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Dusk Quill


I once was lost, but now I'm found. Just a quiet blue unicorn with a passion for the written word.

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This story is a sequel to Skyfall: Treason


A Soldier's Memoirs Saga
The Griffon War | Skyfall | Treason | Everfree | Overture
Retribution

The Everfree Forest. The myths that surround that dreaded place are just that: myths. Tales of monsters, cursed creatures, and evil magic are just stories made to scare foals at night.

But every story comes from some truth, and some answers are better left in the dark.

Inspired by Story of the Blanks.

Special thanks to my pre-readers Jake The Army Guy, irobern2857, Treilacl, and USMCbrony0311.

Characters and locations belong to their original creators.

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Goddamn...

I wish I had read this before I wrote the first chapter of my story. I totally would have stolen a few lines from you. You captured the childlike fear pretty damn good. Only bit of criticism is you laid the Pleasentville on a bit thick at the beginning. It overplayed your hand a bit. I'd consider toning it down a bit.

Still, HELL of a good start, duder!

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Oh wow. That tower of deleted comments does not inspire confidence. Oh well, I've come this far!

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It was collaboration with the pre-readers. I didn't want to spoil any future chapters. :pinkiehappy:

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Then I guess that it inspires confidence now. :pinkiesmile:

Ok, I'm hooked. Consider this a favorite and a like. Your descriptive is nice and easy, I love it.:twilightsheepish:

Damn. Well compared to your normal ones I read (Take this as the Skyfall series) this seems like its going to be a lot darker.
Anyway, onwards to the next chapter. :pinkiehappy:

Very nice. Great job keeping the tone while still havin light moments.

Save for the snapping and crunch of leaves and twigs underfoot

UnderHOOF, I think you mean. :p

The Canterlot Guard is actually going to do a once-over around the edge of the forest to see if they missed anything while we look deeper in.”

If I may, I think it'd be a nifty thing to throw in that they WANTED to come, but Starlight said no because they'd be too blind in the dark. The way t sounds the Hoofington guards are the pussys, so it'd be cool to show the stark difference. If it sounds like I'm harping on this equality thing, I guess I am a bit. Saying Starlight had to damn near pull rank to sideline the Canterlot ponies would make them seem more like badasses.

awesome cover art. im finally starting to sleep a little better and our CGRI just ended so ill have the time and energy to jump on the rest of the chapters to pre read. sorry its taken so long.

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I have no idea how we possibly missed that .

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Yes, yes I did mean that! And so did USMCbrony and irobern. Forgive us, it won't happen again, Drill Sergeant!
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I went ahead and 'tweaked' the passage a little bit (pun 100% totally intended). I think you'll be more satisfied with your troops now.

I still want Midnight to join Skyfall at the end of this.
Great chapter though.

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I've gone ahead and copied your review for reference, but if you guys could do me a HUGE favor and not comment on the unreleased chapters here, I'd really be appreciative. It's starting to look a little sloppy with all the deleted/spoilered comments. Just send them to me in a private message so I don't have to make a mess of the comments section. Cheers. :pinkiehappy:

I feel the helichopper coming out to play!!!

But the usual, excellent writing and alright chess skills ;)

The world of Skyfall gets mixed in with the Story of the Blanks! Everfree's got both so you know its good. :raritywink:

I am delighted to see the return of Midnight Dasher.

Silver out!

Sunny town. A nice place to hold out against undead skeleton ponies.
Bet they don't put that in the tourist information office.

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Welcome to Sunnytown!

We hope you enjoy your stay! Please feel free to take advantage of our complimentary hotel breakfast, free tours, and in case of Zombie Pony attack, our ballistically reinforced town center!

Tell your friends!

Sunny Town eh? Looks like there is a ray of hope in finding the kids :twilightblush:

The task was slow and arduous, with every set of eyes checking every inch of ground they covered. Not a single stone was left unturned, literally. The deeper they got into the forest, the quieter it became. Soon, even the crickets no longer chirped in the still spring night. A slight chill settled over the air. The treetops obscured their view of the moon and starts, greatly limiting the already little light that filtered down to the ground. To Fleethoof, it felt like some sort of bad game, trying to walk through the black forest with only his flashlight to show him where to go.

'stars' good buddy.

Silver out!

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That was awful! :rainbowlaugh:

How's my favorite Brit today? :scootangel:

:rainbowderp:...Okay, so you're not my favorite Brit (that would be LionHeartx10 from YouTube) but still...hello! Why do I have such a talent for making every situation as awkward as possible? :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Silver out!

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I'm sorry Silver. it have to be done!!! :pinkiehappy:

I can live with being the second on your list of Brits you want to kill you like, better than some people I know since the are a bunch of *Insert naughty words here*!!!!

Anyway, hows life in the empire??? :derpyderp1:

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It's a growing Empire!

Anyways, I really feel the hopeless coming from all of them only being armed with completely ineffective weapons. Light is their only friend now. Trapped in Sunnytown and surrounded by homicidal demon ponies...how are they gonna get themselves out of this mess?

You did a superb job describing the monsters, DQ! Menacing and downright terrifying! As it should be!

Silver out!

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Indeed, DQ is an amazing writer + fairly good at Chess ..... just sayin!

As for our valiant heroes, a good case of MacGyverism should be able to help them out. Try to create a massive friendship and unicorn powered railgun from two dustbins, 5 1/2 bones, a paperclip and a single hair from Pinkie Pie's Mane ;)

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I'm only half decent when I really put thought into it. After you walked me into a checkmate that first game and I didn't even realize what was happened, that's when I went, Oh hell no. How did that happen? :pinkiehappy:

You... You figured out the ending of the story! Are you psychic?! :pinkiegasp:

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If I guessed it correctly, I get to name it!!!!

I shall name it ........ SHINING ARMOUR'S LOVE GUN!!!!!! :pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

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That sounds like the title of a bad clopfic. :rainbowlaugh:

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