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Sage Runner


A courier by trade who writes stories. Welcomes feedback and/or constructive criticism.

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And now, the story of the Apple Family who lost everything, and the one grand-daughter who had no choice but to keep them all together.


Based on the television series Arrested Development.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 19 )

Awesome start, excited to see more. :rainbowkiss:

I like how to added in stuff. Nicely done. :pinkiehappy:

I love Arrested Development.

Pretty cool. Never seen the show, but I guess I should.

You better have Apple BloomxBabs in here.

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It's a great show and it's definitely worth checking out, but aside from getting a few brief references, knowledge of it won't be necessary to follow this story. As for Apple Bloom x Babs, shipping isn't really something I feel I'd be all that good at writing, so I don't currently plan on including it. You can certainly expect them to get into lots of trouble together, though!

While the use of actual language kinda takes me out of it considering how close this in tone to the actual show. Enjoy this start nonetheless.

Wow! Another great story from you already! :twilightsmile:

Only two things:

"Reckon I'll let Applebloom and Babs split this'n," she thought, leaving her egg behind and sticking a slice of bread in the toaster oven.

"You and Applebloom each get one, plus you can split another!"

*Apple Bloom

I just wanna punt Flim and Flam to the end zone right now. :twilightangry2: Well, it's supposed to be like the show, of course, so...I should have expected that. :twilightsheepish:

Anyhoo, favoriting this, can't wait to see more!

One of my fav comedy writers using Babs and Bloom? How could I not favorite this?

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Thought I had fixed all of those, thanks for pointing out the ones I missed!

Remember, there's 250,000 bits in the walls of the lemonade stand.

Ok you get a thumbs up just for combining poines with that show.:pinkiehappy:

I just noticed... you got an extra "e" in the title. :scootangel:

You get a thumbs-up and a watch for writing a crossover that isn’t terrible.

Yours would be the first one.

Shame the fic looks to be dead. Was fun reading and would love to see the loss of the farm make the family a bit... dysfunctional.

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It's more on a hiatus than dead. Right now I'm focusing on completing one specific story and that's slow going. I have a couple of chapters in different stages of development for this one. I'm glad you like what's already there, thank you very much for reading!

5630993 Well, that's a relief! Was afraid someone would need to pick off where this left off.

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