Wow, i liked this a lot. One thing that I could never really get used to in your story was the feeling that I jumped into it without reading the prequel, that there has been emotional development that I skipped or something.

It wasn't bad, but it was slightly annoying. Anyway, that's missing from this and I really enjoyed all of it.

Keep up the good work.

2506290 I hadn't planned on writing anything more at all about Rainbow and Flutters, but this, for whatever reason, felt like something fun that I really wanted to write. I actually agree that the lack of emotional development is a little jarring, given the rest of the chapters. It probably should have been made it's own story altogether, with a ~six month gap between the last two chapters, but...clop. Welp.

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That wasn't exactly what I meant. There was emotional development in the new chapter, or at least you can see that they've both changed for the better so far.

What I found annoying in the earlier chapters is that the whole Gilda emotional mess stuff kinda popped out of nowhere. It was just slightly disconcerting when you can't follow the the reasoning behind things. Though it made sense in later chapters so it went from bad to merely annoying at worst.

Also I do not approve of the standard wingboner, I get they might display their for courtship but the idea of the wings becoming stiff and upright just seems stupid. There are huge problems with the idea.

Biggest one, none of them would survive puberty. One little glance at a flank could spell death.

2506595 Ahh, I see what you mean. Yeah, I can see how that'd be a bit jarring that way. But, in my experience, past relationships really can broadside out of nowhere. Surprise! Minefield.

I actually agree about the wingboners, that's a considerable amount of artistic license. The idea of a wingboner is kinda hazardous! I tried to give the impression that it takes a considerable amount of .. 'stimulation' to provoke that sort of response.

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Good point, but I still don't see an actual reason for the wings to go rigid ever. Of course it is kind of funny, at least until the boner part of the words gets taken a bit too literally.

Yeah, I've actually seen authors do that, it's....sad.

Always squee. Always

Wow. That's the best 'into the relationship' FlutterDash I've ever read. Most people get to the point where they admit their feelings, and the just stop. You went further; I appreciate that.

Also dildos.

2510008 Thank you! Seeing how a relationship develops into every day life is something I enjoy reading, so I thought I'd write something that I would like to see more of. :)

And yes, toys. Seriously underrated. Let's face it, hooves aren't great for a lot of things. If sex toys did not exist, it would be necessary to invent them.

Hm, I like this addition to the story. It goes along quite well. I enjoyed the feeling of the story with them actually being in the relationship. Keep up the great writing! I look forward to reading more from you soon!

I like to see a clop that isn't entirely about how they just have to have sex. I loved the passion between them, and the first scene, it was original and it kept me on edge (Literally). I'm in awe of your writing technique. A like and a favorite from me for such a riveting story.

3303394 Huffington.

oh god seriously ;') so beautiful, i love when this kind of moments are not all about just having clop because...clop. seriously i love the way you write

Phew! Thank you very much for your work on this, it's quite awesome X3 Not to mention, wingplay! <3

3595249 b.vimeocdn.com/ps/471/976/4719763_300.jpg to reply? (thanks for bringing me back to this fic btw)

Commence read.

Finally got around to reading this.

A sweet story.

I've been reading for so long butitsooogood

love me some Flutterdash. good story. gets The Buccaneer Brony seal of approval