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This story is a sequel to A Vignette of Apples
Vignette Valencia was getting used to life at the Apple Family Barn. Sure, she was still adjusting to living alongside a family, especially after having helped seal a magical monster for good.
Applejack, out of nowhere, invites her to a fireworks display her friends are preparing. Mostly to properly re-introduce her to the girls.
She just hoped there would be no magical monster this time.
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Hmm. Not sure how I feel about the stuff with Vignette and Twilight. I think you could have done a lot more to set that up, and play it out. As it is the story just sort of feels like, "Vignette dislikes Princess Twi and blames her for magic, and then she doesn't as much." That just kind of feels... perfunctory, I guess?
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Yeah, I had a feeling that was gonna get brought up. I do think it would make for a decent story, so maybe I'll do the concept justice one day.
But how was the rest of the story?
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The rest of the story wasn't *bad*, but it was pretty basic to me. I do think that there could be something in a simple gathering of Vignette and the other Rainbooms, but the undercooked drama with Princess Twilight just kind of messed with that.
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I see. Well, next time I try to have Vignette meet the Rainbooms, Princess Twilight drama will be out of it.
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Or, if you intend to have drama, make *that* the focus of the matter. Because again, none of these are inherently *bad* ideas or concepts, but the execution of them needed a lot more development.
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I wholeheartedly agree.