It had all started out, with my love for Fashion; with that, I had applied to be an apprentice.
Apparently, Rearity had accepted me; taking me under her wing, as the expression goes.
Now, this is where my adventure started out; as her apprentice, that is. All that is to follow, is a direct result of it and based on my personal choices and aptitude?
If I had realized, it isn't Rarity’s Fashion, but a mare that merely have a name looking deceptively like hers. Should I have accepted the offer; but in this case, what would I have done to demonstrate being worthy of her attention?
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Umm... her name is spelled Rarity.
Is English your second language? Your writing isn't too bad you just need a spell check and editor for grammar.
3778326 I know. I just haven't quite gotten to her part in this initial segment of the story.
I'm pondering whom to choose next, maybe she would take the third spot on the walk?
3778348 1 its rarity 2 learn to spell and 3 ITS RARITY
smh
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Special Alert: Failed to spell a main character's name correctly in the description AND title!
3778348 But that doesn't answer my question at all...
You spelled her name wrong throughout the whole story. It's spelled Rarity. Rearity is a fantastic nickname that Rainbow would give her, but that's not how her name is spelled.
Is English your second language? Dyslexia? Because with an editor and some spell checking this could be pretty decent.
3778348 i dont wana sound mean but just no no no no no its rarity
3778443 I haven't even introduced 'Rarity' into the story yet, and she doesn't own this shop either.
You need to learn to recognice and handle puns, considering this show?
if it isn't the show with antics all over?
On the other hoof, I guess it did catch your attention, even for all the wrong reasons?
3778483 hmmm i shulda read it first haha my bad
3778483 Right, so you decided to make a different character that holds the same profession as Rarity, but has a name that makes it look like you can't spell?
Cause everyone is going to say "you spelled Rarity wrong" and the description only reinforces that.
3778458 since everyone is making a point out of it,
Rare-ity and Rear-ity are two entirely different characters.
I picked up the idea from an image I stumbled across, but even if I find the link, it's a NSFW flag on it.
Do I have to explain further on this?
If you have red any of my other stories, particularly the once at Mibba(if it is safe to mention other sites?) you may see the point?
Now, on the other hoof, if you still did read and like the story?
3778464 Maybe I should have that nick for her, someplace, if Dash is in the vicinity, having her remarks out?
3778477 naeh *giggles*
on the one hoof, you look more like the 'cry-baby',
on the other hoof, more of the repeating of the same message, all over and over?
I had not even had the time to read the first, before the second was in?
3778530 how about you have a class from Flutter shy?
I'm not deth, but I do have a problem with loud-mouths
If I do have a few typos, I guess Spell check missed it, and I can't find the Equestrian English, sadly.
I'm in the process of getting an editor/proof reader, if it all panns out, I will go over every story.
3778509 I am so totally using Rearity as a nickname for Rarity from Rainbow.
"Hey, check out that her Rearity."
"Oh? Are you enjoying what you are looking at, Rainbow Dash? If you are or aren't doesn't matter to me, other than you could have asked instead of staring at it!"
"...Everypony stares at your rear, Rarity. And you like it."
"That's not the point!"
3778591 you could have a 'Stand Up' story, starting on what you've demonstrated.
for all I could see, you should have people enjoying all the puns?
I was expecting a punny reference to a Rarity with a round, perfect ass.
Hence, "REARity".
3778616 But Rarity has a nice ass...
3778607 I do. It's my writing in general.
3778652 I'd predict a reasonable influx of readers.
sounds like fun. now you just need to have the first chapter up on the site, so we can all enjoy it?
3778651 isn't that what it was all about, from the start?
If you wanted to avoid the pile of downvotes, you should've just hyphenated her name.
Rear-ity. Then it would've been a little more obvious, and would have intrigued people.
But it just looks like spelling is not your forte otherwise.
3778955 Anglic isn't the most easily spelling.
I could give you that ..
On the other Hoof, why are everyone jumping on this story, it's not even my first 'Rearity' story in the first place.
is it 'Fashion vs Toy-Dolls' ??
if they are 'Neigh'ers, fot that, I'm still listening to the 'Yay'ers over them.
Neighing doesn't save or build up the world?
You need the Yay for that, since you're just telling us over and over how everything was tried or impossible?
On the next hoof, maybe I should dig up some of their dirt and write a new story, featuring them? just a suggestion, no promis as of yet ..
3778984 Your comment made absolutely no sense.
3779000 taking it from the top, can you read any language, other then Anglish?
3779020 I can read and speak fluent English and German.
What you wrote was neither.
3779044 I've been writing in Anglic here all day.
The point is, you have a basic comparison, which of these two would you find easier spellingP
Gramma not considered for the moemtn?
3779736 I hope the story is more entertaining ..
3779821 I guess I can see how some see the choice of name a bad call. The coincident of her having the fashin, may not be open to the pun as intended?
At least, this time I did leave more then enough room in the 'Summary', for this, as opposed to many of my stories of late.
I said that I pulled it through a 'Spell Check', but I did never claim to have been using 'MS Word', right? I can't judge the quality or reliabillity of either. Though it does help me sorting out numerous typose, sparing you of the first draft looks of what it would have been like. I can as well confess, I'm prone to slip typos, and I make numerous of them.
Thanks for pointing out these, I'm going over them right away, check later if you think I'm just saying I will? Though I know it wouldn't do me good, avoiding the inevitable, since I wwanted people to enjoy the story, why else bother publishng it? Even if I do wright for my own joy over all else, who doesn't? I'm not a paid Author, as much as I may wish so, from time to time.
Maybe the enjoyable one is my greater success here? I have put some work into it, just as much as the story as such. I write with inspiration, not on disipline.
On the final note, thanks for the comment.
People don't know how to read the description. Yikes.
3788284 but they sure are awfully opinionated, huh?
3788390
My opinion has always been either provide constructive criticism or get the fuck out. They should skedaddle.
3788545 I'm all with you, even if I may have worded it slightly differently?
too easy to just jump somepony, without anything worth sayin?
3788717
especially on the internet
3788776 hidden behind the safety of the Anonymity. I guess it may feel like fun?
either they're just enjoying the thrill, or think they're justified to eaven a score, forgetting I never went out to hit them down.
3788284 That's sad.
What's depressing is that most of them have no stories up, when I checked.
maybe not even a blog?
I'd dare anyone ho consider these unsuportive complaints, demonstrate a story of their own, so I know what their reading standards are like.
3788284 He edited the description when everyone yelled at him. They're not completely at fault here.
3794693
Okay, let's go back to the part where everybody yelled at him. Some of the replies were:
Oh, and there's the part where someone told this person they need to learn to take constructive criticism 3779821. That's funny, only thing I see here is idiots leaving brain-dead comments, certainly not anything constructive. I don't care how bad the grammar was, this kind of shit is what got Train Wreck Explorers shut down.
3794693 just ONE question, why are you on this story in the first place?
doesn't really look as if you actually did read it, you're just in on the free ride.
3794742 I guess there are level headed people, even in this mess?
if I read you right, this is just the common troll?
they seems to be everywhere, just to see how much problems they could cause us?
I wish we could be firmer on them, since they apparently have no interest of the group itself?
I guess I did not know of that, but I can't be everywhere?
for the sake of reference, I have an account at mibba, with a bunch of stories.
You may thing of them what you will, that's your problem.
I came here with these stories, in hopes for more interest, since it is themed for this site in the first place.