During her yearly photoshoot in Ponyville, Spitfire gets to know Cherilee. And she soon realizes she has feelings for this mare.
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JazzyFeather
I write stories for other people :D most of the time they will be short, one-shots kind of stories.
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This took me a while to complete, i think it turned out decent. It's not awesomely spectacular but it's finally finished and out of my mane
Anyway i hope you enjoy the story for what it is, and now i must start to write my next story
GREAT, JUST GREAT! THE TWO MARES I HAVE FEELINGS FOR ARE IN LOVE WITH OF ALL PONIES EACHOTHER!
Okay, time to take all my anger out on a fiddle!
Nice premise, CheeriFire is a very interesting pairing. However, one big thing I noticed you MUST SEPARATE DIALOGUE!! It drives me madder than Pinkie in Cupcakes when somepony doesn't do that. Also, the personal pronoun I is always capitalized. Other than that, this story is very good, all it needs is polishing to a shine.
I could edit this fic if you want :)
CheriFire...or maybe...I don't know.
Never seen this ship before. I'll give it a try.
This wasn't a bad story. i enjoyed it
, i wouldn't have thought of pairing those two though.
Please, try to use "trotting" less. It gets a little annoying reading the same verb all the time.
Only one piece of advice here would be, try not to use their names so bucking much!
Other then that and capitilizing the "I"'s theres no problem with this story. (interesting pairing by the way) 
It's a cute idea, but this could really use the attentions of an editor. Spelling, grammar, capitalization... all of it had me flinching repeatedly.