Grief is a funny thing, really. It consumes you until you can't think about anything else. Cadance knows this all too well. But her grief is pushed out of the way when an unexpected visitor shows up, her story changing Cadance's grief forever.
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This is the first story in a new AU I'm making called the Love and Peace AU! Expect to see more fics in the future coming back to this AU.
Hope you enjoy!
Chapters (2)
Interesting premise, but this doesn't make any sense. The emotions and reactions between Cadance and Chrysalis happen with no rhyme or reason. They are bizarrely friendly with each other with no explanation or build up. This could be fleshed out with more dialogue and some inner monologues so their change in attitudes feels somewhat natural. Instead they go from an angry chase scene to cuddling on a bed together to comfort each other on their losses.
Fascinating setup! Cadance's grief journey takes an unexpected turn when a mysterious visitor, akin to the surprises on PikaShow, alters her narrative. Eager to witness the emotional rollercoaster ahead!
Bit short
and Cadence didn't even ask Chrysalis to turn into Shining Armor?
I wrote something like this, but with Thorax moving with her.
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I agree! The concept of a deceased Shining Armor is a unique one, but the transition between ‘chase sequence’ and ‘emotional exchange’ is minimal.
An example of how better this could be done is, in the least, describing something like: Seeing a former threat laid out upon her floor, soaking it with tears, resulted in an unexpected surge of emotions- surprise, confusion, a bit of fear all rolled up in one. Cadence watched as her supposed ‘nemesis’ continued to bawl her eyes out, before slowly approaching. For some reason, a feeling of empathy had begun to take to her, seeing Chrysalis weeping so deeply as she was- which seemed to be having an effect on her.
Something along those lines at the minimum, and at most I’d recommend a wholly new interaction where instead of just randomly collapsing on the floor (admittedly a bit like a toddler) she could seal herself up in the bathroom, a heated exchange would follow, and then the emotions come pouring in.
Just a few ideas- but still, a good story.