This story is a sequel to MLP G5 Sunset: Make Your Mark
Join Sunset, Sunny and their Friends as they continue their adventures of Equestria while learning more about the magic and finding new adventures while seeing some shocking places as they continue their adventure.
Cover image gift from: BronySonicFan
Note: This is base on the IDW comics, so this is between TYT and after MYM, and these issues are big it will take me time for me to update them once the new ones come out, so be patients okay. Also, I’m only doing 10 Issues since this is a Discord saga story, after that, I’m done.
(The inspiration goes to Phantom-Dragon since his Equestria: A New Generation story inspired me to make this, so credit goes to him.
Chapters (10)
Hmm. Very nice
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Thanks. It took me days to finish.
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You're welcome
I'll be willing to see how this story will turn out.
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We'll just have to wait until Issue 2 comes out, and boy was Issue 1 was long and the ending was shocking, and I hope you like the reaction when Sunset saw what her old home is now since will, you know.
If I could put a song of what Sunset is feeling right now it would be Boo's theme song from Monsters inc.
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We’ll that would fit the moment. But how did you like it so far. It took me days just to write this up
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Excelente, but after reading this I decided to see the comic, you know to give me an idea of the images because with reading I can't imagine it.
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Okay good point, and once you see the pictures, your in for a treat but glad you like it
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It was a pleasure for me too
“Nothing new to report, Dad,” Sunny said to the picture of her father. “But not every week can be as beautiful as reuniting the Unity Crystals and restoring magic to all pony kind.” She said to the photo as she felt close to her father as she gave out the lessons she’s been learning. “And to top it all, it’s nice to have a Guardian of Friendship to look after me and my friends. Sunset has been a good mentor and sister figure to me ever since she came into our lives. And she’s been teaching me and the others more about friendship and some more stories about Twilight and her friends and been teaching me and Izzy more about magic since she’s the only known unicorn who knows magic.” She said with a smile, ever since Sunset came into their lives, things have been quite interesting even more so since having a Guardian of Friendship by her side feels like a dream come true and to know more about friendship and magic. “Do you think Twilight would be proud of me?” Sunny asks her father with a smile; she would know that her father would say that Twilight would be proud of her for bringing back the magic and bringing the ponies together again and knowing that Sunset is there for them.
And then from out of nowhere, Pipp came zooming by and placed a hoof over Sunny, bringing her into a side hug as she answered with a smile. “Of course, she would be!” Pipp answered Sunny’s question with a smile as she turned to a certain Alicorn. “Isn’t that right, Sunset?” She asked Sunset who was walking towards them with a smile.
Sunny continued for Sunset. “Because it’s up near that cloud over there…” She pointed to the nearby cloud in the sky, since Zipp and Pipp are Pegasus and Sunny and Sunset are Alicorns, they can fly into the sky to play the game, but Izzy’s a unicorn, so she can’t fly or play with them.
Izzy then turned to Sunset, who was looking at what’s left of Canterlot, the former capital kingdom of Equestria, the former place where Twilight was Princess of Equestria and the capital of Friendship, and her old home, which lies in ruins. “Sunset?” Izzy asks, wondering if Sunset is okay and how she is seeing this since Sunset is a little too shocked to speak.
They are seeing Canterlot, what’s left of it as it lays in ruins, buildings demolished while most are still standing, dead plants around the area, dark clouds covering up most of Canterlot, debris all around, and a really batter up flag sign that said, ‘Welcome to Canterlot.’ as it hung on one side of what’s left of a building while the other end is on the floor.
Sunset found her voice as she spoke. “Izzy, I recognize these carving symbols on this gate. These are Twilight and her friends' symbols of their cutie marks!” She spoke out as she recognizes the symbols on the gate, they looked a little worn out, but she can tell that these were Twilight and her friends’ cutie marks, symbols of the Elements of Harmony and the Magic of Friendship.
“That was close,” Sunset said as the rock rolled down the pile of rocks until it hit the wall, which made a clanging sound for some reason, which made Sunset curious. “Huh. That’s strange. The wall that is made of rocks shouldn’t make a clanging sound.” She pointed out as she and Izzy came closer to the cave as saw a wall of vines covering something. “Now this is getting interesting.” She added.
Sunset felt bad for Izzy for being left out and that her friends won’t hear her out as she hugged Izzy. “They are just worried about the crystal and the magic, Izzy. Look, we all know that you are being left out of the fun that made you feel sad, heck even we feel bad for you not joining us.” She said to her, admitting that she and the others felt bad for Izzy not joining in on the fun with them. “And sorry the others didn’t hear you out, but they are just in a rush to find the thief and get the crystal back, and they would do anything to find it. Even I would’ve done the same thing.” She told her; she would’ve rushed things to save the day quickly. “But let’s give our friends time to process, and when they get back, we can think of a better plan, and maybe you can tell them how you feel today.” She added, stating that when the others get back for a better plan of searching, Izzy would get her chance to tell her friends how she feels.
Sunset and Izzy watch them fly as Izzy calls out to them. “...Well, that’s okay! We’ll just look for a place to use our magic down here, okay?!” She calls out to them, making sure they’ve heard her. “Leave it to us!” She yelled out as she waved at them, feeling a little down that her friends didn’t hear her out.
Pipp, Sunset, and Sunny looked at Cloudpuff with a bored expression as said the dog ran around but tripped as Sunny raise her hind leg to move out of Cloudpuff’s path as the dog tripped as the three ponies gave Cloudpuff a bore expression. “You’re right about one thing, Pipp…Empathize on one thing,” Sunny spoke. “Following Cloudpuff isn’t getting us anywhere.” She pointed out, agreeing about the part where Pipp said that following Cloudpuff isn’t getting them anywhere. Sunny then pointed to the sky. “We’ll get a better lay of the land from above the trees. Zipp, Pipp, can you fly?” She asks, wondering if the two sisters can fly now so that they will know where to go in the sky.
Everypony in Maretime Bay is relieved that Pipp is alright as Sunset and Sunny, who is levitation Zipp, flew to the ground, Cloudpuff and Hitch come into the scene as Cloudpuff barks. Hitch then translates for him with a rhetorical tone. “What’s that, Cloudpuff? You want me to know Pipp’s no longer falling through the air and in imminent danger?” He translated but cleared seeing that as he saw it with his own eyes.
“Okay…” Izzy said with an even more worried expression as she placed her hooves on her face. “Moving onto Plan C.” She said as she tries to think fast before Pipp becomes a Pony on a sidewalk, she looks around as she sees the smoothie stand from earlier as an earth pony mare and stallion looked in shock at Pipp as the mare continues to slurp as the stallion kept pouring the smoothie. Izzy smiled as she got an idea. “BINGO!” She cried out.
Izzy then tries to save Pipp with her magic, but for some reason, hers starts to frizz out as well. “Come on, come on!” Izzy said in frustration as she tries to use her magic but fails as the ponies around watched in worry as Pipp continues to fall and gets closer to the ground. “Believe you can fly, and you will!” Izzy cried out to Pipp with an idea.
“A rainbow swirls. And make it a double.” Izzy requested a smoothie with a down expression as the earth pony stallion poured the smoothie into the cup. Izzy looks up and sees Sunset, Sunny, Zipp, and Pipp in the sky, Pipp is live streaming the whole game while Sunny and Sunset try to beat Zipp.
And then it just got worse, the butterflies they were looking for started flying away, startled by Izzy’s yelling that they flew out of the bushes. The critters, earth ponies' family, Izzy and Hitch saw the butterflies flying away. The Earth Pony parents start glaring at Izzy for ruining their chance of seeing the butterflies as their son was about to break down into tears, the critters flop onto the ground as Izzy ruins the butterfly thing, Hitch was tearing up when the butterflies flew away.
Sunset looked at the two Pegasi with an annoying look, not wanting this to continue as she took a breath and walked up to the arguing sisters as pushed them back. “Get it together, you two! We don’t have time for a sibling squabble! We have a thief to catch and a crystal to retrieve! We have magic to stabilize, harmony to balance, and most importantly, to reunite the Unity Crystal!” She scolded them and reminded them about the matter at hoofs of retrieving the Pegasus Crystal and reuniting the Unity Crystal to fix the magic before it fades.
Pipp continues. “Because Zipp is a horrible detective, Hitch keeps attracting all these creepy animals, Izzy keeps singing, and Cloudpuff keeps going in circles!” She pointed out the things that they’d been doing while tracking the thief. “So, if you’re hearing this, for the love of all ponykind, send help.” She said to the live stream, but then her phone powered down when the battery died, leaving Pipp to look in shock for a moment before she starts wailing as she stomps the ground, and she starts crying a waterfall out of her eyes. “No, my phone died! And I don’t have a charger because somepony didn’t give me enough time to pack anything.” She complained while Izzy looked at her, blaming Zipp for not letting her pack her things.
Zipp ignored Pipp’s question as she spoke to the group with a tired expression. “The good news is that whoever pony stole the crystal must be getting just as tired.” She pointed out as if they are tired, then maybe so is the thief who stole the crystal Sunny rubs her eyes tiredly as Sunset yawned from all the running/walking they did while following Cloudpuff.
“You’re up to the task, Cloudpuff?” Hitch asked the Pegasus dog underneath him with a smile, Cloudpuff barks in response as Hitch replied to him with a bored expression. “No, it’s the crystal that was stolen. If I’d been stolen, I wouldn’t be here right now.” he pointed out that if he was stolen, he wouldn’t be around, clearly stating to Cloudpuff that the crystal was stolen, not him.
“Yeah. Besides that.” Zipp said while giving Pipp a look, not what she meant by that as she placed her phone next to the shelf that Pipp took in her film and found something strange about both sides. “The vase has been moved.” Zipp pointed out that the vase is facing the opposite direction, which doesn’t match the film, which means it’s a clue. Zipp inspected the vase and found a strand of long white fur of some kind. Zipp turned to her sister with a smug look on her face. “Consider the case zipped.” She said to her sister as Pipp blew a raspberry at Zipp, ignoring it.
“Well... This would technically be my first case.” Zipp sheepishly admits as she tosses the hat away. “Which, if you think about it, means I’ve never had any unsuccessful cases either.” She added which results in Hitch and Pipp taking huffs with an unamused expression from Zipp’s answer while Sunset face hoof herself, clearly seeing that Zipp did any cases before. Zipp then turned to them as she continued with a determined smile. “So, if you’re ready, let’s get solving.” She finished as they got started with the case she brought out her phone while her friends huddled close to her to get a better look. “To catch our thief and find our missing crystal, it’s important to keep an eye out for the specifics. The minutia. The details.” She explained to them as she scrolled through her phone to find a picture that they needed. She then stopped at one of Pipp’s films she posted earlier. “Pipp filmed this before we left this morning. And as you can see from the rainbow light behind her, the crystal hadn’t been stolen yet.” She pointed out that since the rainbow was shining at the time, the crystals were still together before the Pegasus Crystal was stolen. “Look closely. What else do you see?” She asked her friends the question as they walked down the stairs to the spot where Pipp took the film.
“And that’s the thing about break-ins, Sunset…” Zipp's voice spoke out as the others looked out her direction as they saw Zipp wearing a detective hat while playfully inspecting a cactus while she looked at her friends. “...No matter how hard a thief tries, they’ll never be able to leave the scene exactly as they found it. Something’s always just a little bit off. A little bit broken… in.” She said with a look that made her like a true detective.
Sunny stepped in as she spoke out. “Nopony should be scared because we are going to solve this by beginning our search right here, where the break-in happened.” She pointed out that they would search the room for any clues to see if the thief left behind any clues that might lead them to the missing crystal.
Pipp brought out her phone as she livestreams with a sad look. “Pippsqueaks, I know you’re all scared right now… and you should be.” She said the bad news to her Pippsqueaks as Zipp looked at her sister with a look. “Your magic might be back, but it might disappear again, and then come back, and then disappear again, until it disappears completely… Because somepony stole a Unity Crystal. It’s really bad!” She gave the bad news on her live stream as Zipp had enough of her sister making things worse as she grabbed Pipp’s phone out of her hoof. “Hey! They deserve the truth.” She pointed out that she needs to tell everypony the bad news.
“You’re right, Sunset.” Sunny agrees as she turns to the rest of her friends. “These crystals are a symbol of pony kind’s ability to live in harmony. If somepony separated them, it’s because they want magic to fizzle out until it’s gone--for life to go back to the way it was before.” She stated to them as Izzy inspects the Unicorn Crystal, meaning that somepony wants the magic to go and go back to the way when there was no magic and the three tribes were divided. “But we are not going to let that happen.” She said as she placed the Earth Pony Crystal down and raised her hoof as she gave her friends a determined look. “We were able to unite the crystals once before, we can do it again. Let’s find the crystal thief and get that crystal back!” She announced to her friends, they’d reunited the crystals once, and they will do it again, and catch that theft.
“You do have a whole lot of clutter around here, Sunny,” Pipp added, agreeing with Hitch since Sunny has a lot of things in the room with her dad’s research and any other personal items she and her father collected over the years. “Remind me to send you a video on harmonious organization later.” She finished as Sunny should clean up the room later.
“Oh, no!” Izzy cried out in worry and shock as Sunny picked up the earth pony and unicorn crystals as looked at them with a grim expression.
“Haven’t I been through enough trauma for one day?” Pipp complained about not wanting to deal with any trauma.
“You’re right,” Sunny said to Zipp. “So, if our magic, except for Sunset, is going haywire, it can’t be about friendships---” Sunny stopped midsection as she might know what is wrong with a worried expression. “Oh, no.” She said in a worried tone.
Argyle then came to his daughter as he spoke to her. “Canterlot might be a bit too far for us to see from here.” He explained to her that finding the ancient capital of Equestria, Canterlot during the Guardians of Friendship time, might be a bit too far for them to see from their own home. “But you’ll find it one day,” Argyle assures Sunny with a smile that one day she will find Canterlot.
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Thanks for the corrections.
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No problem
sorry i was late.
sleeping unfortenutely
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At first i thought it was cloudpuff but i realize now that its not fur.
ITS HAIR
and there is somecreature who has this hair that we really want to see again😟
DISCORD
im so sorry Sunset.
I was also shocked and saddened when i saw Canterlot in ruins
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Im so sorry Sunset😞
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Twilight
where are you?
im so sorry sunset.
(walking up to her and pulling her into a comforting friend hug)
(Looking back at the ruins of Canterlot with a concerned but mostly saddened exspression)
Did friendship really fail?
(a single tear managed to escape)
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im sorry
but
the magic of friendship doesnt grow😞
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recommended music for the ending.
Finding nemo egg music (extended version)
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Where do i read the comic?
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like buckball?
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That’s okay.
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Yeah that is hair but let’s not jump to conclusions yet because we seen other ponies mane white.
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Yeah I feel bad for her of seeing her home in ruins
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That what we all want to know
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Yeah we all feel like doing that if a g4 mlp character saw what’s left of canterlot in ruins.
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We’ll it does most of the time, they just need to show how powerful it is
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Okay that’s a good option for a song
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We’ll someone gave me a link for the comic to read the entire comic. So I’ll send it to you when I get the chance.
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Yeah, could be, honestly I didn’t know those ponies still play them since the magic disappeared
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But it connects!
white hair; pegasus crystal, canterlot, the horn
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I see where your going with this and I see a pattern here, but let’s not jump to conclusions just yet, it could be discord or it could be something else because we know twilight and her friends pass on between g4 and g5, so I would know discord was too heart broken to stay in equestria since we’ll, we all know what happens to Fluttershy
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Then why did all of this happen?
what went wrong with friendship?💔
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The grave or reminder of Fluttershy could be in Canterlot
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That's what we all would like to know how does this all happened, but I have a feeling that the Shadow Alicorn might have something to do with it, that pony really showed bad vibes.
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Yeah, good point, and not to mention the statue of the original mane 6 that could still be in Canterlot.
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is Sunset now going to have an inner peace problem?
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I accidentely wrote Dunset
Hahahahhahaa
Sunset is DUN.
her home is gone.
She has nothing left.👍
She is tired of everything
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Well, she could be. Remember, Cantlerlot was Sunset's home when she was Celestia's number 1 student before Twilight, before she went rouge that is. So Sunset seeing of what's left of her home could really break her on the inside while devestated to see it like that.
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i'd ask you because you are the writer.
you decide if she does.
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Hey, I don't say that, Sunset may have lost everypony and everything she knows, but at least she has new friends to look after while carrying on Twilight's legacy, and at least she still have the counterparts of Twilight and the others in the human world since time moves differently between Equestria and the human world.
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im afraid to see whats left of ponyville😞
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Well, I'll think about it, because well, anypony of G4 would be devestated to see Canterlot like this if they are sent to the future.
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Same here, though since Canterlot's entrance gate was in a cave before getting to an opening to the ruins of the city, I don't even wanna start to imagining what Ponyville would look like, new Equestria, built right over old Equestria.
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but seeing everything you lived with and for is gone.
is just a health crisis or something
btter word
DEPRESSION
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Well, Sunset manage to adjust to new things while in the human world, so this should be no different, but she will have some memories gaps to filled and might have a little moment while processing of what is left of her home.
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i just dont understand how everything went down.
9 or 10 years watching how great and magical friendship is but now we have to watch how it fails after everything
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How it falls and how it was rebuilt from the new generations ponies who rebuilt Twilight's legacy, we may see what happens on how it falls, but it will give us more hints and find the answers we need on how it happened.
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Did you watch REMEMBRANCE?
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I watched it. But that was a fan base video of it, we need the true side of this story to really know how did it happened, because in season 9, the elements of harmony were destroyed by Sombra when he destroyed the tree.
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which one?
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Well say both of them, the one where Twilight sacrifice her Alicorn form and magic to revive her friends from the moral statues, and the one when time flies by and Twilight was really sad to see her friends pass, being an imortal alicorn doesn't mean a good thing, and the thing with Celestia turning evil in despressing.
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unfortenutely
Sunset and maybe Sunny will have that same fate.
i thought about it while ago, maybe being an alicorn is bad
(there are people who wants immortality but they will regret it)
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I don't think it's like that in the series, if that was the case, Celestia and luna wouldn't retire and Twilight would've still be the same height she was when she first required her Alicorn stats, but in the series she was still aging, so Alicorn just have expanded lifespands, their time would come eventurally.
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its hard for everyone.
The last friendship lesson
move on in life.
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I get that but even as an Alicorn, Twilight would still carry on and still believes the magic of friendship even after her friends passing, because even she knows the magic of friendship stills grows. And she would've been around the time of the g5 mlp, but for some reason she wasn't, so the Shadow Alicorn might have something to do with it, because she might known Twilight and her friends if she was spying on Sunny and her Friends when they brought back the magic.