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Nightshade never expected her ordinary room mate would randomly show up from work with a new pet. When she finds that Red has brought home a sentient, unknown species, she suddenly learns that she is going to have to adapt to living with a human in Equestria. She soon discovers a man who knows nothing of his where-a bouts, of how he came to be or even of his true name, but he knows something about her and a few other ponies in Ponyville. She also learns that what she had thought of her special talent might not be true, and as she struggles with her own existential crisis she slowly adapts to a life in which she could not live without this particular human.

But ponies are not just willing to accept the arrival of a human with no explanation. It takes the efforts of Fluttershy's medical advise, Twilight's rigorous research, Applejack's work ethic, an ornery earth pony named Showanne Telle and many others to piece together the story of the mysterious man named Oil.

I will try to keep expletives to a minimum, but the are bound to show up. There will also be bouts of violence, but no gratuitous gore. For those who are sensitive to these themes, viewer discretion is advised.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 20 )

Well I couldn't really find any reason for a red thumb so far, gave you a thumbs up for now.

Let's see where you go with this.

Actually, oil is thicker than blood.




























This is not true tho

This is relevant to my interests and I saw no grammatic derps, you may proceed. I tend to enjoy stories where a character gets taken from their home, plunked somewhere else, and has to adapt to living amongst the natives. I await further installments.

This has the potential to be really interesting. I look forward to reading more.:pinkiehappy:

Oil's characterization is a little off in chapter 2. He gets over his confusion too fast. Other than that, this is a good piece of writing that's worth a read.

Excellent, thumbs up+fav+e-mail

1565599 I was trying to make him seem as if he was just rolling with it. Like the situation was so bizarre and he was just accepting it, since he's unsure if he's dead, alive, or what have you. Any suggestions on how to make it flow more smoothely? I'd love the feedback:heart:

1569002
Even if he was just accepting it as it is, he wouldn't be behaving perfectly normal like that. I think putting the stuff you've just said into his thoughts would help a little.

Hmm, I could be more precise on what I mean if I had done a full, in depth review. Do you have a gdocs version of this?

>>cheezesauce
Yeah, here
This has some errors in it; nothing drastic, just a couple of grammatical errors that a friend pointed out today. Also, I'm trying to keep Oil's thoughts in the dark for now. They get revealed in exposition later.1570097>>1570097

1570131
Okay, I'll have a look at it later. Would you like me to do a full review?

1570422 If you have time, but no pressure.

huh this is different >w> it caught my interest thats for sure

alright upvote from me hope this updates soon im eager on what happens next xP cant wait

A human in Equestria story from another pony's perspective this has piqued my interest.

DF

Nice, solid writing, characters that feel like they have some depth, no glaring errors. A definite thumb up, but I'll wait with adding it to favorite until there's a bit more written, so I can get a feel for the story. In any case, everything points towards this being an interesting read.

Hiya! This looks good. :twilightsheepish:

P4

This is very interesting, and i will be following in hopes of more:ajsmug:

P4

Can I have some more please

you still on because this is a good story you should continue

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