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Ebonyglow


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Zake #1 · Jul 27th, 2022 · · 2 ·

i like it

Comment posted by Weloost deleted Jul 27th, 2022

Can’t wait to see where this goes!

Exuno #4 · Jul 27th, 2022 · · 1 ·

She seems so happy! Anon is a really good friend and I wish I knew more people like him.

Please write the next chapter soon, I can't imagine how badly Mayor Mare really really needs stress relief!

and a broken Pinkie Promise.

:pinkiegasp: The scandal! The horror!

Oh shit

He took a deep breath, preparing to cement her new status for the rest of her life. "And we're gonna keep it that way."

Yep, he's dead.

TLF

Oh my, the premise sounds good~ I bet that Anon and Starlight are going to become really close friends after this~

the cutie mark gimmick works so fucking well, 10/10
can someone cast this on me??

Always nice to see Starlight get more lovin.

Man, gettin' deja vu here.

Beautiful, with mind control too no less :moustache:

Pretty decent read, a short one

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There is going to be more

Don’t worry

This Anon's abject perviness makes me feel attacked. :twilightblush:

This definitely has potential! Mind control harem wish fulfillment is a genre I can get behind - and the fact that the Mane Six are away should open the door to rarer waifus joining the herd!

My one hope is you find ways to differentiate the mares even as their cutie marks are homogenized under a shared purpose. The risk with stories like this is you lose sight of the adorable traits that made the mares worth mindwiping in the first place. Starlight's eager backslide into cutie mark-related villainy is a good sign though. :rainbowwild:

When's the sequel where Pinkie straight up murders him for breaking the Pinkie Promise?

You shifted from past tense to present tense several times, which took me out of the story. You should probably go over the text again, or have someone look it over for you if that's a frequent issue for you.

Also, this apostrophe doesn't belong here:

How was he going to add more mare’s to his collection?

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I had several people go over the story.

Perhaps you could show me some examples of where you see it? I originally wrote this as a greentext so adapting it from first person to third person was a hassle. I wouldn’t be shocked if some mistakes made their way through.

Thanks for the typo find, I’ll amend that.

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He lightly pats her on the head, smirking.

He nods yet again. "I promise."

She eyes the tome, gulping nervously. "You really promise?"

Anon can’t help but stifle a chuckle

He goes through the steps of a signature Pinkie Pie Promise

Starlight gulps, before levitating the book back over to her. She reads over the spell one more time, before setting the tome back onto the table.

She strains for a moment, looking like she may lose control of the spell, but her fortitude remains as she shrouds herself in a magical aura.

A few more seconds pass, the magic around her begins to pulse with energy.

This may not be all of them, but this should give you an idea of what I mean.

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Ah, yeah.

That's inevitable I suppose, since I had to adapt and edit the entire story from first person to third.

I can assure you that this isn't a common thing with my writing though. I appreciate your suggestions, though I won't need them, since this isn't a frequent issue that I face.

Thank you again for the highlighted parts though! I went ahead and fixed them, so I appreciate the heads up!

I really like this story, and can’t wait to see where it goes.

L O V E D this. Hoping for more Shenanigans soon.:pinkiehappy:

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Their will be more chapters, also anon can just mind control pinkie.

Wait a minute... I just realized...
THIS GOES AGAINST THE PRINCIPLES OF COMMUNISM!

Mr. Anon. You, good sir, are now marked for detainment. You shall be sent to horny gulag for rehabilitation.

Do not resist.

Absolutely delicious fic. I look forward to seeing more in this series! :pinkiehappy:

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Pinkie'll find a way to get him alone.

mind fuckery is a go!!!!
:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

You've once again delivered a fantastic story. Can't wait for more from you!

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now you're just being nice and you know it :pinkiegasp:

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All the mind fuckery! :rainbowwild:

He took a deep breath, preparing to cement her new status for the rest of her life. "And we're gonna keep it that way."

I kinda expected Pinkie to show up at that very moment.

Pinkie would kill him if she found out there's a good chance he was going to break that promise.

Too late, the SCP already knows:
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Una

A shame that this story ended as soon as it did.

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I’m literally working on the sequel rn lmao

TLF

I was finally able to read this one to the end~ It was so hot~ Thank you for making this for us~

I want to hate this for betrayal of trust reasons, but...

Good story.

I feel like maybe you don't know what the word abstract means?

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Nah I do, but there’s likely cases where I misuse it in this story since I wrote it up in a day and proofread it once

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both times it was used in the story (the language of the spell, and in reference to ponies' breast placement) were incorrect

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Yeah, reading over it myself right now and I definitely did. I’ll fix em when I get home. Guess that’s what happens when you write up a fic in a day haha

Somepony left that book there on purpose, and I feel like I'm the only one who cares.

Here from the sequel, Not normally big on the whole mind control thing, but I'm a sucker for mare mayor so I had to read this for context. Thumbs up!

But seriously who left the book there?

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It’ll be explained in time ~

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Thank you! I was almost afraid it just appeared there for the sake of convenience. Now I have something to look forward to!

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all the elements in my stories have a purpose, don’t you worry!

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