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Hey! From what I've seen, you have a pleasant writing style, though it probably wouldn't hurt to proof-read things once more. There were a few points where words weren't capitalized and such, but nothing major. Here are two: “what the what.. what.. WHAT?” and "You.. you did SOMETHING! this is a prank or something because of my birthday!"
I'm a bit concerned that you may be moving a bit fast with the discovery of the transformations, but I liked pretty much everything else! Keep it up!
Oh, and here is a link to the Deviant Art page for your picture: http://yikomega. deviantart.com/art/ Music-Pony-Wallpaper-254231080
Loving it so far
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Yeeeah now that I think about it it is a tad fast... However it is still early game for Olivia and is still possible to draw it out... I just have to be careful! (Or rewrite the entire chapter;).
Thanks for the critique, I was actually curious about that myself! So I'll be sure to correct and observe.
I'm waiting for the moment when Vin tells Olivia that he's unemployed now.
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I cant look at your picture and not laugh, the words in it are ridiculous.
:D
Quite fast paced but I liked it.
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Really? the entire last chapter I felt like i was going slow.
2709086 It wasn't too fast paced I just thought it could have been padded out a little more.
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Ah alright, yeah. That I understand, it's not my strongest point in writing.
Thanks though!
I relax my pse and proceed to get
pse->pose
I like the story, but it seems a tad bit rushed, maybe expand on thoughts a little. I don't know.
Yay! When is Vincent gonna change!
I want to read the look on his/her face when he/she realizes he/she is a lesbian.
2709086 hey ive been wondering. ive just read this story and i am hoping you are going to continue this. but the thing that's also bugging me is the song parody you keep mentioning throughout the story. is it by any chance... this one?
and another question. is the setting of the animation of this song the one you used for the octy/vinyl backstory?
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Yes indeed, I thought i made some note of that being one of the inspirations in the description... Hm..
I really do need to pick this back up, the main story of 5score is getting close to it's ending... and I've got only one character about half way done...
Regardless I will continue as best as I can.
3344375 oh you did? i guess i just didnt notice. heheh but i dont see it so maybe you forgot you took it out? the only connection to the song i can make is from the picture.
STILL.
I am also awfully happy that you are still going to try and continue this to your extent 
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Just happy to see people want more, to be honest. Nothing will happen tonight cause I have work tomorrow, but tomorrow afternoon once I get home I'll start on chapter 4
3344505 oh yey
i hope you get a lot of inspiration to help you 
Holy nailed it characterization Batman
can't wait for the next bit
You made me fall out of my chair. MORE!!!!!!
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sorry for the delay. the wait for the base drop took to long.
My friend... The correct term you're looking for is Ipotane... Not satyr... A satyr is half goat/half human and Ipotane half horse/ half human
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Eh, it's offhanded dialogue. most readers probably wouldn't know what that is. I sure as heck didn't. I'll keep that in mind for future stories.
Thank you for clarifying though. today I learned.
5617111 you're quite welcome
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I've submitted my second chapter for editing, if you caught the blog post chapter 1 is now 100% good.
Also I'm planning on taking down all of the other chapters after the second is finished editing, and resubmitting the whole thing. drum up some extra attention for it as I rewrite the previous chapters, and progress further down the storyline. so... if you come back to an update seeing only 2 chapters, don't worry. it'll be back cleaner and better soon.
5617129 yay! I do love a good 5 score story
You have a consistent error in this and previous chapters that is immensely annoying.
BASS DROP. The word bass, in a musical context, is pronounced the same as base, but writing base instead of bass makes you look like an imbecile.
I know it's nitpicking, but that kind of thing is the equivalent of an artillery shell to kick someone right out of a story.
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I hear ya. no need to be rude. a simple clarification would suffice, geez. I'll correct it.
EDIT: also chapter 5 is completely unedited. so yeah. politely stop. It'll be fixed. in fact as I said I'm cleaning up ALL the chapters.
love the story I hope you decide to keep going with it.
5652214 I am. just hit a light burnout. but i'll be back at it shortly.
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I under stand how that is.
time go find a lovely little filly to recharge your battery's with.
good luck and I will be watching for more when you are able to.
kind of off topic but i just noticed this story was first published on my birthday, may 13th
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How old are ya?
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16
I could've sworn I read this already. (or maybe a different fivescore fic with characters by the same name? who knows.)
5825480 I've been on again off again with it for a while.
oooh I was confused. I was think of the tunes are a-changing. the names and characters a very similar, but they're different stories.
well, I'll definitely read this one anyways. I'm probably going to end up reading all of the good fivescore stories.
Darling...?
Darling are you there?
6490633 Uhm. right here? sorry life and stuff. I'll get back to writing this eventually.
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