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JitterbugJive
Jitterbug Jive, author/artist of Discord Whooves, Lovestruck Derpy, and Doctor Whooves and Assistant. And other such things.
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*clicks read later in silence*
Not another one.
*marks to read later*
wat
Why do I get the feeling people down voted because they didn't get the context or were simply mad that it wasn't DoctorxDerpy?
1682012 probably just lack of context. a lot of people really seem to like TwilightXdoctor. or also because they just straight up don't like the idea
discorded Doctor Whooves
Sorry Jitters, but you need to add more spaces in here. Its just a big wall of text
Um, but good.... so far
I really do like doctor and twilight, but it seems like its lacking something. I respect you, but this is just too wierd. Making two ponies 'do it'.
1682012 My best guess? Formatting. There's no line breaks between paragraphs except for the one scene change in Chapter 2, and it makes it REALLY hard to read. It's basically one big wall of text in its current form, a massive turnoff to your average reader.
Also, typo in chapter 1:
WHY SO MANY DOWNVOTES? WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!
Well I liked it
I usually don't read clopfics but decided to give this one a go. If anything, it would give me a bit more insight on the characters.
1682012
The down votes is something to be expected every time something is rated mature; people tend to do that on the premise that "you shouldn't write clopfictions". And on the more cynical side, because there wasn't actually any actual clop in it yet.
I will say, you really need to format it better, because it tends to make things more difficult to read when it looks like a solid block of text. And making texts difficult to read is... less than appealing. To put it into perspective, had it not been about 1k word each chapter, I probably would not have finished reading by now (always putting it aside or something). Adding a line break or an indent at the start of each paragraphs should do the trick.
Also noticed that you began doing that in Chapter 2, halfway through. Inconsistent formatting tends to be a problem as well, doesn't look pretty.
Also, I hesitate to say if this is to be truly considered a "clopfic", though this might just be me having the wrong definition of the term. This is not a fic written for the sake of clop (or is it? I don't get that impression). I think of this more as simply a sex scene in a much larger movie, so to speak. Though then again, this is a fic written explicitly on that one moment, not reflecting the whole story so... guess I'll reserve judgement.
Oh, by the way, it's coordinates at the end of Chapter 1. There is no hyphen.
1682012
As stated before, it's probably the formatting. And exactly what 1682437 said. Space it up a bit and perhaps give it another editing run and it'll be fine. I am pretty sure that it wasn't downvoted because of the ship, as I have written a crackship fic which got 600 likes. DoctorXTwilight is surprisingly popular, actually.
Wall 'o texts aren't pleasant to read.
1687705
it very well may still have been the ship but still what you said is likely
What happened to Twi anyway
(really there's not much detail on what happened to the good doc, I am confused on that too)
1698301 things are explained on this tumblr.
1758712
I've been there, still kinda confused.
discord caught him it looks like it's an alternate to zerum whooves (of ask zerum whooves also on tumbler) where he got away, but he doesn't seem to like to talk about it (the how it started, he talks or talked ad nauseum about the decision and the why but not the straw that broke the camel's back)
1682012
have all my upvotes
i love it so far.
Sir, you have all my loves.
...*sighs*....I.....Okay.
4 Years...