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NintendoGal55


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Companion story to Souldin's Open To Interpretation

Rarity, Twilight and Applejack discuss one certain moment during the fight scene against the Changelings between Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy, in wonder of what REALLY happened. But what of Pinkie's mention of the two Pegasi snuggling together, nibbling each other's ears, and getting all lovey-dovey?

Here's what was going on all along with Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy!

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Comments ( 68 )

Haven't read the story yet

*Looks at the picture*

... oh god...

Great as always.

so sweet it gave me diabetes with a hint cheese also NintendoGal55 will you do a humanized flutterdash?

Definitely gonna RIL tonight. I love bringing up that scene to my less fanatical friends and ruining the show for them, along with their image of me. I'll leave some feedback, and judging by a quick glance, your writing style prompts something positive.

Oddly enough it was not due to having you on my stalking list that I found out that this story had been uploaded, rather I found out that Snuggles and Nibbles had been uploaded due to the fact that four people had favourite Open to Interpretation out of the blue. So yeah, thanks to this story being connected as official canon to my own story, it has in turn been getting more readers for me so as thanks I shall review as of right now... now how I do these reviews again :applejackunsure:?

Oh yes, right, I start things off with the positive. Putting aside the whole :yay::heart::rainbowkiss: factor, which I do always love, there is the rather noticeable adorable factor to it all. Some of it sweet, some of it romantic, some it could be interpreted as the start of something saucy but generally it is all cute. While being cute it is also well written, lots of well-crafted description and clear in what is happening. The way it is written does not dull and it alters its flow ever so slightly at times as to make the relaying of details interesting but retains a smooth pace. The second half truly became entertaining to read, the two discussing the wedding in general was okay but became much greater when addressing more specific things such as the dance. The little drama with Pinkie entering was handled nicely and the moments afterwards all felt like they deserved their place within the story. Also, :yay: SoarJack!
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From my days on the Super Smash Bros section of Fanfiction.net I was herald as the Review King and even now I plan to uphold that title so prepare yourself, here comes the critique. First criticism, while I can understand the repeated use of Nibbly-Wibbly and Snuggy-Wuggy I also feel you could have spaced them out a little better. Even if it was just Rainbow Dash calling Fluttershy Snuggy-Wuggy, then something like Cutie Patooie, then back to Snuggy-Wuggy again, this would have been better than the current case where it is more like Snuggy-Wuggy, Snuggy-Wuggy, Snuggy-Wuggy, Cutie Patooie, Snuggy-Wuggy. I also feel the story is a bit too long, considering that at its core it is but a really cute moment between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash being described in bountiful detail. I feel the length issue though lies more so with the first half of the story rather than the second. To be clear I felt the story started off well but from about this line

Snickering, the cyan mare kissed along Fluttershy's ear before nibbling it again.

to this line

I'm sorry...I suppose the entire wedding vibes were getting to me...”

I felt that the story was taking it's time to feel eventful I guess you could say. As I mentioned in the positives everything became much greater when it became more specific, when the two talked about the dance and Soarin and everything after that all felt like it belonged. All the cute moments for instance felt like they were reactions between comments between the characters and actions such as Pinkie barging in or Rainbow Dash turning off the lights, while the moments in between the two quoted parts felt purposeless, cute simply for the sake of cute (which can be good but does not compare well to your later cute with actual reason outside of just being cute).

As for how well this integrates into Open to Interpretation, it integrates very well and I'm proud to consider this a canonical part of the story. Admittedly there could be improvements, such as adding in a moment where one of the two hears hoof steps (indicating Twilight going on downstairs, and the fact that Twilight's room was close enough to hear all of their nicknames) but this is more than satisfying in that area. So yeah, brilliantly written with plenty of charm, cuteness, and faithful to its source. You provide some interesting things to think about (that Rarity moment is worth applause for originality, truly a problem worth pointing out concerning secret relationships) and make this story more than just a cute FlutterDash moment. As for my favourite part, well that would be

Knock knock knock knockity knock!

Fantastic job, keep up the superb work! :twilightsmile:

How do I do this without seeming rude?

That. Was. Brilliant!
Give yourself a well deserved pat on the back.

Flutter-dash is best ship still! :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

1429449 Thank you SO much! I'm so glad you liked it and that it works well to the story's canon! :pinkiehappy: And as you can see, I managed to keep out what REALLY happened out on the battlefield. That was surprisingly easy, it was all about wording it right.

And I thank you for your critiquing, which I shall take into account and address immediately. :twilightsmile: I'll fix it up here and there, add some things, I'll be doing that right now! I appreciate you taking the time to help me out as well. :pinkiehappy::yay: I'll let you know when.

So hey, that's good you got a few more readers on that story! Call it a free promotion! :rainbowlaugh: So yay for that!

Overall I'm just glad it worked out. And yes! The little SoarJack hinting shout out! I know you like the pairing and I admit it's curious, so I decided to throw in that little something! That fanart is so cute, exactly what I was thinking of! :rainbowlaugh: Ooh yes, that Rarity bit, I think she'd probably say something like that. XD To kind of have the "Oh, she's dancing happily with a stallion, that must mean she's in love!" kind of naivety and also the unawareness of the secret relationship and sexual preference. XD

Knock knock knock knockiy knock!

Thank you very much again! Glad you enjoyed it, I shall fix the bumps in the road, and I'm very glad to have been able to deliver something that has given sweet charms and lots of cuteness and love, and to be able to be integrated into the actual story. I'm so honoured! :rainbowlaugh: Thanks for your feedback! :twilightsmile:

:applejackunsure: hmm. Plot was lacking....but I still found it oddly entertaining.

1429400sweet pre FIM , or post season 2?

Well would have to be the cutest silliest Flutterdash story ever. It was 120% Awesome!
All the way through I was laughing and crying gleefully it was almost too much. This makes me really want to do something with Crashing Angels in a later chapters that references this (like the part you said about them as fillies with Dash lying on top. I soooo want to use that :rainbowwild:)
I think you could have come up with a few more cute names for them to mix it up a little as sometimes the constant use of their two main pet names just got a little repetitive. But I really can't complain as it was so enjoyable to read I was more than willing to overlook such minor issues.
The rest was so well written and cleverly crafted in your use of language you held me ensnared for the whole story.
I love the end where Pinkie thought they were doing something … more… (I think… thats what it came across like to me.)
For a 4k words long story (give or take a bit) it flew by so fast because it was so much fun. I'm going to have to recommend this to a lot of people as its just such a crazy read. You crammed in an almost unimaginable amount of cute. I like over exposure to cuteness :pinkiehappy: and I look forward to any future stories that have scenes that have this overdoes of Flutterdash being cute. They totally seemed in character the whole way and the SoarinJack was GREAT! They do make a good potential couple (almost as good as SoarinFire… I ship Soarin' and AJ to both appealing alternatives. and it just so happened that SoarinJack worked well for this story.)
I have a surprise for you in about 3 hours time, once I've finished writing it. I hope you will enjoy.
Here's something I think 'Shy might also get Dash into doing :pinkiehappy:
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:yay::heart::rainbowkiss:FTW!

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...you had to post that.:ajbemused:
Incoming cute-attack in 3....2...1...

KAWAAAAAAAIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII DESUUUUU NEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!:pinkiecrazy:

1429716 D'awww! You're too sweet! Thanks so very much! :twilightsmile: And yeah, I'm actually REALLY bad with pet names. XD Just terrible, unless there's one that can be obvious. But the point was, especially since Twilight brought it up in Open To Interpretation, she got tired of it after over the tenth time. XD So I was capturing that in there. I have since re-written a few bits and added some stuff, so I hope it's working a bit more. X3

Oh my gosh, yes! Definitely use that adorable element! I read one story where filly Rainbow lay on top of filly Fluttershy, and it was sooooo cute! I just made that my headcanon now. x3 I can't wait to see your use of it! That'll be so cute!

Yeah, the point was to hint at sauciness, but without being blatant about it. XD It's up to the readers to interpret it that way! :rainbowlaugh:

Hee! So thank you again, I'm glad you enjoyed it so much, it means a lot to me! :pinkiehappy: D'awwww, what a cute drawing!! I love it! Yes! I can so see that happening. :heart:

Oooohhh!! :pinkiehappy: I look forward to reading it!

:yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

Very cute. You should make a sequel!:pinkiehappy:

1429949 What story was that? Can you remember?
And about the sauciness... I usually tend to get it and also find it funny when Flutterdash is involved.

1430059 I can! Kind of. XD It's in my favourites, a one-shot, and has an image screenshot of them as fillies. But I forget the title. Trust me though, it's in my favourites, for sure. :pinkiehappy:

So do I! :raritywink::rainbowlaugh:

Woo my picture + i love this story :3

OHNOYOUDIDN'T

I mean, you really did it! You wrote this! Aaaaaugh! :pinkiegasp: *dying from cuteness and wuff overload*

YES! :pinkiehappy:

I swear, that was teeth rottingly cute. Is it weird that I could really see that happening? Like as canon? Meh whatever, FlutterDash woo!:heart:

1430844 Well, Souldin has tried to write it within the canon of the show and it kind of leaks off from there! XD So, I tried hard to capture that spirit here and there!

1430896 Oh dear! XD Need some medicine?

I think Pinkie just keeps popping in in the hopes that she'll 'accidentally' catch them in an even more compromising position. Clearly, she has a voyeurism fetish.

So... sweet... I CAN'T TAKE IT! D'aww! Although the pet names were a bit repetitve, this is probably one of the most adorable stories I have ever read. Open to Interpretation has been on my Read Later list for a while and I had just managed to read it when this story popped up! It goes well with the canon of that story and compliments it superbly! Throughout most of the story, you had me smiling like an idiot at how adorable it was! Seriously well done!
And as always, FLUTTERDASH FTW :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:

Alright, I have to say something real quick. That was... completely, and utterly, the most "smoochy" story I have ever read. I think this picture explains everything...

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1431552 :rainbowlaugh: Oh, you are too much! Wow, so I have a meme now? XD

1431611 :rainbowlaugh: Wow! Awesome. :pinkiehappy:

Thanks by the way! x3 That's just what I do, it's my specialty.

I'm swimming in a sea of saccharine... and it is GLORIOUS. <3

Oh the hilarity. I approve.

Drowning in d'awwww here :yay::heart::rainbowkiss:
Sooooo cute, love the motif of nibbly-wibbly and snuggly-wuggly :rainbowkiss: and the last part at the end, "at least now she could tell them which one was nibbly-wibbly....", GENIUS! Amazing work, feeling inspired to write a fair chunk of my own story now :rainbowkiss:

This has got to be the most sickeningly, disgustingly, generally-puking-rainbows-in-all-directions-y piece of schmaltz I have ever read, and it was glorious!!
:heart::heart::heart::heart::heart:

I think I have diabetes now.

read open to interpretation.
read this story.
I wanna hugz fluttershy and rainbow dash. I WANT IT NOW! oh wait.....unfortunatly no amount of temper-tantrum will manifest them into reality......................
why reality haz to have laws? its not fair!
Lolz ok, thats enough, but seriously, this was epicly cute and does manage to get the blood flowin to mah feels. good work!

note: at least the blood can get to mah feels, its not like the vessels have all been choked up by the excess glucose because i have diabeetus or somethin

Ugh ! sory for having taken so long to post a comment yesterday :ajsleepy: , but i just got my leave from the hospital, witch i have been brought to after my brother found me incouscious in front of my computer. It seems that I have passed out cause my sugar level was to hight.:derpytongue2:

Anyway great job.

1437676 :pinkiesmile: Don't be sorry. I could never hold something like that against you. I'm just so sorry to hear that, but I'm glad you're doing better. :twilightsmile:

Thank you for your feedback!

Diabetic... shock. Must. Find. Insulin!

i think i got a cavity from all the sweetness...:twilightsmile:

The cuteness! It's too much. :yay:

Remembered this song while reading:pinkiehappy: I think it goes well with your stories. A.K.A FlutterDash Love!

And remember to keep being a :raritystarry:STAR!:raritystarry:

d'awwwwwness...... too.......much......to......handle.......can't.......control.......nnnnnnggggggggAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!
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YAY!

You actuallly made a flutterdash story based arround snugling and cuddling :yay:
It was just damn cute. Luckily i remembered to turn on my cutie-machine to prevent me from cutie-overloading. i would have been dead without it.
The funniest part were Pinkie Pie :pinkiehappy: i guess RD and fluttershy have a few things to explain the next morning :twilightsmile:

time to rate it.
1 star, 1 green thumb and 6 out of 6 spikes. oh, wait i think i will use flutterdash instead.
:yay::rainbowkiss::yay::rainbowkiss::yay::rainbowkiss:

1436987 Oh, but there is a level of tantrum that will manifest them... PLUSHIES! I've got my nibbly-wibbly all done, but she still needs her snuggy-wuggy to sit with.

...seriously, I don't think I'll ever be able to look at Rainbow and Fluttershy again without thinking of those names :rainbowkiss:

1431169 Pinkie is totally a voyeur. It's practically canon with how she automatically knows Fluttershy and Rarity's secrets when Twilight promises to keep them, and has the whole town's scrapbooks memorized to help Cranky find his lost love :pinkiehappy: Not to mention how determined she is to snoop through his stuff :pinkiecrazy:

A couple of my teeth started hurting partway through that. Seriously. I'm not sure if the story was too sweet, or if that chip that spiked one of my teeth earlier caused it... I'm betting on the story. It was soooooooo sweet! :yay::rainbowkiss:

It's sooo fluffeh! :fluttershysad::heart:

Well I think I just died a little.....


....from CUTENESS OVERLOAD! :rainbowkiss:

Fantastic, another part to open to interpretation! Absolutly love the first story, and now this :twilightblush:!
Loved it, especially Pinkie's Bursting in and her reaction. Gahh pinkie keep on not understanding context it is ADORABLE! And sometimes frustrating.
Any case Thanks for a lovable read! :heart: :twilightblush:

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