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My headcanon is that Changelings don't talk. Haven't seen any evidence to challenge that.
Thanks to Super_Big_Mac and Biker_Dash for editing and pre-reading. Go give them a follow!
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I can't. I already am.
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Hi,
Sorry, I don't like it.
I think my main problem is that it's dissociative - I can't empathise with the main character 'it', so I find it hard to care about the story. I'm not wild about telling the exciting opening sequence as a 'description to the reader'... it kind of kills any tension in that. Also... maybe this is just me, but I didn't get the ending.
I'm really, really sorry.
PS: There's what seems to be an uncapitalised 'it' at the head of the second sentence back from the end of the second paragraph.
perhaps, the changeling should have a name? association is a big part of these kind of pictures. give the changeling a name and perhaps dialogue? heck, i liked it... despite the changeling missing its leg, and the gashes and other assortments, but i like it. keep it up.
2043805 One of the ideas I had surrounding the making of this fic was that the fandom had done too many "changeling turn good" scenarios. I was so sick of that I decided to write from the ACTUAL canon for the changelings; just mindless drones following a Queen.
2044847 tho i see what you mean, i think it should atleast gain some personality