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I think Fluttershy is the cutest and most adorable pony.


Sam Canton is nobody special. He has a normal job, doing the same normal things as other normal people. His life is not spectacular, and he likes it that way. But one day he decides to take a walk, unaware that this was going to turn into no ordinary walk. He ends up finding a injured Pegasus, and takes it home to help it, unaware that this is no ordinary pegasus.

This is a Fluttershy/Human story where Fluttershy ends up on Earth and is trying to get back home with the help of a human.

Once again, I have to thank my proofreader Achaian! He does wonderful editing, and allows me to bring to all of you the best work possible. Please visit his page! http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Achaian

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 26 )

I have to say that this is a great improvement from your other story that it's actually a surprise to see. Other than giant paragraphs that could be split in three parts easily, and mistakes with various wordings which I will list out below - oh, and the all too happy insertions of too many exclamation marks where they aren't needed - I don't have much to complain about here about the story. I'd like to see how you go about developing this story further.

Here are the words that you messed up on and the correct word (in italics) you should have used:

Drug - dragged
Sooth - soothe
Suppost - supposed

I still think you can delve deeper with a little more detail that would've been appropriate, but it's nothing that really matters all too much. It's just really to make the world you're creating really breathe. There's also a few parts which I'd change to put it in a slightly different way.

Also, 'pathetic' is a very harsh word. I personally wouldn't recommend you use that for your character to describe Fluttershy in that manner.

I'm usually completely anal about this, but here's a thumbs up to counter the random thumbs down to spur you on. At this point where only a single chapter exists, I think it's unfair to give a thumbs down until there is more content uploaded. Some people just don't want to give others room to breathe, I guess.

Oh, I drug my parents here so many times.

What a terrible child Sam was! I think a little correction should do the trick. The thought dialogue would look better if they were italicized, not in bold letters.

That aside, it's a good start for a story that seems oddly familiar. Fave and like!


Drug - dragged
Sooth - soothe
Suppost - supposed

This is my fault.

Also, 'pathetic' is a very harsh word.


1. causing or evoking pity, sympathetic sadness, sorrow, etc.; pitiful; pitiable: a pathetic letter; a pathetic sight.

- Dictionary.com

Knowing you, I can safely say that you are much more prone to consider the negative connotations of a word. However, you must not let your perception of a definition affect your judgement to the point where it maligns the entire definition as defined by the community of users.

I still think you can delve deeper with a little more detail that would've been appropriate

This is a stylistic preference and does not go the extreme that it would affect the objectivity of his writing, but as you say:

it's nothing that really matters all too much.

Aside from what I have made note of I agree with you.

Looking forward to reading what happens next.

2412038 Your profile pic made me shed a tear. R.I.P. Bionicle. :raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:


Heh, thanks for catching that. My proofreader was tired. And I do apologize for having you guys wait so long for an update. The collaboration I am working on with my proofreader kind of took over and this story got forgotten. But now that the colab is underway, I can do more with this story. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I wanted to make Sam as believable as possible.

It's all right. The longer I wait, the more I get excited about it. :raritywink:

Comment posted by Lord of Onichan deleted Jul 10th, 2013

You, sir, must continue writing this. You have my unwavering attention and I hope this is continued soon.

:pinkiesad2: really touching!!!! :pinkiesad2: that's really a tender moment that makes me wanna cry with happiness :pinkiesmile:

There was so much fuzziness inside me that my heart popped! You convinced me. I want Fluttershy! It's been along time since I read something as adorable as this. Even though Fluttershy isn't real (and I pray she will be), I think I can relate, the adorable part that is. You just brightened my night, my friend, and I appreciate it. :yay:

And now, for some mistakes. I hope you don't mind.

“I-I’m stuck here, aren’t I.” Sam looked over at her.

It should end with a question mark. Maybe you had a typo or something.

Something inside of my told me that I couldn’t just leave you there.

I think you had another typo here.

Something inside of me...

That should do it! :twilightsmile:

Another great chapter.*raises wine glass* Well done.

Excellent! I am so happy to hear that all of you enjoyed it. I know it took a while, but I hope it was worth the wait.

2575867 Oh spirits. I had just gotten over that, and now... BAWWWWWW!!!:raritycry::raritycry::raritycry::raritycry:

“Why did this happen to me Sam? Why did this happen to me?” She turned her head and buried her muzzle into the front of my shirt. POV switch? Or just wishful thinking?:ajsmug:

2925763 Did I seriously... reply to my own comment and not even realize it until I looked at my inbox? *Snerk* Well... :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh: BWAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!! That is such a gaff! I should delete the comment, but I think I'll leave it up. LOL!


Ha ha ha, no, it isn't wishful thinking. It's a problem I have sometimes when I write where I unconsciously switch between first and third person view. I did it a lot this chapter and I thought I had caught all of them. I guess I missed one. Thanks for letting me know :pinkiehappy:

I hope to God your story is successful. It's so full of feeling. :ajsmug::yay::twilightsmile:

i wish could read more :fluttershysad:
good job mate keep up the good work :yay:
and your story is 20% cooler it my piece of S*** of a story :rainbowlaugh:

I'll pay you 120 bits to write more chapters of this outstanding story.


*sigh* I would except that my writing had gotten so rusty because I haven't written anything for such a long time, it would take quite a while until I felt it was back up to the standards I set for myself when I started this fic. But I'm glad you enjoyed what I have so far. Maybe someday I will get it finished. One day...

White Cloud

Well done. Better than my current stories I'm writing. sigh Being a one man team sucks. Can I get an Amen

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