questioning him, being suspicious of him, and trying to 'subtly' interrogate him, but not throw something at Spike. Quite a violent response that asks a lot of questions about how sane Twi is normally.
Otherwise, you have a solid grasp of the tone of each character's voice, something that's always good to see. Just a tad fast.
Hurray for capgras syndrome! The creepiest mental disease out there.
Skrulls! They're all Skrulls!
so are they impostors or not? :rainbow huh: I guess I'll just have to wait and find out...
4469644
That's the question, isn't it?
*snickers* pinkie is probably throwing a giant for for the "new ponies"
4610500
I wouldn't put it past her.
You walk into your home only to find that someone has replaced everything inside with exact duplicates.
What do you do?
@playnwin...
excerpted...
I am guessing that the underlined part of this chapter (3) I excerpted means a portion got cut off or deleted accidentally, since the last line sounds like Fluttershy managed to escape her escorts and join her fellow Elements Bearers.
4610886
Actually, that was intentional. It was a narrative technique to show the sudden loss of conscious thought that the guardsponies experienced. I apologize if this was unclear.
4611797 ...
Then, if I might offer a corrective revision suggestion and lesson...
original version...
revised...
So the writing-lesson point is... The writing technique to showing interruption is to use a hyphen attached to a word mid-sentence or phrase (as shown above); or more often, cutting off a word mid-spelling ("No ma'am. There doesn't appear to b-").
Hope this helps clarify.
4611950
Maybe better now.
Tis better now, at least in my own opinion... Let's see how this goes over folks. And can we get a bookie in here for bets on crazy versus stuff happening versus both?
Two words;
Capgras syndrome.
Sorry... I haven't even read this story, I just saw the description and had to make a guess.
5038694
Right on. I thought it might be fun to give Twilight Capgras. Then it turned into an adventure arc. What can you do?
5038720
It's a fun idea; I recognized this as easily as I did because I've been writing a similar story and I had to do literal hours of research for it. Psychiatry is always a fun angle to look at, if it's done correctly.
When's chapter 5 coming out?
5102818
It's in the works. I've been having some trouble staying motivated, but people like you really help!
(Note to self: write more.)
5102916 Thanks!
5102916
Mooooooooore!... If you want to, that is.
Either some sort of new changeling, or Twilight has capgras syndrome.
Just a tiny mistake.
Also, CAPGRAS SYNDROME CONFIRMED!
Needs to be his, instead of her.
Also,
Then is supposed to be 'the'.
4610608 a question: how do i know i'm not the duplicate
5102916
hear, hear