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Darth Severus


Brony, Star Wars nut, Former Marine, BA in English, minor in creative writing, OCD and on the Autistic Spectrum

Comments ( 10 )

Up until he end, I was intrigued...

11571819
If you want to help edit it, shoot me a PM

The police and the rodeo's "security" are totally pathetic in here. :facehoof:

Their are tranquilizer darts for a damn reason!

11571892
I can't believe I didn't think of the rodeo security TQ darting the bull, NGL, this fic was inspired by the scene in Family Guy where Peter gets raped by a breeding bull

This needs a lot of fleshing out, world building, and story. This just jumped from scene to scene without much between, and if you want it to be a rapey story, you have to detail something. How'd the bull get on top, how'd he have enough time to get inside her, and how long until he was forced off.

11571904
Would you be willing to help me with that? I admit, it's bad, because I focused too much on the big parts instead of the small details, and like I said, it was based on the Family Guy scene, and I didn't build upon the scene, it was just as inconsistent as the scene itself was

11571906
Sure thing. Pm me and we'll start a conversation.

11571896

Oh, I seen that particular scene. That was actually funny. This one isn't.

11572010
This wasn't supposed to be funny, I wouldn't have labeled it as Dark if it was supposed to be funny

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