She really ought to have known better.
It had been the perfect setup, though. Scootaloo's scooter had been sitting in the road on top of a hill, while Scootaloo had climbed into the wagon hooked up to the back. She'd been chatting away with those two other blank flanks, totally oblivious to anything around her. And down the hill had been a mud puddle with their name on it.
So what else was there for her to do? It wasn't like they didn't totally deserve it for what had happened with Babs, anyway, and imagining the look on their faces as they sailed right into the mud was almost worth it in itself. So she pushed the wagon, sending it rolling down the path.
And then everything went wrong.
The wagon hadn't gone right down to the mud puddle, the way she had planned. Instead, it missed the puddle and hit some rocks beyond it at high speed. All three of them had flown out of the wagon on impact. It was the first time she'd ever seen the chicken fly, though, with the way she landed with a thud on the ground, her wings were useless as ever.
Sweetie Belle lay next to her, and Apple Bloom had been thrown onto a pile of rocks. A moment later, the wagon itself landed with a horrible cracking sound and a painful scream. It had crashed right into Apple Bloom, and her legs were right between the wagon and the rocks.
Diamond Tiara hesitantly walked closer to the site of the crash. She didn't really want to associate herself with it, given how badly wrong that had gone, but it had a certain horrid fascination. She had done this, and she just had to see the results.
While Scootaloo and Sweetie Belle were lying there groaning, and were battered and bruised, they looked like they'd be fine. Apple Bloom was a different matter. She seemed to have passed out, and what she could see of her legs below the wagon didn't look good. She was pretty sure that there were bits sticking out that should still be inside them.
Miss Cheerilee was at the crash scene, checking on the three of them while talking to a nondescript stallion she didn't recognise. A few other colts and fillies milled around at the crash scene, looking on with a mixture of horror and curiosity.
The stallion nodded to Miss Cheerilee and galloped off, presumably going for help. Miss Cheerilee then said something to a blue unicorn filly with golden mane, who took over watching over the crusaders and making sure nopony else got too close.
Then, much to her shock, Miss Cheerilee headed straight in her direction. She immediately launched into something between a lecture and a rant, and it was obvious Cheerilee blamed everything that had happened on her!
It just wasn't fair! She was acting really upset, too. The other foals in the area were all backing away from the two of them, and she was sure they'd spread gossip all over town about this. There was no way she was going to be living this down.
A team of ponies arrived with a cart as Cheerilee was still ranting. They got the wagon out of the way, very carefully moved Apple Bloom on to a stretcher and loaded her on the cart, then moved the other two crusaders on as well before taking off.
Diamond hadn't exactly been paying the best attention to what Miss Cheerilee had been saying, and not all of it was that intelligible anyway, but she did catch something about talking to her parents.
She would have thought Miss Cheerilee would have remembered that Mommy had died a few years ago. It was going to just be Daddy, and Daddy would straighten it all out for her. He always did.
Somehow, though, thinking about Apple Bloom as she'd been taken away on the stretcher, and the way you could see the bones in her leg where the wagon had hit, she wasn't so sure.
In her bedroom, Diamond sat on her bed, trying not to nibble on her hooves or chew on her mane, or any other of those disgusting nervous habits she still found herself doing from time to time. She hardly needed to have to have another hooficure or mane styling done, as she expected Daddy wouldn't be very sympathetic to that right now.
She'd been sent upstairs shortly after Cheerilee had arrived at the manor to discuss what had happened, and her and Daddy had been talking down there ever since. She was trying to relax, but every so often, scraps of what they were saying downstairs drifted up.
Daddy was angry. She had never heard him yelling this loudly before, even when a particularly big business deal fell through. He was so angry that she was actually starting to get pretty scared.
"So you actually saw my daughter shove the wagon before the accident?"
She winced. That did explain why Cheerilee had jumped on her back about what had happened so quickly. She hoped Daddy believed her over Miss Cheerilee. Still, she was probably grounded.
Diamond still couldn't make out most of the conversation that was going on down below. Usually when things did drift up, it was Daddy she heard, because he was so much louder than Miss Cheerilee. The things she heard him say did nothing to calm her down.
"Both of her hind legs have been fractured?"
Oh, that sounded bad, though it certainly matched with what she had seen. She didn't like Apple Bloom, but that didn't mean she wanted her legs broken. She might even have to be nice to her for a while, and try to find some way to make up for it.
"So you can show a consistent pattern of her maliciously targeting them in the past?"
That was hardly fair! She wasn't being malicious. Not really. They were just a lot of fun to mess with. It's not like she had really meant anything by it. They were really just asking for it, anyway.
The voices were gradually fading as the conversation dropped to a more reasonable volume, not that that helped her state of mind any. She remembered how he'd acted after Mommy had died. He'd been calm and collected, but you could see the fury burning somewhere behind his eyes.
Not to mention he'd been acting pretty odd for a while. She'd noticed him just staring off into the distance a few times, and not paying attention to what was going on around him. He'd been a little forgetful, and some of his decisions didn't always make the most sense to her, though there was probably something she was missing. And he'd been getting upset more easily than usual, though not like this.
She was so dead. She really wished Mommy was here right now. She'd always managed to calm everypony down before things got too bad, and Mommy would have been there for her right now. She missed her.
Maybe she should stop picking on those blank flanks so much. Sure, they were really lame, and made easy targets, but things just kept getting worse and worse between them.
She supposed she could try to offer a truce, but Diamond doubted they would ever take it. There was just too much bad blood between them. They could never be friends, and she wasn't sure any of them would be able to leave each other alone.
The conference was probably over by now. She thought she'd heard the front door a little bit ago. Daddy was probably just letting her stew over everything that had happened before they talked about it, which was fine, since that gave him a chance to calm down, too.
There was a knock on the door. Opening it a crack, she saw the familiar face of Mister Greywithers, their faithful butler. As she started to greet him, it was obvious something was wrong. She'd been mostly raised by her mother and Grey, and most of the time, he was willing to let his stiff demeanor drop somewhat around her. Today, he was acting very formal, and very much the part of the prim, proper butler.
"The master has requested your presence in the study, ma'am," he said stiffly.
Oh, this was bad. For him to act this formal with her, something he was really uncomfortable about had to be going on.
"Thank you, Grey," she said. "I'll be down directly."
Okay, she was walking into a tempest. How should she approach this? Should she just deny everything? Would bursting into tears and saying she was sorry help? Maybe she should just meekly submit to everything he said?
Not coming to a firm conclusion, she decided she'd better just play it by ear. Slipping out of her room, she easily caught up with Greywithers.
"So how mad is he, Grey?" she asked him softly.
"I'm sure it isn't my place to say, ma'am," he said, avoiding looking in her direction.
Really mad, she interpreted. Really really mad.
She ought to be fine. Daddy had always stood by her before, and this shouldn't be an exception, even if he was mad. So why was she shaking as she walked down the hall?
Arriving at her father's study, the elderly butler held the door for her, and followed her inside.
Daddy was sitting behind his desk in the study, putting the final touches on some paperwork in front of her. Hearing the door open, he looked up and glared in her direction with such intensity that she found herself looking away uncomfortably. He stood up, and pushed the chair back.
"Thank you, Greywithers. Leave us for a few minutes, but stay nearby, as I'll be needing you afterwards."
Mister Greywithers nodded and left the room, closing the door afterwards, leaving her alone at the mercy of her father. She'd have rather been anywhere else.
"Sit," he told her curtly, though Daddy didn't sit back down himself.
Diamond obediently took a seat, heart racing, as he paced back and forth, agitated.
"Diamond Tiara. To say I am disappointed in you is a huge understatement, but for the moment it will have to do. As a direct result of your actions, three of your classmates are in the hospital, and one is seriously injured. What were you thinking?"
Under his glare, she could hardly help herself, and started stammering out excuses. "It wasn't me! Miss Cheerilee—"
"Miss Cheerilee saw you push the wagon with her own eyes, and has several witnesses to back her. Care to revise that?"
"It was an accident! I didn't mean it!" That was almost true, at least.
"According to all reports, you grinned, and then shoved all your weight against the wagon. That is not an accident, but a deliberate act. I didn't ask you for excuses. I simply want to know this. Why did you do it?"
"I thought it'd be funny!" she finally confessed in desperation.
"You… thought… it… would… be… funny." He rubbed his eyes wearily for a moment, and then continued. "A filly is currently lying in the hospital with two broken hind legs. She may be limping for the rest of her life. She might not walk at all. Is that funny?"
"No," she mumbled.
"I can't hear you. Is that funny?"
"No!"
"Tell me, what business gave Rich Enterprises its start? And, in fact, is still our most major supplier and directly responsible for our success?"
"Um, Sweet Apple Acres?"
"And who runs Sweet Apple Acres?"
"Granny Smith?" she guessed.
"She used to. These days, she passed on all the business aspects to Applejack and Big Macintosh, as you would know if you payed any attention to my business dealings. Now, you have been the heir to my business. Who do you think they will be passing the farm on to when they get older?"
With all the stress, Diamond's mind was drawing a major blank. Business wasn't her strongest suit anyway.
He huffed. "Let me give you a little hint. You have been tormenting her for years, and she is now lying in a hospital, both leg broken, which I may add is also your doing. I am covering her hospital bills personally, but I wouldn't be surprised if she wants as little as possible to do with Rich Enterprises, both now and in the future. All due to you."
Diamond looked down and closed her eyes. She'd never really thought about it that way before. Not only had she hurt Apple Bloom, she was hurting his business, and worse, had disappointed Daddy. He still wasn't done, though.
"You have paid no attention to the details of how my business is run, and your schoolwork shows you have no aptitude for it. You spend all of your time antagonizing everypony around you, and now you are even putting them in danger. Your mother spoiled you rotten."
He stopped his pacing and stood directly in front of her.
"She did it with my help, sadly." He shook his head. "And you cry crocodile tears any time you think you aren't going to get your way."
Tears were, in fact, streaming down her face, but this time there was nothing fake about them. Hearing her father tear her down like that had hurt, and he was probably right. She opened her eyes back up when she felt him unceremoniously yank the tiara off her head.
"You should be paying attention to the world around you. Instead, you spend all your time admiring this!"
He flung the tiara to the ground, and stomped on it angrily several times. There was a terrible crash of hooves on metal, and it shattered into pieces, diamonds flying loose from the twisted, broken metal. Diamond stood there in shock, looking down at it. She'd had that tiara for as long as she could remember.
"That's all over now. You certainly can't handle the business, so I'm making my second cousin heir to Rich Enterprise. We may not see eye to eye, and she may not have a great head for the business, but she'll certainly do better than you ever could."
Still reeling from the destruction of her precious tiara, it took a moment for this to sink in.
I'm not my father's heir any more?
He eyes grew wide. It was like her worst nightmares, all wrapped together and coming to life at once. "Wait! Y-you c-can't—"
"I can, and I am," he said, stomping one hoof on the ground. A piece of her broken tiara clattered next to it. "Matters are clearly beyond the point of fixing. What's more, I am formally disowning you. I simply cannot tolerate your behavior any more."
What?
"Greywithers?"
He popped in the room so quickly that Diamond had to wonder if he had been listening in. Filthy Rich turned to him.
"Please escort Miss Diamond Tiara off the premises. As of today, she is no longer welcome here."
"Sir?" he said, in a questioning tone.
"You heard me," he said sternly. "She has failed me for the last time. As far as I am concerned, she is no daughter of mine. Get her out of my sight. She is not to be allowed anywhere in the manor."
Her brain starting to kick back into gear, Diamond protested. "Daddy, no! I can change! I can do better, I promise!"
She ran up to him, heedless of the broken metal and precious gems scattered on the floor, and tried to put her forearms around him in a hug, desperate to do something, anything to get him to reconsider. Diamond found herself so abruptly shoved back that she toppled over backwards, and had to pick herself back up.
"I've already made up my mind," he said coldly, one eye giving a twitch. "This has gone on for far too long."
"B-but where can I go? What can I do?"
He turned away. "Frankly, that is no longer my concern. Greywithers!"
At that, the butler gently but firmly escorted her out of the mansion, picking her up delicately when she dug her heels in and refused to move.
"Grey!" she pleaded. "You've known me your whole life! You can't let this happen!"
"I am sorry, Miss Tiara," he said. "But my loyalty is first and foremost to Mister Rich, as the head of the Rich family. I will talk to him about this, but until I have permission, I cannot allow you to come back."
"I—" she started to say, and then choked up. She just didn't know what she could say.
"I'll do what I can. That is all I can promise you," he said, and then closed the door. She could hear the clicking of locks and bolts being set in place.
Diamond just stood there afterwards, paralysed and afraid. What could she do now?
Jeez, what in the hell is the Crusadermobile made of? Lead? We've seen those three survive (with barely a scratch) huge falls from ziplines, doors slammed against their faces and entire floats coming off cliffs and apparently it's heavy enough to break the one that's MOST indestructible.
I don't think the lightweight tin of most wagons would do that.
Anyway, a pretty good start (Filthy acting so quickly on his anger seems a touch forced) and there's a lot of ways you could be going with it, so I look forward to more.
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You know, in my mind, her legs were actually between the wagon and a large rock, but I revised that scene a good dozen times, and that detail must not have made it through. That was one of the spots I was worried about, though.
And actually, well, we'll hear more about Filthy Rich later on...
Terribile situzione.
Temo che Tiara finirà sotto terra
In my opinion Filthy Rich probably acted on his anger like that due to the fact that he was trying to save the relationship with Sweet Apple Acres, and was also really pissed off.
Filthy Rich being pissed and disappointed at Diamond Tiara for her behavior I can see, especially since her picking on Apple Bloom can come to negatively effect hie business ties with the Apples should they after this latest escapade decide they want little to due with the Riches.
For him to completely disown his own daughter and throw her out on the street however, reeks of disproportionate retribution and frankly sounds out of character for Mr. Rich even given the little of his character we've seen in the show.
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Of course, that's no excuse for what he's done.
In fact, I'm not sure the Apples will appreciate this very much. Think about it: They're all about family. Now Diamond did something horrible, and it's clear something has to change- and what does her father do?
He throws her out. Abandons her.
For one thing, he's choosing to ignore the problem instead of trying to fix it. Literally ignoring it; claiming he has nothing more to do with her, and by extension, the mess she's made. One could call this cowardice, and that's putting it mildly.
Furthermore, he just threw out his own daughter! How is he going to sell this to Applejack? To Granny Smith? Does he honestly believe they'd have any interest in making business with a man who casts out his own children? Even worse, if indeed the Apples choose to cut their ties with Filthy Rich due to his own behaviour, he'd probably claim that that's Diamond Tiara's fault, too.
What she did was horrible, but what he did was disgusting, pure and simple.
...wow. I wasn't expecting that.
I do feel that disowning and then throwing out one's daughter is an enormous overreaction, but this is clearly a Filthy Rich who's accustomed to making hard, fast calls. (Although I'm suspecting it might be a ploy). Anyway, this is a great start and I can't wait for more! I'm finding this strangely oblivious Diamond Tiara quite interesting.
The one comment I have about Diamond Tiara is that not caring about her father's business is out of character. She was the only pony listening attentively as he discussed Barnyard Bargain's business strategy in Family Appreciation Day.
2502933 I'm not saying what he did was smart, or acceptable. I'm just saying that's probably why he did it.
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Oh yes, quite- I didn't think that's what you were doing either! I should have made that clear in my initial post; mea culpa.
I'm really hoping that Filthy is doing this to throw a huge scare into her, most likely in conjunction with the Apples, so that she'll learn a necessary lesson quickly and deeply.
Still, scarring a child's psyche like that is … wow.
About time somepony did something about that useless brat. Thank you, sir.
Though maybe he should have just carted her off to the nearest orphanage.
Hmmm, a lot of responses to this.
Well, I know wanting to work on this is one of the things that's been delaying the next chapter of Just Winging It.
I actually find this a really interesting scenario. Generally people either have lots of horrible things happen to DT and SS with no consequences, or they redeem Silver Spoon and leave Diamond Tiara behind. I'm trying something a bit different.
I'm not sure how well I'll pull it off, but we'll see what happens. I'm actually finding writing her inner dialog fascinating for this. Though keeping her in character is difficult.
Incidentally, those of you that remember that my birthday was a few weeks ago, I took a few days off around my birthday, and on one of them, I wrote the first 2 drafts of the first 3 chapters of this. I'm actually very happy with one of the paragraphs in the second chapter...
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Afraid I only speak english, but, yes it's a terrible situation. I can, however, assure you that if I intended Diamond Tiara not to survive, I would have put a Tragedy tag on this fanfic. Not that I didn't come close to doing that anyways...
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Seems a fair analysis, though I might add 'not thinking properly' to that.
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I suppose he could be acting out of character...
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Oh, certainly the Apples would be horrified if they found out. Any decent pony would.
Not to mention that there are other ways he could have gone about things if he felt he couldn't handle her any more. Send her off to boarding school far from Ponyville. Have her live with relatives.(At least one's been mentioned, right?) Even drop her off at an orphanage, though I think he'd have to go out of town for that.
Just kicking her out on the street, at her age, is criminal.
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Thanks!
Incidentally, I do plan on adding this to the Apple Bloom group at some point, but I'm waiting until she's out of the hospital. And, yes, Twist will probably have a minor walk-on role.
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Good point. Though, for what was shown on the screen, she could easily have just been thinking "Yes, my daddies awesome and owns you all. Bow to me." and not have actually been paying that much attention.
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Would the Apples go along with that?
But, yeah, by this point in the fanfic, she needs years of therapy, and it's only just started.
In fact, she really needs a hug about now. Where's SweetAI Belle when you need her?
... *mindblown* Oh my god...
the most original story ever. Can't wait for more!!
Okay, I'm grinning wider than a cat now, Fav'd.
This may the point where Diamond decides that there is nothing she can do to redeem herself so she decides just go full tilt into doing bad things thinking that if nopony would like her no matter what she does at this point why bother following any rules at all.
That scene at the end was harsh, I almost expect Princess Celestia to also come in declaring that Diamond be banished for her "Crimes Against Harmony".
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I think there are other Diamond Tiara redemption stories out there.
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Heh, thanks. Almost makes me feel guilty that I'll be bringing in one of the more unoriginal things ever soon.
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Thanks!
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You know, there are so many ways I could go from this start it's ridiculous. I almost hope other people start writing homeless!Diamond Tiara fics, so I could read them.
And, yes, it was harsh. I've now got a traumatized main character to deal with. Though keep in mind, the main one acting out of proportion here is Filthy Rich. If Princess Celestia came down, Diamond would actually have an easier time of it, since she'd make sure that Diamond Tiara was placed with a new family.
But nothing about the situation really warrants her attention at the moment.
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A few, yes. They just generally aren't that common, and I'm not sure I've seen homeless!Diamond Tiara before, though I've seen her living on Sweet Apple Acres both permanently and temporarily in the past.
Clean Slate and My Worst Enemy come to mind, and both are really good...
It's a good opening, I'll say that much. The only real remark I have to it is that I had to look up what size the wagon is compared to the fillies. For some reason, I pictured it smaller and lighter than what it most likely is.
DT's punishment sounds about right in character, but as an outside observer it still looks harsh. The whole situation is painful, and doubly so because there's no obvious way to make things right. Whatever punishment is given is either going to be seen as disproportionate (like here) or nowhere near enough (as we see on the show most frequently).
Little remark, too: when the tiara gets smashed, you have a double 'just', with no dash to imply stuttering or collecting of words.
2499257 I have to agree. If she could survive all those those other things, thats not very likely not a bad start though
I may be in the minority here but the way DT's father acted doesn't seem right, I mean the the build -up between the her and her father doesn't match the climax.
I know DT hospitalized three ponies, one of which was a major supplier to her fathers business
seems more of "Your going to make it up to them some how" type punishment(will admit a little to light, but can't think of another punishment ).
But full on disowning? That seems TO extreme
But for now im going to chalk it up as "Filthy is not entirely right in the head" and "He probably blames DT for his wifes death"
any way good start
I really didn't think that i'd ever feel bad for Diamond Tiara, even after she did THAT.
IT'S ABOUT TIME!!!!!
Someone needed to put that ass in her place!
THANK YOU, FANFIC WRITER!!!!!!
Filthy is definitely overreacting here
I love these Diamond Tiara Gets Redeemed stories, though most of them have her being redeemed by living with the Apples...not that I'm complaining - most of them are fabulous! But it's been done countless times.
Or they end with romance between her and Apple Bloom, or Silver with Sweetie. Not saying that's bad either, but I'm not really into those ships I guess.
I've certainly never seen a Diamond Tiara Gets Disowned story, though. Interesting, shall spend the rest of the day reading.
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I agree. Diamond Tiara's punishment would be harsh and ruthless, for what her thoughtlessness and selfishness had wrought (her cruelty DESERVES punishment, and a LOT until she gets that you can't treat others however you like). . . but disowning her feels OOC for Filthy Rich.
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Not sure if that help her or make her think she can get away with MORE.
Okay, Filthy was RIGHT to tell Diamond Tiara what the disaster she's been making and her flaws and punishing her (losing her namesake? Possibly how she earned her cutie mark? Ouch) and a WHOLE LOT MORE! But DISOWNING HER? That ISN'T what a father does!
She's a spoiled child who needs to be taught actions have consequences, but declaring her to be a lost cause, that isn't what a parent does.
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Punishing her to the point where she never even THINKS of taunting Applebloom again and makes amends even if she has to crawl through the mud for it? Sure. But disowning doesn't feel in character.
I didn't know ponies watched Gone With the Wind...
I think you should put 'paralyzed' with something. like, fear or shock or whatnot
That was .. sudden. I suppose this could be Filthy. After all, the show gives us just a brief glimpse of him, so we don't really know what he's like.
However, this seems pretty harsh. Let's see if you can justify (for lack of a better word) this.
4619453 In Family Appreciation Day, Filthy seems to be forcing Diamond Tiara to sing to the water, perhaps to change her attitude by doing something silly.
Um... Wow. I really, really hate Diamond Tiara, but reading about her getting disowned... I think this is the only time I've ever felt sorry for her.
I'm sorry...but I burst into laughter at the end of this chapter. I couldn't help it, my suspension of disbelief only stretches so far.
dang.... I feel sorry for tiara, she didn't mean for them to get injured, she just wanted the wagon to go into the mud not the rocks. And even then, thats not something to disown your daughter over, talk about zero love in that family. Dang Rich, the only reason your daughter acts that way is cause you don't care man!!!
Gonna be honest, you had my attention at first, but as I read this chapter, it became heavily just like trying to deal as much damage to Tiara as you could in one go. Him being mad is reasonable, but disowning and casting his daughter out seems a tad much considering this is the first time her antics have turned up actually harmful.
Is the Sun Glimmer cameo new, or did I just miss it the first time around?
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That is, in fact, a new cameo. Luminary mentioned that Miss Cheerilee really ought to have checked up on them before yelling at Diamond, and I decided when I needed a bit part for a character to use her.After all, Archer's gotten a cameo, so why not give Sun Glimmer some time, too?
--arcum42
If I were Diamond...I'd probably run away and become a super villian. But thats' just me
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It may have occurred to her at least once or twice in chapters after this one...
--arcum42
Great start! And even though the "DT hurting the CMC really seriously" is starting to get overused, I am safe to say that you've renewed the entire idea! Good job; I'm impressed.
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She looked upon those beneath her, and was stripped of her station and even her own home.
...Ironic punishments can hurt...
I don't like how Filthy disowned her. I enjoy seeing DT getting what's coming, but disowning is harsh. I would've imagined he'd just kick her out for a time or maybe ask the Apples to take her in and force her to work the fields and sleep in the barn.
Fuck you rocks.
mmmmmmm
i think i enjoyed that too much
YEEEEEEOOOOOWCH!
Reading that set my teeth on edge. I think the homeless!Diamond idea is nice, but yeah, disproportionate retribution is a word I'd definitely use to describe this. This might work if we had some amount of build up, of Filthy being more concerned about his business than his daughter, or maybe Tiara's "push" being more premeditated, but...
Filthy Rich...dude...accidents fuckin' happen, man. Get over it.
Without some sort of previous development, it just seems cruel and unjustly mean. This needed an injection of four letter words and some comedic sociopathy. Playing it straight is too harsh.
It needed to go something like this:
Diamond: "I put bubblegum in Apple Bloom's hair!"
Rich: "TEN THOUSAND YEAR'S BANISHMENT!"
*Slams the door on her face.*
Diamond: " What the flyin' BUCK was THAT all about?!"
*Door opens again.*
Rich: "LANGUAGE, young lady!"
*Slams the door on her face again.*
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If it helps, disproportionate retribution is a phrase I'd use to describe it as well, and I wrote it. Of course, I know what's going on behind the scenes...
--arcum42
A bit over the top, but well written. I will see where this goes.