Flush

Princess Luna, ever eager to help her subjects, tries to cope with a chaotic night during the summer's hottest time. It mostly involves drinking copious amounts of fluid.

Unfortunately for her, finding a bathroom outside the palace turns out to be surprisingly difficult. Luna's solution is... unique.

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The Mother of Invention · 20th Feb 2014 · 5,286 words
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One Stall Closes, Another Opens · 20th Feb 2014 · 1,884 words
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Magnum the Critic

Magnum the Critic #1 · Feb 20th, 2014 · 3 · · One Stall Closes, Another Opens ·

This story is going to go down the tubes.

SuperPinkBrony12

SuperPinkBrony12 #2 · Feb 20th, 2014 · · · The Mother of Invention ·

I’ll just combine them all. It can’t get any worse.

Really Luna?

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SuperPinkBrony12 #3 · Feb 20th, 2014 · · · One Stall Closes, Another Opens ·

“Flush.”
Franzibald let out a stuttering breath that he’d been unaware he was holding. “Flush?”
“Yes. Flush.”
He looked down at himself, turning the word over in his mind. “Wow. Ok. That’s a good one.”

No dude, it doesn't have some kind of hidden meaning.

DRaily

DRaily #4 · Feb 22nd, 2014 · 1 · · One Stall Closes, Another Opens ·

Then he sat down and wrote an e-mail to his superior, explaining that he was regretfully forced to quit his job, but that the seven-figure severance bonus he’d redirected (he wrote flushed) from that one account in Trinidad was more than enough to ensure no hard feelings of his former employees. All the best, etcetera.

That just killed me in a good way of course

lebowski42

lebowski42 #5 · May 10th, 2015 · · · The Mother of Invention ·

I’ll just combine them all. It can’t get any worse.

This is the best sentence to find at the end of a chapter when there is still on left to read

Luna has the solution to her own problem right near the start. Should she get really desperate ;

Then she smiled. But I have access to a nice and cold heavenly body, within my reach whenever I need it.

I like Spectral Shift , anyone who can mention the possibility of Armageddon in such a nonchalant, off the cuff, joking manner to a Pony demi-god is awesome in my book.

lebowski42

lebowski42 #6 · May 10th, 2015 · · · One Stall Closes, Another Opens ·

Abrupt unexpected scene changes that at the same time make sense are awesome. Franzibald just immediately and probably violently emptying his bowels when this giant horse head appears over the stall wall was hilarious , if crude.

Also if you're going to get all accurate over the tides I dread to think what moving the moon significantly closer like Luna did will do. I mean if your not going to magic away all the effects the tectonic stresses would cause all sorts of earthquakes.

Hopefully there are a bunch of surfer dude unicorns holding back the worst of the flooding.

Time Waster

Time Waster #7 · Apr 29th, 2023 · · · One Stall Closes, Another Opens ·

“I don’t even own any swedish furniture! Mine are all-American, made in China!”

Ouch, my sides!
Looks like Franzibald watched Fight Club one too many times.

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