I just recently started to write stories directly towards the FiM actively, though I have been writing for years, publishing numerous stories at Mibba and the eventual pony story, as far as to the MLP
Pinkie Pie had diverted her shopping trip, ending up facing Queen Chrysalis and a few of her few followers.
The Queen had been strangely happy to see the hyper Pony, even despite the shared history, which would prove frutious on her part.
Pinkie Pie had managed to talk Chrysalis into a new plan, Changing the path of her fate away from what had been a certain disaster. Manehattan would be a much richer feeding ground for the ill-fated hive.
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Okay, if nothing else, please at least spell the characters' names right. It's "Chrysalis," not "Chrystalis." And you spelled "Pinkie" as "Piunkie" once.
And Chrysalis and Pinkie both seem incredibly out of character. If they're going to be working together, you need to explain why.
4211950 Thanks for notifying me of the Typose, I hope I caught all of them.
Pinkie Pie is helping them establish a new way of life, where they are helping, rather then hindrance to Pony Society.
Even if no Ponies in either Ponyville or Manehatten know who they are, it would be much easier to know where they are, and what they do, if they are gathered in plane site?
It isn't as if Changelings haven't planted Spies or Infiltrators all across Equestria before, only this time, Pinkie Pie can keep tabs on what they do, even if the once telling her had no idea who they were talking about.
SOOOOO BAAAAD!
THE PLOT AND PACING ARE SOOO BAAAD!
4221849 why's that?
you don't enjoy seeing Pinkie with the Changelings?
or is it just giving them a new home that's the problem?
oh well, there should be a few more chapters before I can wrap the story up.
4223240 It is really just the lack of setup, the first scene has no buildup, pinkie is just helping the changelings out of the blue with no prior contact. Not to mention your atrocious grammar and spelling.
4223698 I guess I could add more build-up to the chapter.
May help with a few suggested ideas.
I could make use of an Editor on spelling and Grammar, after Grammarly 'Spell-Check' has been applied, that is.
This is weeks after the 'Canterlot Wedding', if it isn't clear, I could use some help on this part, which may be part of build-up, right?
This is the same Changeling Queen as in the Canon episode.
May need a few mor chapters to see how this works.
I'm tying a few ideas together here, in order to make a basis for more fun, if it works out.
4223772 What word processor do you use? I use Google Docs because it is free, online, has a somewhat adaptive spellchecker (if you use, oh say, 'anypony' enough times, it will consider it correct in that document), and because FimFiction can import from gdocs through the chapter editor page.
4223865 I'm working in Open Office, as a continuation from when Star Office was free. I can teach OO that 'anypony' is a corect word there. the up is that I get prompt notification and alternatives that commonly do work pretty well.
Grammarly is better with the grammar and associated parts.
Just too bad I can't use old M$ word, it was the best option, for as long as available, but the cost is but the first problem.
I have google acount, I could use Gdoc when working with Editors, that is the main strength there, I think.
the chat and instant sharing really are great for Editorial cooperation.
My hope is that the constant usage will help me devellop my writing and English.
Just thatCreative writing means I'm getting dangerously close to he 'Edge', as it were.
4223942 You should try GDocs, you can import directly from it to a blank chapter on the fimfiction site. I used to use OpenOffice, but my laptop is messed up and I have to use my roommate's.
4223950 good thing I'm not working on a Lappie, I save my files on a USB stick, so I could move it from 1 PC to the other, which ever is more convenient at the time.
It will take me some time to get used to, and integrate Gdoc in my writing process.
Part of my problem is that I fail with a few relatively 'Simple' things too.