Strings, a very talented singer, is struggling with an incurable case of deep depression from heartbreak. When Twilight and Princess Cadance try to help him resolve his issues, they accidently turn him into an evil creature that intends to wipe out all Love in Equestria.
Lessons:
(Regardless if someone is being self-destructive)
-Commanding/Demanding/Bullying someone to "Let Go" and "Move on" only makes things worse, not better.
-You cannot force someone to change. It's their choice to make and theirs alone.
-People cannot simply change how the feel or who they want to love simply because you want them to.
-You can only *TRY* to help someone with their issues, but in the end, your efforts may not work.
Chapters (15)
Man they aren't the best people in this fic huh.
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Well, you know Twilight. When she sets her mind on a Friendship Mission, she never will rest until she gets some closure (And this is the most merciful I've ever portrayed her)
This line is omega levels of scuffed,
it should look something like this: " It's our pleasure to serve you, your majesty." or "It's our pleasure to be of service to you, your majesty."
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No... there's no error this time. I was making him speak goofily.
Wouldn't this kinda be like Nightmare moon, except instead of envy being the main cataclysmic emotion it love? It feels weird for them to not acknowledge this possibility.
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It IS exactly like Nightmare Moon, but the thing is, they don't know he's really Strings (Yet) So they can't really just acknowledge that.
For all they know, he's another natural evil creep out there to cause trouble. you don't have to be Nightmare Moon to do that, but it's only when they unmask him that they can acknowledge it.
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Fair enough
So shoulda asked this sooner but what's up with the kinds goofy name. You'd think the name of a love stealing villain would be loved themed?
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I have my reasons, and I don't think "Danger Zone" is goofy.
Besides... there was "Cozy Glow" That's not exactly villainous, but that doesn't make her less dangerous and vile.
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That's also fair enough. I guess I've just gotten used to villians having names themed after the trope they have going on.
Also when I said goofy I didn't mean it like actually goofy, I just didn't have the word to convey the correct message.
It's just that when I think of something named Danger Zone I think of daredevils and tightrope walkers, something where a person is putting their life on the line, not someone who got a little too attached to a unrequited crush...
Though its not the worst name I've seen so props 👍
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Huh neat, ima be honest I don't think I've read any of your fics before
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Well you still can... but again, as I have requested before. Instead of posting multi-comments whenever you see a SINGLE spelling/grammar errors, could you please try to keep them all into just one post. It's easier that way (No one's perfect after all)
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Oh my bad, I normally don't comment a whole lot of corrections so I just kinda commented as I came across them. I'll try to keep it together next time 👍