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He's gone, but he's still… here. I can feel him near me, in the room. He's watching me, forced to watch his own father's tears and sadness. I can't see him, but I can feel his sadness as well. I so desperately want to hold him and tell him everything's fine.
That's what a father does; he protects his foals no matter what.
I want to hold him. But he's gone.
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Dear god, this is like the darkest creepypasta shit i've ever read. I feel so sad for him, knowing his son is right there but forever out of reach. But how the hell did Pinkie follow the kids through the mirror?
I think i'd go insane trying to think this story through, and thats never a good thing. Insanity is deserved in the moment, not in the thoughts after.
WOW! This was incredible. Dark and powerful.
Makes me wonder just where they went...
2156545 2156972 Thanks, guys
It's odd; I myself don't see this as too dark or creepy.. Just a portion of what moves around in my brain on a daily basis. 
2157017 It was good enough that I shared the story with my friend V-pony.
Think I shall share it with others as well.
That is... if you don't mind
2156972 Why, to the other side of the mirror. Where everything floats
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2157017 I'll admit it isn't as dark as some thoughts i have, or some stories i've read, but this is still Stephen King grade mindfucking. Bravo good sir, you gave me chills with this.
2157024 No, I don't. I'm actually flattered that you'd do that, lol
2157029 Well, seeing as Stephen King is my favorite writer and biggest inspiration, I guess that is to be expected. Also.. Damn you, Pennywise!
2157062 He's just hungry. You can't blame a guy. Now that i actually think about this, it fits Pennywise's M.O. pretty well. Taking children without trace, but somehow still there. Makes it a touch creepier.
Beep, beep, Richie...
This was mindblowing.... Wow... Just wow.....
This story made me think, while the chances people beginning to spontaneously disappear are pretty slim.... Life is terribly short, and you better say what must be said and do all that you must do before time runs out, because we just might leave this world after years of life or or as soon as this very hour.
2159406 Well, glad you liked it
I'll probably write more similar stuff in the near future 
2159965 if they're going to be anything as fantastic as this story, then I can't wait!
Sweet Jeebus, this was creepy as all hell!
This just earned you a fave, a thumbs up, and a watch....and a
I read this a while ago but for some reason I didn't give it any credit, sorry about that. I liked it, its hard to see something you can't have pass you by forever >~<
5164501 I'm glad you liked it
I hope you'll keep enjoying the rest of my work, should you decide to take a look at it 
Holy crap... My feels.
Wow, this needs, needs a follow up chapter, closure! You've gotta be up to it by now... it's been years.
Honestly, not many writers can give me the chills and make the corners of my mouth tug in so few words.
BTW, I may write something similar to this, or work in into one of my stories.
Bravo & brava
Wow... Never would I thought that it's possible to write something such sad, heartwarming, critical and creepily mysterious. Yet, here it is. All in one package. I'm speechless at this piece. Kudos to you.
PS: There are some words mixed up such as out/our, or/of, but nothing too recurring. Should be easy to spot when you are looking for them.
7834955 Thank you so much!
7834961 You are welcome
Hey there. Me again... Sad to say, this one didn't make it either. If you want to see what I said hop over to the thread
8087270 I'm not surprised, my stories aren't masterpieces. I myself would call them nothing more than average. Still, I'm happy you took the time to review it, and I'll take your advice and hope that my next story fares better
I felt this story in my heart.. it was that good. The thing that bothered me most was this here quote. I don't think you should address the reader in a story, cause the story should be focused on characters, not readers. The characters don't necessarily know they're in a story, and being 'read.'
Great work on the overall story!