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McPoodle


A cartoon dog in a cartoon world

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This story is a sequel to Javelin


A war against the dragons that was prophesied to occur centuries in the future has just reached its devastating conclusion.

Twilight Sparkle finds herself in the blasted ruins of Equestria, trying to remember what went wrong, and desperately hoping that she is not the last pony left in the world.

Two days earlier, Vinyl Scratch wanders the streets of Canterlot as an agent of Celestia, witness to a world turned mad by war and falling prey to riots and conspiracies.

A prophesy once stated that Vinyl Scratch would save Celestia and all of Equestria...but the power of prophesies has been broken forever.


This is the conclusion of the Betwixt Silver and Gold series, which began with "Javelin" and most-recently included "Whopper of the Year".

The story is Alternate Universe-tagged because the idea for it originated before Season 2 began. Well that, and it doesn't look like the dragons are going to declare war on the ponies anytime soon. The Crossover tag is for the return of some pastiches of Invader Zim characters that I've used before.

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Nice story, not a fan of colored text, though.

I never thought of her as blind, but it's awesome to think of her that way. :pinkiehappy:

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Agreed. The colored text is a bit annoying. I think that "T1" and "V1" make it obvious enough. I really like the story so far though!

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Alright, I'm willing to take the colors off, as I won't be mixing them in a single chapter. In my original, all of Twilight's chapters were in italics, which I found to be even more annoying on the eyes than the colors.

Aw, come on! Making the humans evil? Not very nice. I was kinda hoping for something like this.


I'm evil, in my own special way :pinkiecrazy:1213234

Spike has been corrupted, Or spike was killed and impersonated. :pinkiecrazy::pinkiesad2: I LIKE WHERE THIS IS GOING... As long as twilight lives. :twilightangry2:

The marked out letter reminded me of Catch-22 in a good way :pinkiehappy: I frickin love that book...

Great story, keep up the good work!

I am utterly excited to be the first to be able to review this story. It was very well written though very random and sometimes and hard to follow but it all evens out in the end. The moment you introduced Zip I realized that he was it play off of Zim. It was very daring of you to use the characters from Zim however you developed zip into character with his own personality. Things like loyalty and caring that are hard for Zim to grasp Zip seems to get. I like this differentiation. Now unto Vinyl. I love the way you portrayed her in this story mostly the fact that she was blind. I've never seen that take on her before but it now canon in my head. But the conclusion of the over all story was too fast and didn't really give much as to why Vinyl was in the mix of all this anyway. She just happened to know everybody. And at the very end it said that she saved the world with her the Golden sight and defeated a dragon using the elements of harmony. I don't remember her ever useing the elements of harmony on anything! So this confused me a bit but otherwise this is an amazing story and I hope you keep writing. I would love to see more of your work!!! (I understand you may have expected readers to already know some of this information. Meaning there may have been a prequel to this story. If that's the case then you're writing is fine and I'm sorry for nit picking. )

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Thank you very much for your review.

To correct one of your points, I did not say that Vinyl defeated a dragon with the Elements of Harmony, I said she defeated a dragon with the power of friendship, which is something available to anypony.

I am frankly amazed and gratified that you were able to follow this story as well as you did, as it's the last part of a six-part series called Betwixt Silver and Gold. The earlier stories explain how the Mane Six befriended Vinyl Scratch and the development of her character--see this blog post for details. I've tried my best to let each story stand alone, but I was never sure if I had succeeded in pulling that off.

and the Zip(Zim) fun continues

Time passes differently here. In the manner of a dream.

Wait, so... it really doesn't have a title? Seriously?

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You mean the story? Of course it had a title before it was redacted, and I'd be glad to tell you what it was, but then, of course, I'd have to have you sent to a prison in the middle of the land you'd been banished to... :trollestia:

Very cool, and now i can finish Perfect Village!

One thing bothered me though: In the end you talk about how the battle with Discord got covered up. This makes no sense. I can see how Celestia might have covered up the Longest Night and said that the Mane 6 were only 'helpers,' so to speak. Even say that 'their' party was merely a celebration of Luna's return and our protagonist's part was severely downplayed, but this is a bit much. After Discord is defeated we very specifically get a celebration of the Elements all Star Wars style, and the stained glass windows from before(you make it look like that room was just hidden in But wait... there's more!) are made very much public.

So I guess my question is this: Is this story now full-blown Alternate/Derivative Universe, eschewing show canon with all the force of a thousand Shippers, or am I merely reading something wrong somewhere and this your run-of-the-mill AltVerse with OCs and a few new adventures?

P.S. Your blog post doesn't help much in clarifying....

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Short answer: yes, full-fledged alternate universe.

I wrote the outline for this series before Series 2 even started. I made minor changes to incorporate a few things from Series 2, but as that blog you linked indicated, there are some essential parts of the series that were contradicted by canon.

The basic thought about the Discord incident is this: If Ponyville falls completely apart from a stampede of rabbits, how can these ponies possibly retain their sanity after what Discord put them through? So I decided that after that celebration (where I imagine every one of those ponies is shaking like a leaf and looking around to see if anybody remembers the horrible shame they revealed when they were discorded), the Princess made those memories fade away over time. Because they're benevolently Orwellian like that.

Alright, I believe I'm now caught up on what I somewhat spoiled for myself by reading Perfect Village out of order.

That was rather interesting, this whole AU Equestria you have built really is in fact.

“All air transport for non-pegasi has been cancelled for the duration of the crisis. They are far too inviting a target for the enemy. For the same reason, unauthorized teleportations for those unicorns capable of it are also strictly forbidden.”

Teleporting unicorns are a target?:applejackconfused:

Wow, who knew Zip had such depth?
It's pretty clear where your sympathy lies regarding that show's conflict.

Man, for a relatively short story that had a lot going on! Not sure exactly how the Emperor getting his brain fried fits with The Perfect Little Village of Ponyville, though. Orson Welles is best villain, and it would be one thing if he set that up, but Celestia and the Elements should know that the Emperor isn't going to be sending any "peace offerings".... Well, on to the sequels.

Well, this one ends better than it begins, I'll grant that.

Not my fav of the Betwixt Silver and Gold series, but at least it worked well in conjunction with the rest. All in all, this series has made for a fine binge over the last few days and I have a bunch more of your other stories marked for similar treatment in the future. Take care till then!

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