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Axolotl222


Catch me inbetween hyperfixations

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This story is a sequel to Neither


Twilight and Rainbow have their first fight.

Written as a sequel to Neither, though prior reading is not necessary. Rated teen for mild violence.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 14 )

I like t nicely done

By the way what does scootaloo think about this and does she have parents or what?

Oh by the way who did the artwork it’s very nicely done

This needs editing for sure.

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Hmm, haven't really thought about how Scootaloo fits into all this yet...

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Anything specific I need to fix? If you don't mind of course.

I want to translate these articles in Chinese.
Can I do this,writer?

Nice chapter of conflict, relatable.
Also, saw this:

"But no. No, my marefriend has to show up late because she was having a stupid race with somepony she'd just meant."

"meant" should be "met".

A little chaotic with Fluttershy and her brother in the end, but the flutterpie shipping and flirt Zephyr is quite fun.
Also this:

"Hmm," Rainbow said, nuzzling Twilight's neck. "Maybe I could even cook us diner. How's that sound?"

"diner" should be "dinner".
This does need editing.:twilightsheepish:

HA! TAKE THAT, ZEPHYR!

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It was one of those moments were I was like "Yes, I absolutely have to write this."

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