Someone help! I thought being here would be a dream come true, but it's turned into a nightmare! I don't know what to do, nowhere is safe. They won't stop until they get me, and I can't keep running forever...
...Oh no! I can hear them! They're getting closer! Someone help! They're coming for me! They're coming for me...!
Written for the Thousand Words Contest II
06/07/23 - 06/09/23: Featured.
This story now has an Audio Reading done by the user GodzillaMan, go check it out if you're interested.
Chapters (1)
That pic looks like it came out of a horror movie.
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I know right, I found it on Derpibooru.
Dude that was a great story. I thought you put all the evil versions of the six in your story. Super misleading! I love it!!!
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For once, I agree with your opinion.
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Thanks, that's what I was going for. I'm glad you liked it.
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And what would that opinion be exactly?
And so Marcus suffered a fate worse than death. Getting cuddled, tickled, and kissed by 6 cute ponies. Those evil monsters.
Uh, any way I can suffer that horrible fate too? I've been a bad little boy, so I deserve every bit of the suffering from those monsters,
But seriously, this was a cute funny story. I kinda figured more or less of what was going to happen, but the twist was still amusing just the same.
You misspelled violently here
DAWWW SO CUTEEE.
Raise hoof Can I have more of this cute story please?
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I personally think that the guy was being such a baby, and should have just take it like a man.
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Thanks for telling me, I just fixed it.
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Maybe so, but take this into account. In my headcanon, they are smothering him, like he's a puppy or a baby. So much so, that he literally had to run away to get some air.
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Hmm, what would you like to see more of exactly?
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More cute stories of Marcus and the main 6 loving on him.
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We'll see.
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Squeals with excitement
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You know, I was actually going to use that line. Originally, I was going to have it go.
But, eventually, I ended up doing it the other way.
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Okay, fine. Being smothered by literal ponies does seem too embarrassing to endure.
But, if it was in the mlp anthro universe. Where the Mane Six are tall, amazon-like anthro's with some nice and big figures, and assets. Loving you and smothering you, well that's a entirely different story.
Famous last words. Literally, I’m going to remember this for the rest of the day. XD
Judging by the cover, I thought this was gonna go way different. Pretty cool though, good work
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I think the way you did it was better, so I say it was a good call to change it.
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And this story wouldn't be nearly as funny or even that interesting IMO if Marcus did just take it and not even try to run, and nothing else happened, so there's that too.
Death by snu snu
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Ha, thanks, Even before writing it, I knew that was how I wanted it to end.
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900+ words buildup for such a simple joke. That’s what I call talent. 👍
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Wow that was funny and also a bit scary! This was a great story!
awwww
Death by a thousand.
Hilarious, but the image cover is scary ASF. Applejack's eyes are the worst.
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I know right. When I was searching for cover art for this, I knew I wanted an image with the main 6 that had a creepypasta vibe to it, and this one fit the bill perfectly.
I wrote a story similar to yours.
In my story the Mane 6 chase him down over an understanding.
I have to admit, humans running from ponies for being TOO cuddly is pretty funny.
Good job.
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The one with the brain-sucking slug on his head? Yeah, I read that one, I even dropped a comment on it. It was good.
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Thank you.
Is this supposed to be a good or bad ending?
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Depends on which party you ask
But really though, as far as good or bad are concerned, I consider the ending as a 'good' one. While Marcus isn't very happy with his predicament, he is in absolutely no danger and they have no desire to harm him.
There is no personal space in Equestria, there is only...
Cuddles...
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die of laughter counts?
Fair enough. I would probably do that too if the roles were reversed.
Yeah, no.
I'm afraid you have unrealistic expectations.
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How so?
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You see, among ponies personal space isn't exactly common.
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Source.
And even those are just the examples from season 1...
Edit: So many examples you can't even fit them into Fimfiction.net, you have to click here instead:
https://derpicdn.net/img/view/2018/11/23/1889331.gif
I really could feel the feeling of fear from the main character at the start, It really got me!
(Also, technically tickles were used some centuries ago to actually torture people, so the ending can actually still be scary, Lol)
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I'm glad that you found the story immersing.
I did not know that.
I went into this expecting an grimdark crossover edgefest straight out of 2012
What I got instead made me chuckle.
Good job
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Thanks, that was my intention, I'm glad you liked the story.
just out of curiosity, what did you think it was crossing over with?
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