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In the end, I hope you had the time of your life.

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I like it good for no real plot:twilightsmile:

Very nice story.:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: Loved it at the end.:rainbowlaugh:

You could honestly use an editor, the grammatical errors in the story were pretty distracting.


Nice! this little story is doing better than I thought it would. Thank you all. (can we get to 30 likes?), yes we can! :-P

Comment posted by Thebravenorse deleted Apr 26th, 2014

Ah... Quick and hot, just like my ex(ba dum tsh) thumbs up!:heart:

Nice one! +1.

that grammar

I'd suggest this be rated mature.

4306194 Oh! I didn't even see that, thank you. I have now changed it from teen to mature :twilightsmile:

Hi every-pony! I would just like to thank you for all your likes on this story; but could I get just one more like, so that it would be an awesome 50likes! please.... :scootangel: I've been a good brony this year. lol

Hm, that should be possible :pinkiehappy:

50likes!!!! yes, thank you all so much! :pinkiehappy:

Badass mode on storm.Because,all things said,you don't have your superior officer walk in on you having "sexy times" and then say "in for a threeway captain?" XD

The fun had just been doubled....


You sir, are in dire need of a proofreader. While the story itself is fine, it is riddled with both spelling and grammatical errors that I think having a hunt through and correcting them could help you develop as a writer.
If you write on a computer, I suggest using a spelling checker function.
If you use something else eg. A phone, then I suggest reading through your work a few times and correcting errors as you go.

I don't usually comment like this, but it would definitely help your writing.

4898393 This was one of my first works. So yea, but I have improved greatly since this. Thanks for the advice :twilightsmile:

4899657 I apologise, I was unaware that this was an early fic

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