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TheMightyT


A Dreamwalker, hoping to share the stories he keeps.

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Subject Delta, an Alpha Series Big Daddy, has been through a lot in his life. But this is his last stand, he and his Daughter Eleanor are going to escape from Rapture. The Pairbonding destroyed, his body tired from all the fighting ... Subject Delta won't live to see the world beyond Rapture. The ending coming near, he finds himself escaping Rapture ... to only awake in a stranger place. Will Equestria be able to handle Subject Delta?

--Crossover with BioShock 2--

Author's Note: First, criticism is highly appreciated. Second, this isn't my first fanfic rodeo, but it's the first time in English. Errors will ensue, so feel free to correct me! Third, I hope you enjoy the story!


Copyright: My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic (Hasbro), BioShock 2 (2K Games), Cover Image (The BioShock Wiki).

Tags: Crossover, Alternate Universe, Human, Dark. --Will be updated--

Characters: Subject Delta, Eleanor Lamb, Sofia Lamb, The Family, Twilight Sparkle, Spike, Rarity, Applejack, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, Princess Celestia, Princess Luna, Augustus Sinclair, Yi Suchong, Andrew Ryan, Shadow Stalker. --Will be updated--

Chapters (10)
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Comments ( 625 )

TheMightyT here. I'm hoping you'll enjoy the story, if not; well, all criticism is highly appreciated.

If you have any questions, ask them here in the comments or PM me. :twilightsmile:

Also, tell me if you want me to continue this ... .


TheMightyT Out.

FIRST!!! jk but the story looks promising.:twilightsmile:

Ok Spoiler?And nice job!

Hmm. It intrigues me, I will keep track of this story.

I take it his Daughter is dead or will she also show up later on?

The funny thing was that I automatically popped in sounds of the lighthouse and blasted pairbonds.

Just curious - do you have any specific Plasmid powers for Subject Delta to have?

Just some things i noticed in the story that looks weird.
"Augustus’ dead was necessary in many ways, but he had hoped he didn’t had to kill the man who had helped him along his journey. But he would not get Augustus’ dead be in vain."

first "Augustus’ >death< was necessary in many ways, but he had hoped he didn't >have< to kill the man who had helped him along his journey. but he would not >let< Augustus’ >death< be in vain."

"Like Augustus one said" once said. "Eleanor just needed more time, time he would be making." This is just me but i think you should remove that last part and just have "Eleanor just needed more time."

"The words of Eleanor’s mother resonated" Write Sofia Lamb insted its beter. "Dead was standing out front, waiting for him." Death not dead. "His body was given up" >Giving up< His body is about to stop it hasent stoped yet.

puhh i will return and look through the other half later. but i like the idea. Just try to get a prereader for future shapters.

Solid story bro.

I feel for you on the whole multiple languages of fan-fictions your writing. Going from one language to another while still being descriptive is hard.

Awesome, and to think I just beat Bioshock 2 a couple weeks ago. And I also second the motion for what plasmids and tonics this Delta has.

Good structure, slight use of cliches though ("Twilight messes up a spell", used all too often although I can't be sure yet), some mistakes, for that I would suggest getting a pre-reader to catch things that you might miss or fix grammar mistakes seeing as your first language isn't English. Keep up the good work!

good story. personaly i'm very forgiving in terms of grammer. your mistakes mainly consisted of mixing up past/present tense so it was fairly understandable.
there was only one bit that baffled me.
"Dead was standing out front, waiting for him" not quite sure what this bit was supposed to mean:rainbowhuh:

See? I told you your story was awesome! I'm so proud to have you as my editor! :pinkiehappy: :rainbowdetermined2:

It would be interesting if he could use the research camera on the ponies. He could get teleportation from twilight a solar ray/blast ability from celestial and 4th wall break from pinkie.

Wow, I go get some shuteye, and suddenly 80 notifications. :derpyderp1:
It seems you guys are loving this story, so expect Chapter 2 popping up in a couple of hours. :twilightsmile:

And now it's time to answer some questions! :rainbowdetermined2:


259559 259588 259616 *Well, thank you! :twilightblush: Expect a spoiler at the end of this post! :yay:

259637 *I take it his Daughter is dead or will she also show up later on? That is one hell of a question. :twilightsmile: Let's just say ... you'll see that in a future chapter. :trollestia:

259644 *Yeah, I love that soundtrack too. Makes me want to write even more, and it's a good way to get in the 'writer'-mood. :twilightsmile:

259651 259969 260900 *Just curious - do you have any specific Plasmid powers for Subject Delta to have? Eh, I was thinking about that. And I'm not completely sure I can tell the plasmids I maybe will use, because that will surely change ... . I can confirm that he only has one weapon though, his drill; but for plasmids? I will give you a possible list, but it will surely change. Possible Gene Tonics: Drill Lurker, Drill Power (1&2), Fountain of Youth, Keen observer (1&2), Sports Boost, and maybe something like Medical Expert/Handman (with other use than in the game) or Elemental Storm (with an other use than in the game). Possible Plasmids: Decoy, Electro Bolt, Incinerate, Telekinesis.(Cyclone Trap, just to get Pinkie Pie away from Subject Delta.) But just remember this, Subject Delta is not in Rapture anymore. He has spend all his EVE in that last battle, so ... don't expect him killing stuff too frequently with Plasmids. He is in a world with strange rules, and some of his Plasmids & Gene Tonics will have different effects. And if I decide, being the Author, that Incinerate becomes Electro Bolt than I'll just direct you to the "Alternate Universe"-tag. Not that I'm going to do something like that, but just a warning that things are going to be different than in BioShock 2. :derpytongue2: And to answer another question: Yes, he still has his Research Camera -it's a part of his helmet- and possible his Hack Tool -But it's useless in Equestria-. And maybe I'll write a troll chapter with a '4th wall breaking' Gene Tonic. :trollestia:

259724 260427 260527 *Going to correct those mistakes. Even after reading it 3 times, it still has mistakes. :facehoof: It's the burden of any author, the curse of not being able to spot mistakes in a story you write yourself. Also, my use of 'Dead' is indeed not right. It should be 'Death' in those sentences, I'm going to correct that in a bit. Yeah, for the cliché way ... I had some other ideas, but I sticked with that one. It's was kinda necessary to my Chapter 2, so ... . Yes, I know that 'Twilight messes up a spell' is used frequently, but this program I have on my computer (Plot-hole thingamajig.exe) told me it was better to use a cliché than just magically bringing Subject Delta to Equestria. :trollestia: Maybe I'll release a chapter in the future with a different way of bringing Subject Delta to Equestria. Who knows? :moustache: I will take that advice, searching for a proofreader as I write this. :twilightsmile:

259751 *I feel for you on the whole multiple languages of fan-fictions your writing. Going from one language to another while still being descriptive is hard. Yeah, I feel your pain too, brother. *Brohoof*

260586 *Thank you, friend, thank you. Everyone, read his story, it's quite good. And I'm a proofreader, so I know it's good. :rainbowdetermined2:
Question: Do you have some time left to be a proofreader? :twilightsmile:


Okay, that was a lot of writing. 23 likes and only 1 dislike, I can not express my emotions through writing ... have an emoticon! :heart:

And I didn't forget that spoiler I promised! Enjoy! :twilightsmile: *SPOILER ALERT*

***
“For every choice, there is an echo. Which each act, we change the world. One man chose a city, free of law and God, but others chose corruption and so the city fell. If the world was reborn at your image, would it be paradise … or perdition?”

“The Rapture dream is over, but in waking I am reborn. This world is not ready for me, yet here I am. … but in waking, I’m alone.”
***

And have some more! *SPOILER ALERT*

***
The trees became a blur and he heard another scream and some kind of howling ... Splicers? No, maybe wolves … what were wolves even, and how did he know that? No time, his Daughter is in danger. The trees became more sparsely the closer he came to, what he thought, was the edge of the forest. He saw a rickety bridge over what seemed to be an abyss or something like that. And a castle … a castle? It seemed very old, destroyed by weather and time, but that was where the scream came from. He began slowly crossing the bridge trying not to look down. But a thought crossed his mind, what if the scream wasn’t from Eleanor? Well, it would just be another death Splicer … .
***

Enjoy some random trivia for Chapter 2:

*There was no mention of any pony, dragon, griffin or anything like that through the entire chapter.


That's all folks, thank you so much! :pinkiehappy:

TheMightyT Out.


EDIT: Holy wall of text!

Questions for all the people who read this story:

*Do you guys know any good BioShock related FanFics on this site? If you do, just reply on this post.
*Any group I need to post this story in? Maybe HiE ... .
*Any suggestions? Are you people mad I'll probably go with a 'Good Guy'-Subject Delta? Or do you guys really prefer the 'Kick some ass and chew bubble gum, but I'm all out of gum'-type for Subject Delta? You can still try to change my mind ... .


Yep, that's all. To the 'Writers Cave'! Chapter 2 inbound in +/- 2 hour!

TheMightyT Out.

EDIT: Needs more emoticons. :moustache::moustache::moustache: Yep, that feels better. :heart:

Next Chapter is up! Just a kick-starter for the events of the next chapter, expect some ponies in that one. :twilightsmile:

Chapter 3 is coming along nicely, the only problem I'm having is descriptions of fighting scenes. For some reason that's quite hard for me to write, but I'm not giving up that easily.

I'm sorry in advance for not replying comments and such, have some family stuff to go to. I rather stay home and write, watch & read some ponies ... but it's family. Ain't that a kick to the head? (I'm totally listening to that song while writing this!) So, I'll see you next weekend; same FimFiction Time, same FimFiction Place! :pinkiehappy:


TheMightyT Out.

EDIT: NEEDS MOAR EMOTICONS. :heart::heart::heart::heart::heart: I needed to get that out of my system ... . :twilightblush:

261778.......*sees HUGE ASS wall of text for tha dream part*....Daaaaaaam.....I had higher expectations from looking at the word count....
Oh well!Well Written!(Or is it Typed?Know what i dont care)Keep up the good work!

Well written indeed, but the giant walls of text can afford to be separated. Indents at the start of new paragraphs also helps. Since this is Bioshock will there be moral choices on Subject Delta's part?

You seem to mix up the words "death" and "dead" quite a bit. Mistakes like this are to be expected your first time writing something significant in English, but pleases take that into consideration. Otherwise, a pretty good story, if not a little lengthy on the dream portions. Keep up the good work.

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Aww, and here I was hoping he'd have the Security bot Plasmid; "Oh you think you can break the 4th wall Pinkie? Well how about summoning flying robots!"

I sense a manticore with a drill through its skull cumming up. Also the big daddies are programed to protect small, cute (from the daddies point of view), and somewhat helpless creatures... Fluttershy... or maybe the CMC?

I expect to go berserk if he can't find elenor

Time to respond to your comments! :twilightsmile: (I'm hijacking some Internet from the neighbors, don't tell them! :trollestia:) And again, thank you, guys! :twilightsmile:

261925 261956 *What do you mean, wall of text? --Checks Chapter 2-- Oh my ... . It seems I have some correcting to do. That's what you get from importing ... . :twilightblush: And those indents at the beginning of each paragraph, great idea! Your getting a shout-out for that, Crushric!
Going to answer your question: Since this is Bioshock will there be moral choices on Subject Delta's part? Um, yeah. If you read those quotes I use to break the story in different parts (and to change field of view and all that jazz), you'll surely have read this one: For every choice, there is an echo. Which each act, we change the world. So yeah, he's going to have to choose something in Chapter 3. And I will let you guys choose, because I'm a nice guy. (Maybe, I change my mind to much.) So just think about this, who could be lost in the Everfree Forest, at the Castle of The Elder Sisters? And would you like to save her? :trollestia: One word: Foreshadowing!

262221 *Thank you! :twilightsmile:

262320 *Yeah, I know. I'm going to think twice now about typing death (or dead). And I know the dream portions are long and there's a reason for that. The Chapter 2 dream portion is a major foreshadowing for Chapter 3, and it explains some strange things about Subject Delta. It seems like he has some ... strange thoughts, don't you guys think? Just think about it, a Big Daddy with knowledge about the stars? With memories about wolves and grand forests? Maybe there's still something human left in Subject Delta ... . (I'm using the 'Alternate Universe'-tag more for BioShock 2 related things, really.) But I understand your concern, and you can expect some less dream sequences in the future. (But not Chapter 3, it has some more dreaming in it. And it's going to be shorter than Chapter 2. But I still need to flesh it out and stuff.) (Also keep this in mind, I need to give Subject Delta a 'personality' in the past, to be able to change it *for better or worse* in the future.)

262503 *Yeah, but then I would begin doing comedy.(It would be bad, trust me.) And then I would begin to ship Subject Delta ... and I'm not going to change the story into a clopfic. Maybe. You're giving me bad ideas my friend! --Adds some new things on a paper named 'Troll-chapter'-- Oh, the horror! THE HORROR! :raritydespair: *But I like your thinking!* :twilightsmile:

262920 *Manticore? Didn't I write wolves? --Checks Chapter 2-- Yeah, I wrote wolves. --Checks plot for next chapters-- ARE YOU IN MY BRAIN? GET OUT, IT'S MINE, ALL MINE! MUHAHAHAHAHA!!! :pinkiecrazy:

262921 *Well, who knows? :trollestia:


So, short recap for you guys. Just think logically for a second: Who could possibly be in the Everfree Forest? And if you think you know who she is (I give to much hints!), do you guys want to brutally kill her or save her?
Just know this, your choice could possible make this story very short. Like 4 or 5 chapters short. Chose wisely ... .:rainbowderp:

Also, short spoiler for Chapter 3! *SPOILER ALERT* *THIS COULD POSSIBLY UNDERGO CHANGES*

***
Subject Delta finally had crossed the rickety bridge and he began running to the castle. He heard those howling sounds again, and a voice screaming for help. It wasn’t his Daughter, that he could tell now, but his hands were itching to get to use his drill on something.
***

DUN DUN DUN! Who could it possibly be? :facehoof::facehoof::facehoof::facehoof::facehoof:


That's all, TheMightyT Out.

EDIT: Needs more Trollestia, because I'm in a strange mood! :trollestia::trollestia::trollestia::trollestia:

SAVE ALL THE PONIES!

Bioshock sort of gives the felling of the world being royally screwed for any ending other than full good.

263263 *Yeah, but if you have played BioShock 2, you know that Eleanor changes by the actions of Subject Delta. So, it just depends on how you want to progress the story. :pinkiehappy:

I'll repeat it once more, to make it official. Chapter 3 will end on a "cliffhanger" (:trollestia:), and you all will get the chance to choose for the reaction of Subject Delta. :twilightsmile:


TheMightyT Out.

263291
Well it all depends on how much ADAM a little pony gives...

263371
forget the bad guys get more ADAM crap, i did the maths, saving all ends up getting you more.

263473

Yup, more ADAM and more plasmids for being a good person, though it's foreign to me to hurt any Little Sisters anyway.

Bioshock - MLP crossover? Tracked! :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

interested will be tracking.

265605 *Yep, it's surely is that! :twilightsmile:

263371 263473 263971 *Well, it depends on how I decide, doesn't it? :trollestia: I'm not following the game with that 'feel better being a good guy and get a reward'-type of thing they did. I'll do it 50/50. So, good guy or bad guy, only the story will change through that choice. And where do you think you're going to find a Gatherer's Garden in Equestria? Don't expect Subject Delta being able to spend ADAM so easily ... . :twilightsmile:

266440 *Thank you, I hope you'll enjoy your stay! :twilightsmile:

Also, on a completely different note, I'm home sick. Well, sick is a big word, the doctor said I had to 'stress less and watch my breathing more'. Ugh, I have no time to stress less ... . But now I've some more time to write, yay me! :yay:


TheMightyT Out.

Short update on Chapter 3: the dream sequence (follow up of the one in Chapter 2) is done. Now to write the difficult part ... .:derpyderp1:

But, because I'm a nice guy, something to think about 'till Chapter 3 gets posted:

“In the House of Upside-Down: cellar’s top floor, attic’s ground. In the House of Upside-Down: laughing cries, and smile’s frown. In the House of Upside-Down: found is lost, and lost is found. In the House of Upside-Down: killing saves, and saving kills … .”


That's all (:trollestia:),


TheMightyT Out.

266487

I'd expect Pinkie Pie could get one for him. :pinkiehappy:

267129
―Little Sister Song/Poem at the beginning of BioShock 2
I think I get what you mean.

This is going to be an awesome story.:pinkiehappy:

One question thought, are they regular wolfs or timber wolfs (Family Appreciation Day)?

269633 *Yes you're right, but the last sentence I added myself. To answer you question: You'll see that in Chapter 3. :trollestia:

267323 *Oh, it will be great when Subject Delta meets Pinkie! :pinkiecrazy:


TheMightyT Out.

Hey everyone, TheMightyT here. I have some early updates for you guys. :twilightsmile:

Now, Subject Delta's fate is in your hands. Please comment with your choice (A, B or C) below. I'll check back in 24 hours, then I can start writing Chapter 4! :pinkiehappy:

Expect the next update this weekend! See you next time, same FimFiction time, same FimFiction place! :moustache:


TheMightyT Out.

EDIT: I'm not going to reply to every comment anymore, I'm clogging up the comments section! :facehoof: When some questions are asked multiple times --by different people--, I'll answer them. --If I'm not going to answer them in a future chapter!-- Also, my dear readers, this is for you: :heart:

I would say C) Save Twilight, because well, i don't really like when main characters die early on no matter what :3 And besides Twilight is my fav pony ;) Oh, and good chapter btw :)

C would just be a generic choice. To me.............Im thinking B. That way Delta can kick the Mane six's assess all at once.

C because not only is Twilight favorite Pony, but it would create a sense of kindness within the monster. Twilight saved by the giant bipedal metal creature... has a nice ring to it.

C i choose C cause in the long run they will HELP!

Going for A is defitively the wrong choice. Twilight could send him back, so C.

Option C is would be my choice of action.

my vote is C. because thats how my delta always rolled.

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