Scootaloo's first time

by Rainbowfluttergummy

fun

Scootaloo and spike were walking down the busy streets of ponyville, the annual running of the leaves was coming up soon. ``so what should we do today scoots`` inquired spike
``um we could go to the video game store`` replied scootaloo
``great idea`` spike exclaimed.

The two made it to the store and on the top was a huge sign that said 8-bits v-games, spike opened the door for scootaloo and bowed, this made scootaloo giggle.``hey the dragon dude`s got style haha`` called a voice from the back room.
``im guessing your 8-bit`` asked spike
``sure am what can i do for you two`` cheerily replied the tall dark coated pony
``we would like to look at some haybox 360 games and some hoof station 3 games please, could you tell us where they are`` asked spike
``down there at the end of the isle`` said 8-bit as he turned and pointed revealing his manetendo controller cutie mark.

Spike was looking at call of hoof 2, and scootaloo was looking for equestria scrolls 5 marerim. After half an hour of looking spike and scootaloo walked up to the counter and scootaloo handed spike her game and spike put it with his in front of 8-bit.
``that`l be 100 bits please`` said 8-bit
``okay here you go`` replied spike as he handed him the bits
``have a nice day you two`` 8-bit called out as the left
``you too 8-bit`` replied spike and scootaloo at the same time, the giggled and waked toward the library.

When they got back twilight said that in an hour she would need spikes help and untill then he could play his new game, he nodded and said ``cmon scoots lets go`` as he held her hoof and ran up the stairs Twilight laughed to herself and walked to the kitchen.
``okay so what should we play scoots`` asked a happy spike
``umm we could play call of hoof 3`` said scootaloo
``okay`` replied spike.

Twilight called up the stairs an hour later and said ``SPIKE TIME TO HELP WITH DINNER``
``ok twi`` was the response upstairs ``be down in a minute``
``okay``replied twilight.

Spike rushed down the stairs almost tripping on the last few steps, he ran into the kitchen and said ``okay twi what are we making today``
``well i was thinking maybe haygetti and daffodil balls with some RUBYS on the side`` happily replied twilight as she pulled 3 large rubys from her pack
``wow just for me twi`` exclaimed spike
``mmhmm``
``wow thanks so much twi, i love you``
``i love you to spike``.

When dinner was made spike called down scootaloo and they all sat down for dinner.
``so how was your day spike`` inquired twilight
``it was soo much fun`` said spike
``ya, spike bought me a new video game and we got some muffins and a slice of cake from pinkie`` chimed in scootaloo
``sounds like you had lots of fun`` replied twilight as she thought how good cake sounded right now.

After scootaloo and spike helped clean the dishes they ran upstairs to got to sleep
``night twi`` called spike
``goodnight twilight`` said scootaloo
``goodnight you two`` twilight replied as she giggled to herself and though how funny kids are.

hope you like the chap, i havent been writing because ive been working so sorry and hopefully if im not to busy the next chap will be 3X as big.

Comments

[Turfer]

Well,the story's plot is good but it needs an editor,and bad.
English is not your first language, is it?

[Oneyearwarpilot]

I Like where this is going though call of hoof cant be that interesting

[Rainbowfluttergummy]

If anyone could be and editor for me please respnd to this

[FireStorm020]

>>Rainbowfluttergummy I could help with spelling, grammar, and punctuation editing.

[Cytotoxin]

175222

I`d offer, but I`m not sure you`d recognize your story after my editing.

[Violise]

I would also love to edit this piece

[Rainbowfluttergummy]

Thank you all soo much, i hope to get out another chap soon but ive been busy with school

[UsrnameUnrelated]

So it say scootaloos first time so I assumed it was something with clopping or so
the chapters are rather short and well yeah I expected something different but I hope it'll get better
I'll watch ya

[Evil Paladin]

199445 LMAO!!
Whew! *Wipes a tear*
Your comments are the best part of this fic.

[Cytotoxin]

492273

Y`know, using a singular response for everything you`ve written would be just fine. There`s an edit button there for a reason.

As for my comments... It`s quite literal truth. If I were to edit this story, the end result would likely be considered a rewriting from scratch.

[BlackWidower]

Okay, this chapter just feels like you were wasting time. Also, it feels awkward, and the ponypuns were just awful. Why did they go to the video game store? What purpose did it serve in the overall plot? None? Well then honestly, in my opinion, you shouldn't include it!

[Discontinued]

175222 how can someone be an editor? if you can send me previews of each chap then i would love to!

[Brony4ever10]

Well now you have another fan of the story. I read all the chapter and I like it. Hope you can write agian soon.

[Wumz]

Is this still being continued?

[Brony4ever10]

200021 Will this story be continued?

[Sky Charmer]

I am starting to see a pattern here. In every chapter i seem to see more and more notes from the author instead of more story. After awhile the notes just take up most of the page cutting down on how much story you have on each page/chapter. It would be great if you could fix that.

[2091riveraisrael]

Very nice...

[OmniFox]

When was the last time Scoots and Spike did something romantic?

[HarmonyRain]

(eye twitch and heavy breathing) are you trying to get the most dislikes out of every clopfic?