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Eh, close enough ;P

Eating of figurine when?

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SHUT UP AND READ IT WISE GUY

Fucking hell, it updated! i lost my hope after almost 2 years.

Jesus christ, after almost two years I almost forgot this thing existed

WHAT! A update!?
I look forward to reading it, however I may just have to read Chapter 9: Hospitality again to remind myself what happened. I can remember how eager I was for another chapter but not what was the last thing to happen.
Cheer for the story revived.

8581035 Yeah I did wonder if someone forced you to commit murder on your figurine, I won't, just glad it's out.

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Jeez, y'all know how to depress a guy. :c

Good to see you again, it's been so long...

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Still an outstanding chapter tho. Thanks Tofu for not leaving us like so many good authors did.

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I keep telling you people I didn't go anywhere. :<

Awesome chapter glad to see this story continued.

Holy Macherel, finally a new chapter!

Nice to see the little stuff like starsign trails and the folks 'n factions he meets. t'is nice to see the new approach

Also, while such conduct around female enemies is bottle-approved, I must say he should remenber he's got a beautiful black- I mean orange pega girlfriend waiting for him back home :c
And Aeolus too!

Cant wait for the next chapter. This is seriously good stuff.

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Holy Macherel

Delet dish

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The more tasty comments you feed me the faster I work. c:

Butterscotch ripple ice cream

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Daisy sandwich

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The more tasty comments you feed me the faster I work. c:

Wew! Eat my comments!

... uh. So yeah, I love it!

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Guys pls these comments aren't tasty, these are like diet comments. >:c

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Rude! My comments are simply too refined for your tastes.

I may be reading this chapter hella late, but I think I can still bring up the long ass wait time. Also, If comments are food for you, then have this one: I read your chapter despite it being three in the morning on a school day.

And I just know that someone out there just read this and immediately thought "fuckin' squeaker"

To that, I say: No. I'm not. Wish I was. Shit was easier back then.

Holy mackerel this updated and I never got the memo good job fimfic XD

Anyways, I'll read it after some much needed rest. But I must say Outlaw is definitely one of my more favorite FOE stories up there with Bobulator's Memories and the Daily Unlife

I'm really enjoyin' this story, thus far! The suspense is holdin' fast to me! I eagerly await in earnest for the next chapter installment!

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i'm tryin

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S'all good, Tofu. I finished binge-readin' last week, but I've been patiently followin' Heroes by No-One for months now. I'm a patient man, 'cause these stories are worth it to me. 'Sides, I don't have a right to fault ya, since my own story is still primarily in plannin' stages...

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oh shit Doomande's here I better finish this chapter soon

Consistency is key, and you have to choose between having a space after an ellipsis or not.

Whoops! Oversight. I fix.

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*le gasp*

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Tofu... What kind of smut are you writing over here!

omg why does everyone always say that >.>

Nitpick:
"As pegasi—ponies of the sky—clouds were also our primary form of architecture," Who the fudge are he telling this factoid to that wouldn't know that already?

Sometimes I forget my audience already knows these things, it's just habit to explain details to the reader. :x

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"but when it came to aircraft" Maybe is it just me, but should it not have a plural s in the end?

Just you. :P

" A cursory glance revealed Astral’s personal sky-tank to be of the former variety." Wait… if it is revealed, does that not mean that it is new information for him? Doom the miniature nitpicker strikes again!

pls

"I grinned sheepishly up at the mare sitting on my chest." Unless chest is a special pony part, would she not be on his back since she hold his eyes from behind?

He spun on the way to the clouds from the air but I wound up implying it with the narration instead of explicitly describing the action.

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What the heck did you come back and add on to this? I could've sworn it was like a million times smaller a week ago.

sure isn't much love for the wastelanders and their situation...

One of my biggest goals with Outlaw is to show the reader how the world looks through the eyes of a truly indoctrinated Enclave soldier and how his view changes as the story progresses. It's a bit of a gamble since it makes him a character not everyone can sympathize with or like, but I wanted to do something truly unique when I started the story all those years ago.

Wait... so the dad is getting interrogated for some shit, the son framed for some other... But the daughter gets to keep her high rank and he his nice big boomy toy after his loyalty have been put in question. Unless the railgun is used as to set someone up, someone having been killed with another prototype, does it not make any sense that he got to keep it.

Wait... he are flying around with both a prototype coil gun, a ton of ammo for it, and later get a machine gun as well... How many SPECIAL points did he put into Strength? Honestly are he slowly beginning to smell a bit like a Marty Stu with how easily he could talk himself out of an interrogation room while wearing a giant gun on his back, those does normally not give any bonuses to Charisma checks after all. If it is all an ellaporate plan to get rid of him can I get it... but it would have been just as easy to take him to Canterlot, test the weapon, and then shoot him in the back on the way home and blame an alicorn for the giant blood smear.

I know it looks a little ridiculous at first glance, but trust me. I've come a long way with the rewrite. Things are happening behind the scenes that won't come to light for a while, but the puzzle pieces are all there for the reader to go "OH I GET IT" once the story reaches a certain point in the future. I know it looks like Mach is pretty OP right now but trust me, the next chapter will show you that things are the exact opposite. He'll be struggling for quite some time.

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I admit to skimming through that part).

D:

Solara is also just brimming with life and character, though I may be biased due to... reasons.

reasons.

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I hope you're alright with me making these feedback comments since you seem to be done (or at least just really stuck).

What, are you kidding? Comments give me life. I think I might just be a little too stressed out from forcing myself to work, I probably just need a little time to recharge my battery. I mean, I still think about writing every day so I'm pretty sure I'm not done yet.

Also nice Half-Life reference there.

Swing and a miss.

Tofu, when you read this, I just want you to know that I'll wait till I stare in death's eye's to see the next chapter up. Your skill and writing is so good that it give's me inspiration to write my own Fallout: Equestria side story.

Take your time with this one, dude. I have full confidence that the next chapter's would be full of high stakes, comical and cool actions scenes that would make me excited to wake up in the middle of the night just to see it!

It's been nearly a year and a half since the last updated the story, but like I said, I'll keep waiting for the next one, for a wonderufully written story. Dont give up with this story, even if you everyone gives up with Outlaw, I'll still be here to read it to the fullest.

Mach, Greaser, Razor and Solara are my top picks of favorite Wasteland survivors for a reason, surpassing even Murky and Co.

I've read through the original doc of Outlaw multiple times, each time it was enjoyable, each time it was fun and each time, I had a great time. I consider Outlaw to be the unofficial 6 on the big five stories. I.E; The Original, Project Horizons, Pink Eyes, Heroes and MN7. And you've got my attention with this, Mate, all the way.

If you get the chance to read this, then I'd like to extend my thanks to you in some way. Whenever you can, hit me up in PM's.

-Yours truely, TheVoidPone.

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I like the story.....sooo would you do more?

Hey, I wanted to say that your writing is inspiring. I read the first chapter of the original version of Outlaw, and thought about what some others said - that it was good but the rewrite is so much better. This is so very true, but it also inspired me to believe that writing good stories was possible, and that writing more made it better. I've caught up with the rewrite of Outlaw, but wanted to hold off on reading the original in case you came back. I've got plenty of other things to go through first, but I can't promise I won't wait forever. Even still, I'm sure I'll end up reading the rewrite anyway. All the best, Tofu.

Why must I always find great stories that are dead.

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Because that is the pain of life, and really quite fitting for this genre of story tbh.