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On one fateful day Prince Solar Storm is framed for a crime he didn't commit. Banished from his home with nopony but a small group of supporters, he eventually finds himself on a large unclaimed island. He however soon forms the Solar Kingdom from which he proclaims himself King.

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The prologue starts a couple years before the mane 6 is born.

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Comments ( 29 )

Just a word of advice, you spelled Solar wrong in the short description.

Good to see a new writer joining fimfiction though! Give it your all and work to improve and I'm sure one day you'll be great!

Celestia is a terrible mother. She DOESN'T deserve her son, nor her sister.

And I have a feeling that Sunset is gonna pay too. Since she is that petty to either frame, or blackmail.

I wanted to meet my aunt and see why she was banished and compare stories. I was particularly worried about these Elements of harmony, I feared that I Celestia did find find out my Kingdom she would use them against us. I also knew that the Equestrians would have a hard time coming close to the islands as the Solar Kingdom had a large enough navy that it could rival Celestia's own.

Celestia doesn't recklessly declare war by the first sight of "danger"!?

Then again, her terrible "judgement" against Solar ( And also her treatment with Luna, and especially Sunset. ) already sour my liking to her.

Hopefully, Solar gets his just revenge against BOTH Sunset and Celestia. :pinkiecrazy:

Interesting story, I once again don’t like yet another character assassination of Celestia, but I’m sure it will work out in the end

It’s been half a year, how are things going?

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Solar doesn’t know that. He thinks that she’s willing to destroy him

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Alright I’ve been having tech troubles. Currently in the progress of writing the next chapter

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Even so, she shouldn't be forgiven for this stupid betrayal. She rather believe a highly obvious highly egotistical and very selfish brat like Sunset than her own freaking son!!??

Solar should disowned Celestia as a terrible mother.

And if Celestia tries to make a weak apology by making stupid "alliance" out of Equestria and his own kingdom. He will rightfully refuse, and ask his former "mother" to rip off that alliance treaty, and go suck it!

This made Shadows eyes go wide “Sire you can’t possibly be suggesting” however he went silent at my look and continued on “while we outnumber them in terms of pony power that pony power would dwindle in terms of it being lost as well as to garrison the land. The problem wouldn’t be attacking, the problem would be keeping hold of the land…”

Not unless you destroy the elements of harmony. :pinkiecrazy:

I laughed “so you’re telling me that Equestria relies on a zookeeper, a farmer, a drama queen, an over grown foal, a braggart and a librarian?”

When he said “basically yeah” I laughed even more.

“So this confirms it, Celestia truly has lost her marbles.”

Agreed.

“Not entirely sire, you see when these elements are combined, they create a powerful laser that can banish any creature into anything, we shouldn’t be underestimating them”

Not really, all you have to do is finish one of them off, immediately demoralized the remaining five. And it's literally game over from them permanently.

great chapter and story

great chapter love it i want to see what he does with Celestia when it is time (Insert evil laugh)

“Two things resources and land” and revenge I secretly thought.

A justified revenge indeed. :pinkiecrazy:

After seeing their nervous looking faces I then added “look the only thing that Equestria has are a bunch of fools in gold armour with sticks and some pidgeons”

“They could still mobilise their entire population” Honour said

They're still civilians. I highly doubt they will have a slightest chance to take on a military that is actually competent for once. Heck, the residents from Ponyville ran away from a stampede of freaking bunnies.

You will be fine. :unsuresweetie:

“Who are these changelings?”I asked wary about revealing my kingdom to the outside world.

“The changelings are a secretive race that hide out in the badlands of Equestria. They have a power that includes shape shifting and the ability to consume love directly. The Changelings are an authoritarian monarchy that are ruled by Queen Chrysalis.

Actually, this may be a very bad idea! Chrysalis isn't very trusting, and doesn't like to "share".

While they were walking through the hive my mind immediately got confused from all the different openings and twists and turns; he lost track of where he was when all of a sudden they entered a large room with a throne in the centre. Sat on top of the throne was the ugliest mare he had seen. She had holes through her legs and hair and her horn was chipped.

Don't let her hear that from you.

I looked around warily mentally preparing for an ambush. He then walked into a clearing revealing Queen Chryasilis wow, Shadow wasn’t lying, she is ugly.

Really, Solar?

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In this situation Celestia does not deserve any opportunity for reconciliation, she chose anger and her sister over her son. She made her choice by her own will and has to accept its consequences.

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I assure you that it will be quite a "field day" when Solar finds out that Sunset reformed and that Celestia forgave her, I don't think that will be good for his blood pressure.

Very good story so far, I look forward to any updates, I also wish you a happy holidays.

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Thanks and I wish you a happy holidays too

Wow, it got intense quickly, you know you did something wrong when Chrysalis congratulates you for it, I'm interested to know what the interaction between Solar and Luna will be like, we just have to wait until the next chapter.

Is this an evil Celestia story?

Okay, what is this recent over obsession with Scootaloo out of nowhere!?

Solar just met the kid, and just used her as a hostage to finally get back at his "mother".

Finally looking at Scootaloo, she had tears streaming down her face and her eyes looked at me like I was a monster. I slammed the door shut and locked it, I then heard her burst into tears making me feel guilty as I began to comprehend what I had just did.

I felt like a monster, a feeling that I did not like.

I don't wanna sound like I'm completely heartless or anything negative.

But ugh, this "monster" part is so cliche to read. :ajbemused: :pinkiesick:

Chrysalis is definitely way more of a monstrous villain than you are.

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She is a bad mother, an idiot, temperamental and perhaps very clumsy as she gives up easily.....but I don't think she is evil.

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I think very "lazy" is the more fitting word than "clumsy"?

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Solar meets Scootaloo’s father in the first chapter, so he has a connection through him, there is also other reasons that will be revealed in upcoming chapters

finally read this great so far

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