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Scootaloo buys a Jetpack. The obvious things that would happen, do.


A semi-comedic bit, a sad bit. Oddly enough, I think I'd call it slice of life.

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Just an FYI... a photo of the Challenger explosion as the story's pic is in rather poor taste. Some of us remember watching it happen.

I am going to assume you didn't know. That picture is of the shuttle Challenger exploding. Please change it. Down votes will follow if you don't.

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ISS #3 · Aug 30th, 2013 · · 2 ·

So.. You used exploded Challenger (and seven crews) as front pic...Ok..

Lol people complaining about picture. He isn't commenting on the Challenger explosion in any way that I can see. And even if he was:
"I believe you can joke about anything." - George Carlin
ps. Income massive downvotes

Good story. Had me hooked reading it. But yeah. Change the picture. Whether by lack of thought, or pure not-knowing, it's still kinda distasteful.

Yeah. No. Sweetie Belle, not Sweetiebelle.
Felt boring, and as if it was a paradoy or joke or some sort.
Downvoted. JOKESSSS

Yeah, no. I'm just gonna leave without votes.

I was seven at the time. I remember it well and know precisely what that picture is. It's an event that's undergone some discussion around this household, and I always felt that the real lesson of it has been lost in that it's always been portrayed as patriotic sacrifice in service to our country/science unavoidable accident, where it seems to me to be an indictment of the "good enough to get by" attitude that seems to be so prevalent, even in the most critical endeavors, which irks me considerably.
It irks me that most people, even at the highest level, seem not only to be faking it, but complicit in forcing others to fall to the same low standards, risking not just a few elite, trained astronauts lives, but putting us all in danger with their complacency every day...and much as I'd like to write some pages about that, the Challenger, the space program and some tangential ramblings about the good old boy network, we're here about ponies.
I used the picture for shock value.
It's very disheartening to write some pretty tolerable stories and get very few views so I took the low road and used both an inappropriate picture and a bombastic title, both of which I found funny, the former in a decidedly dark sort of way, so I'll have to stand by it.

If you find you have to downvote it on those grounds, it's something which will hurt me, I am a fairly sensitive sort, but it's something I'll have to live with.

I saved Scootaloo, though. I do remember watching it in class and thinking that there was some way everything was going to be alright somehow. If you're old enough, maybe you do too, but the adults already knew it wasn't alright, even if the news people kept holding out tidbits of hope. (I had the space shuttle manual which detailed a whole contraption with a collapsible pole that they'd clip to and slide down with parachutes somehow, so I thought myself better informed on the subject than my classmates, all naive and smug.)

To everyone complaint about the picture - for crying out loud...... it suits the story!!
So stop being so damned superficial & afraid to offend. It's not the taboo you think it is.
It's a fitting picture for the story.
And it's a good story aswell! :pinkiesmile::pinkiesmile:

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I, too, remember the Challenger. I was eight. The principal called a special assembly, and we all went outside into the cold, looked up at the flag, and were told the news. It's maybe our generation's assassination of JFK, or 9/11.

I also agree with the complacency and incompetence of the powers-that-be. There's a really good analysis of the disaster in a book called Inviting Disaster, a book about significant engineering and human-factors accidents; I highly recommend it if that's a subject that interests you.

While I somewhat disagree with your choice of a cover image (especially for what came off--to me--as more of a comedy than anything else), it doesn't offend me. I think it might be in poor taste, but that's just my opinion. I"m not going to suggest that we should ban you, or force you to change your image because it might offend someone. I'm not going to downvote just because I might not agree with your coverart. (Especially since--in a way--it is well-suited to the story.)

As to the story itself--it's marvelously well-written, both funny and sad, and--especially given the CMC's pyromaniac tendencies in the comic--completely in character.

Since I'm here to read good stories (and write decent ones), I'd say that this deserves a thumbs-up and a fave,

As an aside, I just recently wrote a story called Scootaloo Finds a Truck in the Everfree Forest. We've already seen Rainbow Dash get shipped with everything, and a surprising number of fics featuring Button's mom (who, as far as I know, isn't even a canon character), and in the art world, Fluffle Puff and Rarity vs Giant Crab. Maybe the next thing is Scootaloo & fancy-tech-that-she-treats-as-a-toy. If so, we're trailblazers, my friend.

TL:DR vaguely inappropriate cover image, good story. Thumbs-up and fave.

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Thanks for your kind words.
I liked Scootaloo Finds a Truck. "Celestia Sleeps In", is one of yours that's been in my reading list that I've been looking forward to as well.
Honestly, I always thought of the Apples as the more mechanical sorts until I read End of Ponies, which sort of permanently warped my perception of Scootaloo, even though it's just fanon.
But yeah, I like the Scoots and Tech thing, it suits her tomcoltish attitude and if it's not a burgeoning trend, perhaps it should be made one.

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I liked Scootaloo Finds a Truck. "Celestia Sleeps In", is one of yours that's been in my reading list that I've been looking forward to as well.

:pinkiehappy:

Honestly, I always thought of the Apples as the more mechanical sorts until I read End of Ponies, which sort of permanently warped my perception of Scootaloo, even though it's just fanon.

If I remember correctly, it was Scootaloo who was working with wrenches under their parade float. Maybe AB is good with carpentry and construction, and Scootaloo is good with machines.

But yeah, I like the Scoots and Tech thing, it suits her tomcoltish attitude and if it's not a burgeoning trend, perhaps it should be made one.

With ya 100%. I might start to bias my stories that way, just a little bit.

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Why didn't the grain silo explode when Scootaloo took off?

Seriously, grain silos full of a mix of air and wheat hulls make giant fuel-air explosives; there were plenty of wheat hulls around, and the jetpack would provide *plenty* of fire to set it off. I mean, I can see, from a metafictional point of view, that having the silo explode would't add anything... but why didn't it blow up? I don't get that part.

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Deus ex over-rich fuel mixture.

CCC

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...Scootaloo is really lucky.

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7 years later and still no down votes.

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