The jungle is a place filled with the constant noise of life, so what does it mean when everything goes silent?
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TwilightVanguard58
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This was good I liked it, it reminded me of classic horror movies where you don’t see the monster until the end. As for Connie, again good character for horror fic, the pony not listening to the warning signs, only to fall into the forest floor, safe to say Connie saw the monster and it ended her. Great fanfic👍.
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Thank you! That classic horror vibe was exactly what I was going for so I'm glad to hear I succeeded
Did no one else in the tour group hear the deafening roar of a giant pony eating creature, or notice a sudden deforestation with the radius of an atom bomb? All jokes aside, not bad. Short and to the point. Maybe a tiny bit too short, with a lot of front loaded character exposition that doesn't really have anything to actually do with how the story plays out. Other than that I think this is pretty good, with the dense and impenetrable jungle providing a great setting for mystery and horror. Great use of sound as well, as the title suggests. What you hear can be just as important as what you see, especially when your eyesight is preoccupied with the ground in front of you and not looking back at what is chasing you. Classic use of the "is it gone? No, it was just lying in wait for me to poke my head out trope". Though again with how long she was gone and the amount of noise caused I really don't get how the tour didn't notice anything. Heck, they should've heard her drop through the leaves at the very beginning. Head counts and buddy systems are important, especially if you're in a place as dangerous as this. I think you could have made some adjustments to the way things played out so it didn't feel so forced, but overall I think you did a good job.