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TheGJ90


Just a friendly Autistic writer who overthinks the adventures of characters. I do story commissions! Current focus: Equestria Girls. Respects G5's existence (somebrony has to!).

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This story is a sequel to What Mistakes Tell Us


The Dazzlings are caught in a fearsome blizzard while dealing with a terrible illness. They try to reach their house, but the harsh elements and poor health cause them to faint in the snow.

It would have been the end of their story. But, fate had other plans, which involved people that, under normal circumstances, they would have avoided as much as possible.

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Cover Image: By MintyDreams7

Current Spot in the Friendship is Worth It Timeline:

When Life Gives You Snow...
Holidays Unwrapped
The Hearth-Warmers of Canterlot High
Spring Surprises

Series Details and Full Timeline

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 23 )

Where can I read Holidays Unwrapped and Spring Surprises?

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Holidays Unwrapped is the last Equestria Girls shorts collection from Hasbro (before they canceled Season 3 to make way for G5).

As for Spring Surprises, I updated the description to provide a link to that tale. Thank you!

"Those girls ARE hiding something... and it haunts them."

Why do I have a feeling this is hinting at a certain winter special?

Agreed. There was a lot to work around the Movie Club premise. EqG in general could've made great use of more attention.

Very much enjoyed this chapter, it was a lot of fun. Love that they're being drawn together organically if only because of rivalry. It's quite believable. Love Sonata's characterization the most so far.

Thankfully I finally found the time to read your story Gj, and it's lovely. I adore stories that promote "goodness of the heart" so this has been exactly down my alley. And your writing, grammar, and syntax are all really clean and wonderful to read too.

Entirely criminal that it's flown underneath people's radar. Likely just due to optics and metrics, like maximizing exposure by parcing your chapters out slowly and things like having a striking cover art. If I'm not wrong, the story released with a few chapters already written right?

Regardless of how you choose to promote your story, I'm thankful I've gotten to read it. It won't affect things almost at all since I myself don't have a lot of followers, but I'll be sure to showcase it on my user page in case someone does manage to stumble upon it. And I already forsee myself elevating it to my library of golden standards once it's done or has more chapters under its belt. Again, great stuff! Looking to find out more since I'm practically blind for EqG on specials and comic related things so Adiago and her sisters are basically new to me, but that just adds to the fun so far.

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Thank you so much for the review!

I am glad you are enjoying the story, particularly how The Dazzlings are handled, given the premise of the story being what it is. I have A LOT to say about it as well (come on, I'm writing it!), but I'll wait until it is finished before I give all of my thoughts.

I will say this much though, before the end:

I am SUPER glad (or totes glad, as Sonata would put it) that the relationship between the CMCs and The Dazzlings is coming off as organic so far. The last thing I want is to make it come off as unnaturally forced. That has been hard to pull off, since we are dealing with two trios that could not be more different from each other!

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Yeah, I started off with three chapters already written. I initially wanted to post the whole thing in time for Christmas, but I didn't want to rush through the story just to make that deadline.

Also, the fact that the brony who brought Chrys into the fandom has enjoyed my work makes me mighty happy! :pinkiehappy:

That was a good story goodluck with the rest of it.

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Aw shucks, that's quite the compliment! I write my stories with the express purpose of imparting something to others. Whether that be a message or maybe just the feeling of joy, if someone can gleam something from my work, I'm happy. If nothing else, I'm very grateful that you hold me and my opinion in high regard, especially since what I said can be seen as surface-level blanket statements. But I really do mean it! I quite like When Life Gives You Snow. I should also mention I enjoyed the short Heart-Warmers of Canterlot High, and I have yet to find the time to sit down and read Spring Surprises, but now I definitely need to elevate that in my free-time tasks thanks to this one.

Since I don't know the Sirens very well, I can't comment too much about story-specific things without feeling like I might make a fool of myself. Though so far, I'm enjoying the interesting dynamic between them. They remind me a bit of Paper Mario: The Thousand Year Door's Siren sisters, if they were in some universe were the other two had a bit more affection for their younger sibling. Which I'm all for, 100%.

But what I can comment on is your writing style, since I have nothing but good things to say. Reading through your story, you actually surprised me a number of times with your verbiage, choice of words, and phrases. Nothing is repetitive. No high-vocabulary words seem out of place and can be easily deciphered with contextual clues for younger audiences. And your narrative and dialogue flows smoothly and naturally. It seems like the work of a long-time author! I should know, I used to write professionally for a living once upon a time.

I often talk about what constitutes a good rated E story, since I'm a firm believer that there's an incredible art in the making of. I would call this story so far a prime example of that. To make decency, love, and the goodness of the heart the epitome of a story's message without hamfisting it or making it seem overly childish, yet remaining accessible and enjoyable to every age takes real skill.

This is getting a little long and for the sake of not flooding your comment section, the last thing I wanted to mention is that I wholly think your writing is above mine. I've been pampered by professional editors and proof readers for my real work far too long over this last decade, so my skills have definitely waned. It's probably a bias since one can get tired of their own writing style, but I definitely think so. Anywho, looking forward to reading more of your stuff, GJ!

It’s quite the lovely song. Davy Jones is definitely one of the best characters in the Pirates films. My favorite is still Jack, but because of deep-lore like that whole bit about his soul being worth several hundred souls to Davy, due to him releasing hundreds of slaves and becoming a pirate because he wouldn’t, by any means, sell slaves. There’s a deleted scene in the movies that has him saying “People aren’t cargo, mate” I think too, which adds to that notion.

If all of that is true, that drunken veneer of his that can be seen giving way to moments of heart and self-sacrifice at times are all part of his hidden morality. It’s understandable why they didn’t mention anything about slavery due to it being a Disney film, but it would’ve been such wonderful extra layer to Jack’s character. For a movie series originally meant for kids, the producers made something truly amazing.

Anywho, wonderful chapter GJ. I liked that little ringtone gag. And also that part where Sweetie Belle gets to see Rarity again. It’s nice to think that she really loves her sister.

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Yes indeed, Sweetie Belle has TONS of love for Rarity!

I also see that, you, too, are a brony of culture when it comes to films! :pinkiehappy:

Seriously though, I'm glad you are also a fan of the Pirates films. The CMCs would be hugging you for that! I think Apple Bloom would agree with your take on Jack Sparrow (and gush over his choice to save those slaves while she's at it).

As for her fascination with Davy Jones, let's just say that Apple Bloom got her love for layered characters from somewhere and leave it at that for now. :raritywink:

Yes, that song of his is a BANGER!

That was a good chapter.

That was a good story goodluck with whatever you write next.

Comment posted by TheKing2001 deleted May 6th, 2023

Sonata is the best. Loved every interaction with her. Sometimes, it takes an unrelenting well of positivity to make us see the most important things in life. Also, love the set up for the future! Unlikely allies. Definitely hoping to read more of the siren sisters.

Wonderful story, GJ. I really gotta sit down and read the new chapters of Spring Surprises next!

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Thank you, pal! I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

The relationship between the CMCs and The Dazzlings is the very definition of unlikely, which made putting them together in one place a fun scenario to write for.

As for that set up: oh man, do I have plans for these girls! :raritywink:

I look forward to seeing your thoughts on Spring Surprises!

"If we don't find warm shelter soon..." , Adagio thought out of frustration and a looming panic. Both of these feelings, however, were crushed by her stubborn pride;

soon..." Adagio*

"No!", she exclaimed to herself and her sisters as they trudged along, her body refusing to turn around to face them;

"No!" She*

"We are Sirens ! We've faced storms worse than this in two worlds! We won't be brought low by some mad Human weather and-!"

Sirens!*
and-"*

"No! This is not happening to her, to us!" , she internally declared in protest against what she was seeing before her while cursing the weather that kept raging around them;

us!" She*

"Sirens do not die!"

Everything will die one day, even you three. :fluttercry:

"At least I won't have to deal with a fool..." , she thought to herself with relief;

fool..." she*

Taking a gander at what she was sitting on, she recognized it to be a large brown couch of reasonable quality. Nothing about this place screamed of the lavish luxury that matched Adagio's discerning tastes, but it would suffice for now. If she had her way, though, she would happily replace the brown carpet... and the positively drab grey wallpaper! A warm thick blue blanket had covered her lower-body, another treat for the senses that she greatly appreciated. She took a moment to really feel the rest of the clothes that now covered her body; a standard t-shirt and thick pants that were almost as wooly as her socks. Poor replacements for the outfits that were more in line with her high standards, but after walking through the closest thing to Tartarus itself not too long ago, a simple set of warm clothing might as well have been luxurious to her. She relaxed into the cushions, allowing gravity to take hold as she basked in her newfound warmth. She figured she could go shopping for more familiar attire with her sisters once the storm-.

storm-"*

"Aria! Sonata!", she yelled out with a hoarse voice before another fierce set of coughs stopped her from doing anything else, her train of thought driven entirely off the rails by her honed sisterly instincts and current illness. As if signaled by her loud predicament, the door to the living room flew open. She could not see who came in, for her eyes were closed tight on account of her coughing fit. The person's feminine voice, however, she could recognize from a mile away;

Sonata!" She*

"No... you're not her... you're this world's Twilight Sparkle.", was her response as she raised her right eyebrow in surprise.

Sparkle," was*

"My sisters, I need to see if they're-!"

they're-"*

"They'll be fine.", Sci-Twi calmly noted as she attempted to soothe her guest's worries;

fine," Sci-Twi*

"Do you know who we are? What we have done?", she questioned to Sci-Twi, her calm voice and sickly rasp hiding her feelings regarding such things.

done?" She*

"Heh, she's not wrong." , Adagio thought to herself as she saw her shut her eyes for a moment, sighed, and opened them up. Her neutral expression melted away into one of concern before continuing with sweetness added to every word she uttered;

wrong" Adagio*

"But wh-?"

"But wh-"*

Why...?

Because you three needed help. You might've caused trouble for CHS, it wouldn't seem right to let you suffer. :applecry:

"Trapped in a house with three would-be slaves and the Human version of one of the girls who defeated us..." , she grimly thought to herself while slowly taking a sip of her steamy chocolatey beverage;

us..." she*

"This whole 'being sick' thing is totes horrible!", cried a distressed Sonata as she walked into the room, her nasally rasp-ridden voice revealing her stuffed up nose and sore throat. The eldest Dazzling sharply turned her head to see her entering the room alongside a visibly frustrated Aria, who was just as stuffed up and raspy as her younger sister. Like Adagio, they were wearing simplistic outfits. Their hair, like hers, had seen better days. Gone were Sonata's ponytail and Aria's pigtails, which were replaced by long flowing messes filled with split ends. The former made it a point to expand on her complaint while giving the sister next to her a most dramatic pleading expression;

horrible!" Cried*

"They're tacos , Aria!"

We get it Sonata... :ajbemused:

"DAGI! I'm so glad you're alive! I was so worried about you! I thought we were going to die out there in the freezing snow! Being sick sucks, I hope we never go through that again! I'm just so happy you're okay!"

You'll likely be sick again numerous times for the rest of your life. :pinkiecrazy:

"I dread what might happen once the recovery process is complete!"

You and me both. :fluttershysad:

It took Sonata roughly five minutes of crying and hugging to calm down before The Dazzlings positioned themselves to sit on the couch together, with Adagio in the center, Aria to her left, and Sonata to her right. Now, they were all giving the trio of kids a combined glare of their own, but one filled with curiosity instead of intensity. As frustrated as they were over having to be in the same room as not one, but three Wondercolts and who might as well be the Princess's twin, they knew better than to bite the hands that were helping them. The eldest sister tried to get a read on the trio before her by inspecting their facial expressions. What she saw on the faces of Apple Bloom, Scootaloo, and Sweetie Belle, to her surprise, was far from hidden or complicated:

Counterpart, Adagio, not her twin. :duck:

"Wait... that means...!", Adagio thought to herself as a great and terrible realization struck her mind with the force of a typhoon, keeping her shocked expression firmly etched on her face. She quickly put that realization aside in spite of her shock, as it was a matter best discussed with her sisters in private later. She figured it had hit them just as hard anyway.

means...!" Adagio*

"By the time we had reached Canterlot City's borders, our RV was barely pushing through enough snow to fill an ocean. It finally broke down in the fog, the tough bas-!"

bas-"*

"Show no weakness when you can." , she thought to herself as she spoke while trying, and failing, to breathe through her stuffed up nose, her unsuccessful attempt producing an annoyed frown for a moment before her face reverted back to a composed expression. It was after this that a question from earlier made itself known in her head again;

can," she*

"Why do they-?"

they-"*

"You'll want my phone then, it has the tracking app you need.", she noted while gagging internally before clarifying;

need," she*

"No, the golden one.", Adagio clarified with a confident tone and toothy manure-eating grin that, together, spoke volumes of her arrogance. Now, it was Sci-Twi and the trio's turn to be shocked, which pleased her greatly. As she chuckled at the sight before her, Scootaloo shook her head in disbelief while exclaiming;

one." Adagio*

"Seriously?! Those cases are hilariously expensive! How the hay did you-?"

you-"*

She then quickly each of the sisters a glare riddled with restrained disdain, with Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle joining in, before answering her own question with annoyance in every word;

quickly got each of the sisters*
Seriously Twi, you didn't think this though. :facehoof:

"Ohhhh, I wanted to talk with them some more!", she exclaimed in disappointment.

more!" She*

"Look, Sonata is not that far off the mark. I don't like the idea of being around those brats either. But, we'll be here for a while, like it or not, so the least we can do is be somewhat polite around them, even if it means talking with them sometimes. We don't have to be friendly ...",

friendly..."*

"Unappreciative... of you girls helping us, we're not here to make friends. We'll stick around until we're healed up, our RV is found, and we have a safe ride home. We'll all be out of each other's hair after that."

You might change your mind on the friend part. :ajsmug:

"I know what you're thinking, Dagi, and it is crazy.", Aria noted with a raised eyebrow, clearly not wanting to entertain whatever idea her leader was suggestion. Adagio would not budge, however;

crazy." Aria*

"Seriously, Dagi?!", Aria exclaimed while almost dropping her whisper;

Dagi?" Aria*

"Well... we haven't checked for it after The Battle of the Bands, didn't we?", she asked while holding her chin with her right hand in deep thought.

we?" She*

" My lead.", was Adagio's response. Simple, direct, and commanding in every sense of the word. She would normally be incensed over anyone, especially her sisters, trying to lead the group instead of her, but she was, frankly, too sick to be angry. Aria knew the score, but she figured trying to take the lead (for the billionth time it seemed) was worth a shot. With a shrug, she waited for her sister's instructions alongside an excited Sonata, who was trying to not bounce on her spot on the couch.

lead," was*

"So... I remember something about you three being in a club...", Adagio commented while enjoying a cup of tea. Her stomach, by this point, had improved enough to be able to handle tea and spicy foods, with her sisters not being far off from that point. Their noses were not as stuffed up as before and their throats had all but recovered. Sci-Twi was busy cleaning up her parents' room, so it was just the three sirens and the three girls sitting in the same places as before. Speaking of the girls, they responded to Adagio's comment by looking at each other excitedly before announcing with more joy in their voices than there was snow outside;

club..." Adagio*

"It sounded like a dark incantation from ancient times...", noted an exasperated Adagio, who was just as clueless as Aria over what the correct answer was. Sonata's response held no answers either;

times..." noted*

"That was from 'The Lord of the Rings: The Fellowship of the Ring'!"

That was my guess, lol! :rainbowlaugh:

"They were a waste of our money!", Aria argued while glaring at Sonata intensely. But, before the two of them could get into one of their innumerable arguments, Adagio interrupted them by switching the topic;

money!" Aria*

"I know I heard those lines before...", noted Adagio as she tried hard to remember their source.

before..." noted*

"Oh no, we are NOT trying that overly thin bread with cruddy meat and veggies!", she shouted at her two siblings. It was amazing she didn't cause herself to cough even a little with that outburst. Sonata's joy over being rewarded for helping out quickly gave way to anger as she stared daggers at Aria and promptly shouted back;

veggies !" She*

"Ohhh, if it weren't for that little detail..." , she pondered with a sneer. Shoving her rage into its usual spot deep inside of her mind, she took better stock of her situation;

detail..." she*

"Well, at least we're recovering nicely.", she declared with some relief in her voice. It was then that she recalled something Apple Bloom had said before;

nicely," she*

"Time to get some answers.", she calmly declared aloud as she got up off of the couch and walked with renewed strength to the kitchen, hoping to grab a quick snack before searching the house for a certain trio of Wondercolts. By complete accident, she had found them.

answers," she*

"Pancakes, salads, and some cold milk!", Apple Bloom declared out of pride before adding;

milk!" Apple*

"Mental note: don't ever let Sweetie Belle cook for you!" , she decided in her head while staring in horror at the charred monstrosity that was best not consumed by anycreature, let alone a Human or a Pony. She promptly decided to wait to get her answers during breakfast as she almost ran back into the living room to wait on the couch, determined to get away from that revolting "attempt" at cooking as quickly as possible.

you!" She*

"I do know perfectly decent food when I taste it.", she said with a sideways smirk as she took a large bite out of her pancakes to emphasize her point. Sonata, on the other hand, was too entranced by the taste of her food to give any detailed opinions on the matter. One could, however, recognize this much in between her munching, her eyes closed in utter contentment;

it," she*

"It's now or never..." , Adagio thought to herself as she took a swig of her milk. After placing her glass back down onto the table, she gave each club member a calm glance. They were glaring at the Sirens, but not as intensely as they previously did. With a breath, the eldest of the sisters finally got to ask their saviors a single specific question with an expression as calm as her voice;

never..." Adagio*

"They were waiting for this to come up..." , noted Adagio internally as she explained further;

up..." noted*

"End of story."

There's clearly more they're not telling them, that's for sure. :fluttershysad:

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Given who the CMCs are talking with, it makes sense for them to keep some things close to the chest.

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