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Sage Runner


A courier by trade who writes stories. Welcomes feedback and/or constructive criticism.

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Rumor comes to Equestria of a collection of seven magical objects, capable of granting any wish the heart desires, hidden throughout the lawless territory to the west. One such object finds its way into the hooves of Equestria's ruler. Fearing the misuse of these trinkets, Princess Celestia sends her protégé, Twilight Sparkle, to locate the others. Accompanying her is Spike, her number-one assistant. However, they aren't the only ones seeking these treasures...

Based on the story of Dragon Ball.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 16 )

"Who could be so brave to try and track down all seven Dragon Balls?...or so foalish?...":trollestia:

Ah, Dragon Ball. Such a good anime.
Are you going to make Goku as strong as he was in the show? I'm assuming not, because then this won't be hard at all

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He's about as strong as Goku was at the beginning of Dragon Ball. Where he goes from there, you'll have to wait and see :pinkiehappy:

Might I suggest the Equestrian Saiyans group for this story? I can add it if you want.
EDIT: Looks like somebody else beat me to it... Oh well.

Now for the story: good start, close enough to Dragonball to be easily recognized, yet true to the personalities of the characters instead of just making twilight a ponified Bulma. Always good in my opinion.

“Monkey Do” is probably one of the best pony names I’ve ever heard/seen.

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Thanks, I definitely didn't want to make Twilight act out of character. While she and Bulma do have a few overlapping qualities (mainly their intelligence), I doubt they'd share the same dynamic with the Goku/Monkey character.


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Glad you like it!

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So, still ridiculously strong. Alright. I'll see where this goes, liked and fav

I can’t wait, either, Monkey Do! I can’t wait for there to be more of this!

I was beginning to despair of this getting another chapter. But yay, new chappie!

Also, do you think Twilight's Super Mode from the S4 finale will make an appearance? Because that's some DBZ-level shit right there.

Star Swirl The Bearded as Muten-Rōshi. That is all I'm going to say.

4373811 Glad you're still enjoying it!


4377101 Glad to hear it.


4378739 Yeah, I'm sorry about the delay. As for chest-mode characters, I'm not sure. Beyond the first story arc I haven't really decided where I'm taking the story or how closely it's going to follow Dragon Ball/DBZ.


4383323 Nice!

"A journey to the west?"

Nice title drop there. :ajsmug: I recently became interested in the classic Chinese tale and bought myself Anthony Yu's abridged version, so I'm hoping you have enough drive to do the tale as much justice as you can and eventually wrap up this adventure in a way that makes it feel complete, even if it only comes out at 20-30 thousand words.

I also hope you won't bring too much of Dragonball's canon into this; I'm not a big fan of crossovers, but I do enjoy straight-up MLP fanfics that include elements from other properties. Like the Kick-Ass story I wrote, where Spike merely finds himself in a situation similar to Dave Lizewski's, but doesn't meet a ponified Hit-Girl or anything.

Any chance at all that this will continue? Its interesting so far. Unlike most of the DBZ stories on the site, this one isn't a straight crossover.

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Yeah, it's not abandoned or cancelled or anything, life's just been crazy for quite some time now. Thanks for reading though, I'm glad you like it!

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