• Member Since 10th May, 2012
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Matthew Penn


I write imaginary stories about cartoon horses.

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Sweetie Belle wanted to go to the amusement park before summer ended, but every ride she tried to get on had long lines. There is, of course, one place in the park that had absolutely no lines at all: The Funhouse! Once Sweetie and Rarity let themselves in as guests, they experience twists and turns, and they may realized that this might not be a "funhouse" after all...

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Comments ( 3 )

It's good, but sometimes you use words twice in one sentence. :twilightoops:
Sorry for criticizing, it's just that kinda irks me. :derpyderp1:

Above the 2,500-word limit for Short Stories. I've removed it.

(Kind of disappointing--we get so few submissions, and almost all the ones I don't add myself turn out to be too long and have to be removed.)

Edit: Just skimmed the story itself. I gotta say, your tagging is kind of rude. I understand if you don't want to spoil the surprise, but if folks are looking for a slice of life story, they probably want to read a slice of life story. (It also misses out on the dark fans who would actually want the story.)

4374236 I fixed the tags. I couldn't decide how to label it. Sorry. :twilightblush: It's not grimdark, it's just mind screwy... like House of Leaves.

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