Rainbow dash has finally made her dream come true. She's a wonder bolt. now she practices with the others, preforms in shows, and has a blast at wonder bolt HQ but she feels that one certain wonder-bolt keeps his eyes on her, even when he's not supposed to. with every one at HQ whispering their bets can the two get around it all. Then there is also the problem of a scary sight. haunting the to young love birds. with a few visions and a big upset they will find the missing pass they lost.
P.S. OK soI've been reading this book series and it sparked some inspiration and i felt like i needed to write a story with the same concept. The first three chapters are the same as before but chapter 4 is where things start to get interesting. There's also going to be a few more characters but i can't put it up since it won't allow it.
I aprov
Cute
interesting idea
and am i the only one who think that Soarin on the pic look like Zack Fair from Final fantasy 7 ?
Sorin u be STUPID
Lol..keep with good writting.
she mad...then shes happy.....shes pissed...then shes fangirling.
your hot then ur cold, ur yes then ur no, ur in the ur out, ur up and ur down.
lol. periods
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FINALLY i was wondering when some one was going to figure it out. or maybe they did but were to chicken to reply 'bout it. who know's?
3215209 lol, u even gave a huge hint. it was in one of the sentences
this chapter makes me think of a different story.... *coughLoyaltyOfTheCreedcough*
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Thanks for reminding me, i totally forgot to reference the story. before you go making any ideas of my coping think again. this was the only thing that's as close to loyalty of the creed as it is.
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oh i wasn't thinking that you were coping, if fact it didn't even cross my mind, i just thought about it cause i really liked that story and read it like 5 times :P
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no problem
what chapter is this O_O it's good despite the fact that is organized strangely but still.....
I hate to be a grammar nazi here but....
"I" instead of "i"
Sorry, that has been driving me crazy. Interesting story layout, not sure if I like a lot to favorite....time shall tell.
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Yeah, I've never been all that concerned for grammar and whatnot, but I'll try.
the chapter is a great start! And you may have to make it a little more in detail.
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TOTALLY AWSOME STORY I love it
I like where this is headed, but please fix the grammar issues.
I was drinking a soda when I was reading this part:
I so wanted to do a spit take, but then I remembered that'd damage my laptop.
First off I was surprised at where this was going, and then I wanted to laugh. That was hysterical! 
This part in Celestia's letter to the Wonderbolts kinda seems out of place in a formal letter.
The phrase is "Spit it out", sweetheart.
update plz
More
Waaaaaat? I wouldn't mind having a hot Wonderbolt sneak up on me, while I sleep!
Well that was.....interesting....
Please tell me still posting
MOOOORE
angels hmmmm
for a second i thought she woke up kissing him
whaaaaat is hapnin
huuuuuh
more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
please
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ok you might want to make it more clear about how is talking cust i dont understand anything right know can you explane it
Moree!!!
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WHEN IS THE NEXT CHAPTER I WANT TO READ MORE
Moooooooore it's amazing!!!
What the buck is Flash doing here?!?!?!
soarin is slow
3668026 Both "spit it out" and "cough it up" are actual phrases.
~M.L.B.~
This book is amazing more!!!!!