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During the daily ritual to lower the sun to raise the moon, Princesses Celestia and Luna have their abilities locked. At the same time, a new, yet familiar, alicorn crashes into the throne room of the castle.

This is the second Friendship is Magic fic I've written, though I've tried some new things this time around. In my head, it does come after my first fic and my as-of-now unwritten second fic, though I think it can be stand-alone just fine. It doesn't really refer to the events of "The Party's Loyalty," and while it does make one offhand comment in regards to the second one I originally planned, I think it can be safely read without knowing much.

Cover image is from http://ztoonlinkz.deviantart.com/art/Comic-A-Look-To-The-Future-289305977

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Comments ( 52 )

Are you related to the Chupacabra?

290863 No, I can't say that I am. =o Just the name I use for like everything.

292531 Working on chapter 2 right now. =) Hoping to have it done within a couple days. I did have to make minor changes in chapter 1 though, due to the fact that there was an artifact of my original draft still in there that I needed to take out, so there are revisions for that one being posted soonish.

So, from 'Twilight's an alicorn' to 'Twilight's an eeeeevil alicorn' to 'Twilight's a filly'? All with extra Preggershy and baby-battlin'?

I guess I can dig it.

I D'aaaaawwwwl'd SO hard at filly Twi's letter. (with "D'aaaaaaawwwwl" being a combination of D'aaaww and lol):rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh:

Also baby Twi is like, criminally adorkable, I'm just sayin.

311718 Should've seen the original draft of the letter. :twilightoops: It was going to be horribly misspelled because Dash was too busy laughing at her spelling to actually help her out. Around the third sentence, I decided that was just too hard to type. But I made a in-joke about the original version there. :rainbowlaugh:

311248 Thanks for reading. :twilightsmile: Hope it wasn't too off-the-wall there. =)

313500 I apologize :fluttercry: I know a lot of chapter 2 would be incredibly confusing. I tried to tone some of it down but other parts I just didn't feel right adjusting. I personally called it a bit of a mindscrew all around, so again I apologize for that. I'd be more than happy to explain out anything you want me to explain. :twilightsmile:

Makes sense to me, VERY interesting story! :twilightsmile:

347518 :twilightsmile: Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it.

Really glad i read it. :twilightsmile::trollestia::pinkiehappy:

Enjoyed it and the letter at the end was just precious. How happy will she be to learn that Celestia and Luna are her mothers just as much as the mares who raised her (wonder if she would remember/find out that she was friends with them and what she almost did)

350136 Maybe, not sure yet. I think it would be a bit painful if she found out what she almost did. But I never know what I'm going to write after I'm done with my four set series. :twilightsmile: I do plan to give the younger Twilight her own series of one-shots but I want to finish a few things first. I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you for reading. :twilightsmile:

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I'm sorry, alright. This overall idea isn't BAD, but it's not presented well and it just moves too fast for anything to really get done.

356668 Understandable. I've addressed a similar comment before. My "show, don't tell" ability is lacking, and even my "tell" ability is weak. Hopefully it's something I can address in my future writings. :twilightsmile:

daaawwwww so beautiful :yay::twilightsmile:

That has to be the oddest resolution to a story I've ever seen. I'm still not sure how I feel about it, though I do like the letter.

Lawl, since this is like Twilight's second birth, it would be epic if she was more powerful and pwned everyone in school if she gets in. Even though Celestia knows shes already powerful, I mean, won't the same thing just happen again? :trollestia: ???

418919 Possibly, though I wrote her with a full memory loss of her old life. Actually, the only ponies that even know of her old life are the remaining five main characters, Celestia, and Luna. The same thing could happen again, but she's being raised differently. I do plan to write some stories regarding her new life soon. :twilightsmile: This form had some cameos in my third fic, but you know how cameos go. :twilightblush:I've posted one story, though it's a much different tone than I plan for the majority of stories that would involve her. That story does show some of the changes that have happened, though. Thank you for reading!

397769 Thank you. :twilightsmile: I actually like going with odder resolutions to matters. Thank you for reading!

Gus

Poor Spike just forgot his entire life then? As most of his events in his life was around Twighlight :(

474854 Oh, poor Spike. I always forget to include him when I tell people who remembers Twilight's life.*turns off Friendship is Witchcraft* My following fic, Generosity's Trust, brings up that he does remember. He just becomes the head librarian of Ponyville. :twilightsmile: I'm not sure why I always forget him. Though he did get his own chapter in that next fic...:yay:

*turns Friendship is Witchcraft back on* Haha, everyone hates Spike. :pinkiehappy:

Gus

475814

Glad he rembered, Genorosity's Trust follows after these events how did i not know this :P will definitely have a look at that story cheers:twilightsmile:

475834 I should warn that that one can get a little risque. :twilightoops: Nothing explicit unless you count one small little line, but figured I'd warn. I'm hoping to keep working with the canon I made for this story, hopefully some tamer stuff. :twilightsmile:

The Nightmare Moon incident was staged.....
///Twilight's evil now.....
Fluttershy is pregnant....
...is 'killed" by Twilight....
...isn't actually dead....
...Twilight gets owned by the elements...
...and Fluttershy gives birth to Twilight?

Mind=blown

528130 I always kind of imagined it that Twilight did manage to kill Fluttershy, but the combined powers of the Elements of Harmony and baby Twilight's brought her back to life and made her give birth. And if I blew your mind with this story, I've done my job properly. :pinkiehappy: Thanks for reading!

528314 Why are you thanking me? You wrote this masterpiece. I should be thanking you.

528393 Hee, thank you. :) I actually try my best to reply to comments and thank people for taking the time to read, because it really does mean a lot to me to have readers.

528403 It's only time wasted if the story wasn't worth reading. If it was, it's time well spent.
-Menoshe

...I'm not good with this kinda thing, OK? :derpyderp1:

528408 :rainbowlaugh: Alright. I'll try to keep my humbleness to a minimum for you. :rainbowwild:

311248

The single most amazing comment I have read to date.

As for the story: What the read did I just fuck? This whole baby thing... Throwin me for a loop, man!

533038 :pinkiehappy: This is one of my favorite stories of mine because it just goes really insane at the end. Thanks for reading! :twilightsmile:

that letter filled my heart with so much d'awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

542624 Yay, that's somewhat what I was aiming for. :twilightsmile: Thank you for reading!

potencial. good work.

can't wait till i see more from you. Good job

731076 Thank you! :twilightsmile: As of right now, this story actually starts a plotline that continues into every one of my fics (Barring "RD Writes a Fanfic" which is completely outside of this story's continuing plotline, and "The Party's Loyalty" which is supposed to take place *before* this but really needs to be tweaked to fit more into the plot.). This story could use a little touching up too, to be honest, but it's still one of my favorites of mine. Hopefully you'll take a look at the others in this story's plotline! :twilightsmile:

731786 that is a lot of plot

731882 Funny thing is that I never planned an ongoing plotline. After I finished this one, I just kind of took the idea and ran with it. :rainbowlaugh:

This was certainly a mind fuck. You are Awesome

891674 Thank you! Mind screws are one of my specialties. :twilightsmile:

This is the greatest Short story i have ever read. but i so much want it to be longer!

903336 If it's of any hope, the majority of my later stories have at least part of their plot continued from this, and "Fillyments of Harmony" will be referencing this quite heavily. ^_^

908188 O_O MUST READ!!!

This. Was. The. Best. Thing. Ever!!!:flutterrage:

WONDERFUL, JUST WONDERFUL !!!!!!

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