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Some Person

Just a wannabe screenwriter who happens to have a fascination with pony fanfiction.


Soarin' is an accomplished Wonderbolt, but lately he's been making too many simple mistakes during practice. One day, he and Spitfire come to the conclusion that he needs a change of scenery. Through a brief negotiation with their manager, Soarin' is given a week's time to secure a future performance in Appleloosa. He accepts this task and flies to the new town.

However, there's more to Soarin's life than he's letting on. He's constantly battling his inner demons, all while trying to ignore the hounding media. He's kept himself in check, but his past is about to come forth once more, and in ways he isn't prepared for.

All because of a strange colt he met during a stop at a bar.

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 94 )

Not bad. The story could use some more description of setting, but you seem to have a good grasp on grammar. Additionally, I like that you're not just dropping into "SUDDENLY, GAY STALLIONS" like some shipfics do. Soarin' and Braeburn both have some nice characterization here.

I'll be watching for another chapter!

Edit: Holy shit, I knew I recognized that name. Good to see you're still around!

Well, you have a very compelling synopsis right here, you have an excellent cover pic that clearly denotes what the fic would be like. I'm going to give it a read soon (Not now, I'm writing my own story) and I hope to see this same quality reflected throughout the story. Congrats on a very compelling synopsis that brought me to a type of story I don't generally read (I don't generally go for M/M simply because it's not to my tastes). I'll leave a true critique of this later when I do read it. Until then, have a wonderful day! :twilightsmile:

I Would say, KILL IT WITH FIRE! But I'm not, pony yaoi... an interesting concept that I havent seen much of:scootangel:

I press the like button and I like it!:pinkiehappy:

we need more fics starring soaring and breaburn :pinkiehappy:

And this is where downvotes come from.
If you don't like the story for personal reasons, leave. You guys are bronies for Celestia's sake! We are known for our ability to love and tolerate. Start tolerating and stop making good stories seem 'meh' just because you have a bit of personal issues.

Read this
Dialogue Rules
In the first paragraph alone you broke 3 of them...
Also, not sure if you care, but I'm an editor if you want/need some help either fixing grammar and whatnot or just spicing up your story a bit.
Give me a jingle if you want to discuss anything.

I was looking to avoid the common trait where the characters immediately fall for each other. Helps build more of a world this way.

And yes, I've kept at writing ever since you tore the first draft of my first fic to pieces. I'm gonna be keeping at this.
Well, thank you very kindly for the words! I do hope the story meets your expectations.
There's not enough of it, if you ask me.
and good fics at that
I've only got one person who's available for proofreading and editing, so to get another pair of eyes would be greatly appreciated!

You've got an interesting start with this, I'll keep an eye on this and see how it progresses. So far, so good.

I've got a lot of free time right now, in between jobs as it were, so I can give it a shot. PM me if you want to get the ball rolling.

1358991 i only found 23 fics with soaring and breaburn with a romance tag :pinkiesad2:


On that I agree, if it's terribly written or a total author's personal fantasy then a down vote's understandable, but I don't think an otherwise good story deserves a down vote just because the reader isn't open minded or has issues with presented themes.

Very nicely done. I love the way you introduced you characters. And, your use of proper grammar is like a breath of sweet, fresh air among the other poorly written stories. Also, I love anithing that's coltcuddling :twilightsmile:

It's nice to know that my story stands out to you :ajsmug:

I started reading this to see if it could help improve my prospective of gay romance, So far no,but all see. This story is very well done, it was hard to follow along. You need to help the reader know where you are in the story.

I'll be sure to look into improving that, thanks for the tip.


@Vimbert The Unimpressive


I'm sorry. I know I said I would get a critique on this as soon as I could, but things have gotten so busy! I'm not even sure I'll have time to read it anymore. //dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Sweetie_Belle.png

>If we want to go to Appleloosa, The team needs a scout
The t should not be a capital :moustache:

>She’s only letting you off for a week
I suggest rewording this

>two inches
Fucking imperial :rainbowwild:

thanks for the input, I'll fix it right away.

I am really loving the setup thus far. Even if the events appear to be a means to bring the two together, there is easily enough breathing room to develop a setting, and give the events a purpose beyond "shipping." In contrast to many shipping stories, I really want to hear more about the elements of culture shock which Soarin is experiencing, and the town of Appleloosa in general. The added prospect of seeing how you weave a growing relationship with Braeburn into that narrative is even more enticing.
I eagerly await the next chapter. :pinkiehappy:

I'm very glad that people can get into my story like this! I hope you'll stick around until the end!

Looking forward to the rest, SoarBurn is my favorite ship when I am in an M/M mood... Have a moustache: :moustache:

Thank ya much for the favorite and moustache!

Well, I like it! Seems well written, there aren't any noticeable grammatical or spelling errors dotted in places, and I don't care about same or different sex pairings - it's all the same concept anyways.
Twilight Sparkle approves! :twilightsmile:

I was surprised to see this update after so long! Great chapter!

Can't wait for more!:pinkiehappy:

Just started reading, and I'm impressed so far. I can't wait to see how this turns out; you seem to do well at establishing the mood of a scene.

I hope you're not bummed that this doesn't have the kind of views that the straight or lesbian ships have, because I'm loving this so far and I hope you enjoy writing it as much as I do reading it :twilightsmile:

Oh, it's no trouble. I didn't go into this expecting a million views or comments or anything. To be honest, I expected most of the fandom to just shun this sort of story since it's filled with teh ghays, but reception has been more positive than I anticipated.

I just wanted to make a story and see if anyone felt interested enough to read on. I'm glad you like it though :ajsmug:

this is pretty good hope you continue it

Thank you! There's plenty more to come, so this story isn't going to end abruptly any time soon.


Can't wait for next chapter:twilightsmile:
Soarin' needs to get in shape, he is to much of a lazy pony, we need to get him working on the orchard, buckin' them apples.

He won't be able to listen to listen to ya fer a couple o' days."


I'm loving the back-story btw.

sdfhdfjk fixed, thank you.

And I'm glad you like it. I really wanted to go for a backstory that isn't the usual "Braeburn is from the south, and he's gay, so everyone hates him and he has parents that hate him and he hates life but then Soarin' comes in and doesn't have a shred of understanding but he's all 'ololol whut"s the deal, bro?' and then they make out and then end story." I guess it's easier for some people to do what's already been done before though.

Love this so much! Really touched me, very well written! Must have moar! :3

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