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The last decade in Equestria has been marked by a lack of sunlight, and an overabundance of tyranny. But today, 10 years after it disappeared, the Sun returns. Praise the Sun.
This was my submission for the Quills & Sofas "Two Halves" contest that was held in the Q&S Discord server. Decided it was worth some minor polishing and publishing.
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... Yeah I don't get it. Nightmare Moon was a tyrant obviously. But Twilight sounds like she was never Celestia's student. Or should I say Daybreaker's. Since that's her visage.
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What do you mean by Twilight sounding like she was never Celestia's student? I don't quite understand your confusion, and I'd like to learn something from your criticism if I'm able to.
Could you please tell me why Mystic Sunrise thinks that Daybreaker is in this story before I read it?
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Because Daybreaker is in this story.
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This doesn't sound like something Twilight would normally say if she had been Celestia's student. It doesn't sound like Nightmare Moon brainwashed her either. Could just be me though 😅.
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Read the second chapter carefully. It's obvious when you get to it.
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Ah, I see. At the end of the 2nd chapter, Daybreaker defeats Nightmare Moon, her exact fate unspecified. Twilight and Spike's prayer is because they hope that Princess Luna is alive, and that She may restore balance one day with her return.
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Now it makes sense.
Not a really new concept but the execution was pretty clean
Just wished that the story itself was bigger