Temptation happens to everypony, even a Princess. It didn't matter why she did or how she did it. It didn't matter her intentions, good or bad. All that matters is that she did it.
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Is this a prequal to a bigger story? Or just a
one shot?
Good story! Please continue, I really would like to know more. How did Twilight get banished? Is she ever returning?
Interesting idea piece. I quite liked Discord the Cat. I'm not sure if anything really changes though. It's mostly just a sketch.
2966849 Originally this was a one shot, just a simple story for a contest I was in against my friend. Halfway through though he dropped out, but I finished up this little chapter of what I made. I honestly only planned this as a one shot.... But lately my mind has been thinking, thinking a lot. I may just have this be almost a prologue to a bigger story. We'll have to see.
2969050 Yeah, that's all this was intended to be, a sketch of a possibly deeper story really. I never planned on expanding it until now actually. We'll have to see where my crazy mind takes this story.
2967385 But that is the question isn't it? Will she ever return? And if she does, what kind of world will she arrive in? Can she even forgive the Princess for what has happened to her?
>>>“You should have seen this coming my dear princess. She wasn’t the strongest-willed pony.”>>>
Uhm, considering she was the only one who didn't freak out over Zecora and the bunny stampede, that doesn't bode well for the mental fortitude of the rest of the pony race.
3002691 Twilight's great evil: Serving Celestia sugar-free, gluten-free, non-dairy cake. It was like a ball of lead with white caulk for icing.
Celestia: TO THE MOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON!!!
And everypony agreed that Celestia had no choice after having one taste of the demon cake of healthful vileness.
This is simply just beautiful. I love the way you added the first chapter as an intro. I know it sounds like common sense but not alot of authors do that on here. Bravo. There is only one flaw. I only wish that you put a bit more character into Twilight. You got her introduction right (how she greets other ponies) but u still needed to add a little more. PLEASE WRITE MORE!!!!
P.S also try to make the chapters a little longer.
3467503 The first chapter was originally the whole story. I didn't plan on adding more at all, then I found music, and like the planets aligned and blah, and it worked out so well! At any rate, I was challenging myself to try and make every chapter of this story only 1,000 to 1,100 words. But I may change that, I was just bored was all. At any rate, Twilight not being characterized yet was intentional, tis only the second chapter, and the scenery is a tad more important I feel. Thanks for enjoying the story, Expect more soon!