Stride has a terrible condition. He has only one more year to live. His parents brought him to Ponyville, where he could live the rest of his days in the calm and quiet.
Too late for a CMC meeting, Scootaloo hurries through the streets with her scooter. She bumps into Stride and shortly afterwards, she notices his blank flank. Stride has the opportunity to become a crusader and make new friends, but how will he tell them he's only got one more year to go?
Now also with a dramatic reading! Voiced by FluddyPirate (It's her first dramatic reading, so be sure to boost her like button!)
You can listen to the playlist here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NdzFOS3oCBo&list=PLi8rlxGW0hLvYjtFAIil8GzoKolR5VIRd
Or you can read the story with the audio linked to each chapter indiviually. (Right click to open in a new page)
First comment.
(Don't worry, I actually read it... and some other things.)
There were a few grammatical errors. Most notably, commas go inside of quotation marks, rather than after them. If the quote ends in a period, question mark, or explanation point, then skip the comma entirely. At least, I'm pretty sure that's the rule.
Anyway, grammar aside, I enjoyed the story and the characterization. My only concern was how AB didn't want to touch the tree. Her older sister literally named one and read it bedtime stories, so I doubt 'petting' a tree would be all that weird to her.
Keep up the good work, and I look forward to your next chapter!
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4078665 Thanks for the constructive comment! Since you said you weren't sure, I'll look it up. I'll try to fix the errors when I have time. Probably after writing the next chapter, then remove errors, then write following chapter, then remove errors from the previous...
About Apple Bloom and the tree, we don't really see a lot about her ideas on it in the show. I put up an alternate universe tag because I was certain not everything would be able to add up, but I do think the Apple Bloom part was very plausible. Here's why: whenever Applejack shows her quirks, even Apple Bloom (if she's in the scene) seems to be creeped out. In both Apple Family Reunion and Somepony to watch over me. I'm not sure whether there were other episodes, but I think there were. Not a single time has Apple Bloom been shown thinking the quirks were normal, so I didn't think it went in the wrong here. However, that's only my headcannon.
Thanks again!
4079685 Yaay!
4081761 Good point. I take back what I said about AB. In any case, good luck with the next chapter, and I hope to see it soon!
4082105 I've looked it up and you're absolutely right about the quotation marks. After I've finished the second chapter (my pen is itchy) I'll try to fix it in the first.
Good story! I'm addicted. Please make more!
Dis is good
:D I love eet. Can you post more frequently! Please!
Story,so,GOOD!!!!'
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4098869 everyone needs to agree
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Thanks so much! It's great to see it's being appreciated. I worked quite hard on this one.
Nice. I just don't have the words.
Please make these more often.
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4105700 I second that notion.... Good story,make more
I really want to see stride telling the crusaders!
4120310 I can't let anything like that happen too early, or I won't have anything to write about.
Before I let Stride tell them, a new conflict must arise so the story doesn't just hop over to the end all of a sudden
4122048 very true,good thinking
This looks like a very interesting story, you've earned my favourite :)
Most stories get me invested in the second or third chapter...
I was in love with the book within the first few sentences. You're awesome. And to think I was reluctant to read it!
It's good to see this isn't dead.
Write more plz it is awesome!
Get him to tell scootaloo then have some sort of tradegy happen just an idea for more feels
Yay new chapter! Also first comment
Oh gosh, somepony needs to monitor their truth or dare games!!
Bring him back plz!
Also, that Discord cameo earlier!!!!!!
On the actual story, this is fantastic!!
It really is!
I love scoot's internal conversation. Truth or dare should be interesting
I have a feeling that Scootalo is going to end up living with Storm and Burst when Stride passes, if not sooner.
Im loving applejack's sales tactics.
I've heard that cuts will scar if exposed to ultraviolet light. Is that actually a thing, or is it just a myth?
5905382 Dermatologists will often advise you not to allow the light to touch a wound, because they indeed scar quicker. Of course, though band-aids are good at keeping out filth and sunlight, it is healthier for the wound to get some air. It's wound dependant, I think.
I can't wait until another chapter comes out! (Well I can I'd just rather not.) This story really is amazing, it just grabs you and doesn't let go.
Ohhh My Celestia! Moar moar moar!
Discord's an honorary Crusader? That's sooooo cute!
(I'm guessing that's from one of the comics. Perhaps Friends Forever #2?)
It's very interesting to think Discord actually tried to keep the younger ones from being hurt. I'm not sure if I can buy that 100%, but it's interesting.
Yes stride, it's hideous.
Two chapters in one day? Again? I like this trend.
5937892 Due to other things I have to deal with, I can't really upload on a regular basis, so I figured I'd do multiple at a time.
5939087 well I like it more than one at a time, stories always feel disjointed when you only get a chapter a month, reading en masse is much better for development.
Those element drops tho.
Rumble is a tramp in this?? I don't know why I find this so funny xD
Storm and me twining! I love wind storms so much I will stand out in them for hours. Is the greatest feeling ever.
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We don't get them in Nopeville :/
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I'm feeling that Stride has rubbed off on Scootaloo more than we might think at first glance.
5948210 You know, Australia?
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Oh. I was confuzeled
So he finally told them...can't wait for the next chapter!
well, it's finally out of the bag. The Crusader's plan went about as well as could be expected.
Good gravy that was intense, I like it. It was an amazing mix of well written feels and my feel those feels along with the characters.
To love, or not to love? That is the question. Whether 'tis nobler in the mind to take hold of a fleeting opportunity or fade into the background. To fight, to hold, to care; ah there's the rub. Is it worth to care if one will ultimately fade, if all that will follow a colt is the steps and call of the pale-pony? For who could bear the ever endless pity of others, their looks and words smothering and choking what life still remains while I; I yern for nothing more than to feel the embrace of one loved, for the gentle softness without care yet what is its worth if I must die? However, what is life without risk? I will go to her and tell of both my curse and my love and, perchance, it will be fruitful.
Something that popped in my head, a play of "Hamlet's soliloquy".
5998899 I'm stumped
You, sir (or lady), get a like for that comment, most certainly!