The CMC have been acting a bit strange lately... could something interesting have happened between any of them?
As always, I appreciate constructive criticism of any kind. Yayflutters, Mysteriousstranger, Thetwentiest, and Cloudyskies were all inspirations to get whatever this is written, and I hope you enjoy!
Also, for anypony who thought the previous description didn't match up, that's my fault. Originally, this was going to be completely different, but the plot as a whole was changed because my original version was god awful, even compared to the trash that my others are.
Chapters (1)
Oh Cheerilee, you so seedy
I like this.
Short, sweet, and unique, in my opinion.
And no, this liking is not to "justify" my following you.
Interesting..
2993679 In a good way, or not? If my story was awful, it's okay to tell me, because if you don't I will never improve.
good story but can i just say...
THAT BITCH CHERILEE GETTIN INTO DEY BIDDNESS
3182126 Heh, kind of, but writing from the perspective of one of the CMC just wouldn't have worked for this one.
This should get more likes for originality, sort of.
3192608 The current like/dislike ratio is 26:0, which basically comes out to infinity:1. That's easily the best ratio on this site. How could I ask for more?
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Well, something tells me that someone might add a dislike in the future
3192990 It's been out since February. The initial rush of random people and trolls is over, and the only people who will read this now are people who read a more recent story of mine and choose to follow me.
This part of the letter feels like a total copout. Rather than add to the story, it feels like you're bringing attention to the fact that you can't be bothered to actually develop Scootaloo's background at all. Simply hinting at a normal family life, or mentioning her being an orphan or anything would have easily taken up the same or less amount of space, and not drawn attention away from the story.
...seriously?
The biggest problem overall that I see from this story is that I can't actually imagine someone writing a letter like this. The way the information is being presented just doesn't feel natural. It might feel a bit better if it were several letters, the way the information progresses. It would also be a much more interesting story if, across multiple letters, we got responses from the older sisters being written to.
The other problem leading to a lack of believability is the kind of content being written about. Teachers don't typically write letters to parents just because two friends exclude a third friend from conversations during recess. in fact, why is this even grabbing Cheerilee's attention? Everything before the confession seems like it would pass by without notice.
Two of her students kissing might be itself a reason for Cheerilee to write their guardians, for sure. The fact that nothing really bad happens afterwards though could easily make for a very short conversation between the three adults, maybe a few smiles and laughter, and maybe some big sisterly teasing later. Not a teacher concerned by inappropriate behavior though.
Overall it feels like the story could have been more easily told as a guardian+teacher meeting over coffee rather than a letter. At that, concerned by the kiss, Cheerilee could recall some of the buildup to the event if it were worthwhile, but the focus of the story would probably be how the two fillies are generally behaving after the fact, but that the older sisters may want to keep an eye on them after school when Cheerilee isn't able to supervise them.
I realize it is an attempt at a fairly fluffy/cute scene. The execution just sort of ruins it though.
3444414 Yeah, this one wasn't very good. I consider it one of the worst ones I've written. the letter format just doesn't do it for me. I'll stick with regular first person from now on.
These comments are disappointing me. Very disappointed face. >
This is my un-dissapointing reaction: HOLY CRAP. OH MY GOD. OH. MYGOD. OMIGOD. DUUUUUUUUDE THIS IS TOTALLY FABULOUS!!!
*gasp* OMG *gasp* O.M.G. *GASP* OH. EM. GEE. TOO.... MUCH... CUTENESS.... CANT BREATHE.... *dies* 
I TOTALLY ADORE the fact that Cherilee is writing a letter to AJ and Dashie! It's soooooooooo unique and I LOVE IT.
....wait a second. I ship AppleDash. ..........crap.
4618048 Save it. It's really not that good.
4835682 You, sir, need to get better tastes. This story is pretty horrendous.
Sweet!
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you're a prophet.
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nope
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That was a 7 year old comment
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